by king_wesley
You have a great foundation set for an a top notch series. Looking forward to the next chapters
Dude! you need more of this one, really great premise, now go for it.
I would have rated this story higher but it just barely got my mouth watering and it was over. where does it go? What happens?
Make MORE!!!! You've let this one sit for too long...and I'm an impatient sorta guy.
its great so far but you really need to add more chapters
I would prefer a more lively buid up perhaps not a three chapter setup, hope the later episodes develop smoother
This series should not be in mind control. The 1st 2 "chapters had no sexual cntent and this one was just a brief masturbatory scene. This should have gone into non-sexual.
I really enjoyed these first 3 chapters. However i am disappointed it was never continued. There was so much more about to happen.
after a lousy and long start, now it´s speed up and becomes interisting.
Go on with the training and adventure. I like Mary in an allovertan for example!
It's a really good story so far, but I'm a bit sad it is incomplete. Would you consider finishing it?