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SIMPLY WOW!!
This leads the best stories ive ever read ,exellent emotions and expressions.i jus love the story,i must have read it a couple of times and it i always feel its the first time ive read it...
WOW,
WOW, AND WOW. One of the best stories I have ever read. Your writing is flawless and your storytelling is absolutely breath-taking. Bravo!
Superb!
I've read this once before. Came across it a second time, and realised halfway down page 1 that I've read this before, but still got drawn in and still found myself turned on by the love and the sex coming together like that.
Absolutely fabulous!!
- JT
Loved it!
you were right about the relationship making the sex. this was such a great story! and, it was beautifully written! good work!
:D
Absolutely amazing. It's not just a sex story, it's about loving someone, and that just makes it really beautiful. You're a fantastic writer :)
Great Love Story
The name Thuy throws me off, as it's not phoenetic, but every other aspect of the story is spot-on. Terrific characters, just enough descriptors to let us fill in our details, and a wonderful building sense of relationship...
Thanks for the great Love Story.
M
Just amazing! speechless..
More!
This was great! How about a sequel?
Great
you should make another, yes the name does need to be changed but everything else fine
Thuy is not phonetic?
That comment reminds me of a certain American exec of a very large multi-national who asked me in an angry way, (and I quote) "why can't all you Europeans speak *!*!*!*g English?" when I told him the training and comms materials would need translating into French, German, Czech, etc etc. Amazing for a man from the so-called 'land of the free'. Amazing too that 90% of the rest of the world does not speak Americanese - for it is not original English either. And I got recently chastised for not speaking English when I used the affectionate term for mother, i.e. mummy, because that was supposed to be the exclusive domain of mummified corpses!!! I've kept the comment on the bottom of one of my stories to just remind myself that we are two countries divided by a common language.
The story was lovely, bar the reference to a crack pipe. Anything to do with drugs (unless it's a fantasy story about mind control) turns me right off. I've never needed the excuse of drink or drugs to have a good fuck, so what is it with this over-used device to accelerate the story line? :)
oops
Re-read ref to crack as went back through to start and oops sorry, missed the joke. See two countries divided by....a sense of humour? lol
Very Good!
I've read a helluva lot of stories on here, but this is probably the best. Good job, man. Write another one like this
beautiful!!!
If young love has ever been described any better, I have never read it.
gorgeous!
it's gorgeous! lovely! and everything! i love their dynamic. the bantering and added details made everything so believable and realistic -- also much more romantic. i love the build-up, and like you said, it was worth it.
you have a talent for dialogue. it made me laugh and feel with jake. it's just... amazing. there's no other words. this is the best erotica i've read -- ever.
make more please! of thuy and jake. :)
Just plain great!
This is one of the best erotic stories that i've read, this is just great, five stars through the roof!!!
Omigod amazing
Wow. I've only been on this site about a month, but that was the best story I've read so far. I was touching myself from about 3 pages in. You're totally right, it's the relationship that makes the sex. I can totally relate to this story, and I'm planning on reading this story to my boyfriend, and sending a link to all my friends who are into erotic stories. Thanks for the amazing story!!
Amazing
Thrilling, poetic, deep, real, magical, endearing, mind-blowing, funny, true, powerful, enchanting, sexy, sweet, natural, captivating, honest, soul-inspiring, intense, beautiful, moving, breath-taking...
An amazing fantasy, from beginning to end. I feel like I've just been handed an awesome gift.
Thank you.
AH
One of the best ever
Just read this and remembered reading it before. To my chagrin I discovered I didn't post on it then, so here it is now. One of the finest stories I've read, on Lit or anywhere. Added to my favourites. Thank you.
Scotsman69
Witty. It makes the whole story.
I absolutely love this, it's the best I've read. The sharp wit in the dialogue is what just makes the whole story. I was giggling myself silly at some of the things they said. Loveitloveitloveit.
A 10 star story.
Great
Very good story. Love the final quote from dad. Ha!
romantic much?
this story is sooo amazing. itz romantic and it explains what some best friends go through and finally someone on here gets that sometimes sex isnt all about porn itz about how people love eachother and i thatz y i think this should be on the top lists and none of those incest, porn, bimbo, one night stands. keep writing!!!!
Wow!
This story is incredible. How my imagination was running, the details were so vivid. Vocabulary made it so easy to imagine, everything was perfect and amazingly written! This is absolutely a 10. Bring on some more!!
- Briana
wow.
this was just great. everything from the first paragraph to the last quote are just perfect. a great plot, with impressive writing to really visualize the scenes. what an amazing piece!
Perfect
I fully enjoyed reading this.. just for the fact that it wasnt all about sex but the love between them both. It made me smile and laugh in some places as some parts did remind me of me and my boyfriend.
Very well written
BEST!
omg this was amazing! best! i lovee jake!
:D
Awesome...!!!! I have fallen in love with Thuy...
This love story brought tears to my eyes..and left my cock drooling...I wish we all could loose our virginity to some one like these two...thankyou
Robin
I need to read some more of your writings
I loved this story, Well written Asian and first time. I am actually at a loss for words. It is now 2010 please write some more please.
Amazing
This was the best story I've read in a long time. Very well written and easy to relate to. I went through something like this with one of my better friends and I had the exact same thoughts as Jake.
Sweet!
Very nice story! I hope my first time is as awesome!
AMAZING
this story was just incredible! it's the best thing i've ever read! ... i hope one day i'm as lucky as Jake.
Amazing :D
Wonderful story :) I wish my next door neighbor didn't have to move to a different state. We were best friends since we we're 5 years old. I miss him so much ): I sometimes wonder what we could have been if he hadn't moved away.
Amazing :)
such a good story wish it could happen between me and the girl i love
I have been reading stuff here for months now... For some reason I hadn't read this one before...BIG MISTAKE!
This is the best fucking erotic story I ever read in my life. Very well written. THANK YOU FOR THE ORGASM!! TWICE!!
Omg
Omg I love how the dad goes " it's about dam time! Can I go home now!" I was like daaaaam XD
isn't it creepy when your own parents want you to get together :)
This reminds me of the skit off of The Holy Grail:
And there was much rejoicing....
yeaaaaaaaaaaa
I have dodged this story since i became a member and that was a mistake. Wonderful Story!
Great and SEXY!
Very good job! Very sexy, a fantasy for most of us!
greatest
to be honest this was one of the best stories on the site
Truthfully Beautiful
Funny one minute, intense the next. The realization of love, between the two just made me cry. There truly is nothing between them.
-NM
quality
Unlike most stories very well written without blatant or too much sex and ending best of all. Seems like something which might acturall happen.
I loved it
I love this story, one of the best and deserves every view it got
Lovely
Simply perfection.
wauw
stunningly beautifull
PLEASE write more of these! Honestly, the love-making was very detailed and exquisitely done, but these CHARACTERS! Jake and Thuy, my heart goes out to you both... we've got to have more! Have you written anything new about them since? They're so perfect.... 5 stars, all the way.
So totally real!
Funny, I guess I thought I'd forgotten what it was like, fumbling around until we finally got it right, but as I read this it took me back across all the years to those days of youthful innocence, lust, and love. Your descriptions are so accurate. In fact you're the only author who understands that when giving oral sex to a girl you can't figure out exactly where you are because you can't see anything, and it's only with practice that you get to know your way around down there.
For this story, on a scale of one to five, you deserve a twelve!
I'm trying to think of the right word to explain this story and it's characters, but the only word that comes to mind is 'perfect'.
A beautiful story and so readable. Thanks
Busybody mother lol
This is the type of story that makes me go "awww" and *sigh* and "I wish I had a Jake." So good. So wonderfully, absolutely, incredibly and other-such-synonyms good.
Great Story
Very enjoyable, very real ... and I'm sure it's made a few fondly remember the their first time.
Sigh
Very awesome story. My first time was during High School, with a girl I didn't even love in the back of a tiny ass Honda civic in the parking lot of a baseball stadium. Wish it had been more like this.
A million wows!
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