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Excelent story
This story was outstanding. You have a great gift for story telling. You had the tendernes and the love and it showed through. This story wasn' just sex, it REALLY was about love!
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... amazing ...
Absolutely fantastic - please write more like it!
This was, without a doubt, the best story I've read on this site... and I've been visiting it for 7 years.
Great job.
And to the naysayers below about the hymen... it was written in the characters' perspective - they may not have been fully aware of the nature of the hymen. I know I wasn't aware of the nature of mine, and infact, I did manage to finger myself prior to sex, and it felt like about an inch of penis went in before it got to my hymen the first time I had intercourse. So I wouldn't get so uppity about it, honestly.
a job well done
this is like one of the ideal first times. a perfect consummation between two best friends of opposite sex, who grew up together but never realizing, until one fateful day, that they themselves were "the one" for each other. i'd say this story was more romantic/dramatic than erotic. felt like i just came out of a movie theater after reading this, it was THAT good. well done.
Great!!
Your story had everything a love story should have. Don't pay any attention to those morons who think they're gynocologists. That cherry can be deeep or shallow. You did good.
amazing
Of course this story made me horny.
I'm so impressed that it also made me choked up. I was quite moved. It's nice to read some erotica that had emotional weight to it, yes even for a guy. The characters are actually believable.
This is probably my new favorite Lit story.
Please keep up the great work.
another anon in Canada
The best read yet on this site. So realistic emotionally
Really well done
Reminded me very much of my first time. You nailed it on the emotional level, good realistic dialogue, completely drew me in. I hope to see a lot more of your writing here.
Awesome...
Pure awesome. Writing was simply graceful--characters, plot, overall storyline was wonderful. The emotion attached to it was simply amazing. Was sad when it ended, wanted more and more! That's how great the story was.
awwwww
That was so beautiful Omigod seriously, their love was so innocent you can't help but fall in love with them, I know its a story but I'm jealous of Thuy lol
I'm Awestruck!
When I found Lit, I thought I would find beautiful writing, not that "Fuck Me Now! Fuck Me Hard!" stuff you read other places. I have finally found it. I will write for Lit, but I can only hope to come close to the feelings this piece has captured. This is the most real piece of erotic literature I have yet read. I hope some day someone thinks of my work as they think of this. I'm astounded. And wet.
Excellent
Dammit, you made me cry. lol. Your writing is so realistic..this story is crafted like a piece of artwork. You were right, their relationship laid the foundation for the sexual experience. I am really envious of Thuy and Jake's relationship. It's something i have wanted all my life. You've captured the very ESSENCE of friendship-turned-love and I can't appreciate this story anymore than I already do. Bravo!
what a class of work
Fantastic work. i loved it. very close to real... something that can really happen.
you are a master story teller :)
An Excellent Read
This was such a sweet and excellent story. You're right, it was all so worth the wait. The foundation of their relationship was excellently displayed, and the sex was hot! I did think that some of the dialogue was a little cheesy, but over all, very well done!
Incredible
Worth reading over and over again, I've sent it to tons of my friends. Thanks.
Outstanding!
sweet and hot. great characters.
Simply the Best!!
quite simply the best lit I've ever read in this site (and the only that i've felt was worthy reviewing so far) bravo! fantastic writing and incredibly believable characters. I love how real it was, with the mention of past occurances, minor characters, and the wit! I really enjoyed seeing their playful, youthful, and flirty banter of young love and first times. if I could change anything...I wouldn't change a thing! this story is what I had been searching for here, and I'm glad that your work is here. Also helped to remind me why I'm still a virgin at nearly 19, to wait for that special someone that couldn't possibly make me regret it. I can only hope I'm as lucky as Thuy and Jake! Thanks a lot for that, truly. You have done a fabulous work with this masterpiece! a true talent you have, hope all the best and perhaps you might even become (be) an acomplished writer in the future (now)? :)
Loved it!
Wonderfully written and romantic! It's also realistic how they both didn't know what to do but went with what felt right. The dialogue between them was both charming and funny. You did an amazing job of portraying the emotions of the whole experience. Thanks so much for writing this story! I hope you continue to write and share your stories with us!
Simply incomparable.
I've been reading stories from Literotica for many, many years.
This is far and away the best story I've had the pleasure of reading.
Thank you
Wonderful story
So worth the time!
10 STARS
My favorite in your story was, "If I've got you, why would I ever want to think of someone else?". That line in a different story would look cheesy. In your story, that line is PERFECT.
It's so real.
Made me want to be Jacob, in this story. Powerful, simply Powerful wrighting. I'm going to read some of your other submissions, I doubt i'll be disappointed by any of them. PLEASE KEEP POSTING.
OH my god ...
That was so amazing ... reminds me of my own first time with the biggest love ever ... thank you. Thank you for making me feel like I do right now ...
Fantastico
Such realistic characters. Beautiful. Fantastic. Keep up the exceptional work!
awesome
i loved reading it! definitely worth it!
As Monty Burns would say....."Excellent!"
Definitely worth the read. Your literary imaging made my visual imaging work overtime. Contextually brilliant and totally believable characters and storyline. I am in awe, dear Author!
Excellent Story
Great dialogue and great us of dialogue to get the story started. A solid read. Needs a little more of an ending.
Bravo!
I have a tear rolling down my eye. I hope my first time is similar to this story :) You are an excellent writer, I didnt even mind the build up to the erotic part of it.
So deliciously sweet!
What a beautiful story! Managed to make me tear up and aroused in the same breath. Keep doing what you do.
Fiction? Or did this actually happen to you?
Absolutely amazing.
Second best story I've ever read on literotica, ever.
Thanks for making the effort to write this story.
I hope you continue writing more.
Thumbs up
Solid. simply solid. If you don't write for real, you should.
Incredible!
Best story on literotica by a mile! Overpowering emotion aswell as arousal. Keep up the good work!!!
Loved it: I've returned to re-read it twice
This was a beaut: the build-up was just right
amazing
This was one of the best stories i've read on literotica! incredible work. Loved the backround knowledge and the build up. great character develpoment. keep up the great work!
Perfect to every last word.
Amazing. I loved reading it and I loved how the words painted such a picture in my mind. Please become a professional writer, for the better of the writing community.
AMAZING!
Absolutley loved it! One of the best stories on literotica.
Thank you for writing this. Keep it up!
Oh Love
If that happened to me, I would not be able to stop smiling for several years. I'd have to get therapy.
So real
I believed every word, it was like I was there. Great story I loved it..
Amazing
I loved this story. Thank you for writing it.
awesome
loved wat the dad says at the ending. rofl
awesome one of thee best
made me think of the first I had sex too . Buying condums .
loved what the dad says at the ending also
fantastic
Just loved it.
Its beyond just sex. its all about feelings and emotions..
this is far too great and is beyond erotica. its love..
I knew her (now my wife) for about 6 yrs before we did it. I just went back into those days.... sometimes it just takes too long to realize...
fucking excellent
best erotic story i've read. good work.
Love, re-awakened
My boy and I have been dating for about a year and a half now, and we have known each other for almost 8 years altogether. I would say we had a similar kind of relationship as you and Thuy. Except as extremely platonic online buddies, me in central Indiana, him in central Ohio. I think in the back of our minds we always secretly desired each other throughout whatever it was we had over AIM. Anyway, I decided we needed to meet each other in August of 2007. So I drove over and spent the weekend. It was straight out of a movie. We fell madly in love the very first night, on the "mountain" (the giagantic hill in the center of town in the public park) at the exact same moment, sitting in silence underneath the stars and a meteor shower we had no clue was going to happen. Things got a little crazy when we went back to his friend's basement where I was staying for the weekend.
I ended up moving here 2 months later to be with him and continue our relationship. We are still not living together as we try to live our lives simply, and following Jesus, trusting God. And believe firmly in His teachings. So we are waiting until we're married. I did take his virginity that first night though, but we haven't since then. (which, if you're confused, hmmm she was just talking about God and posting a comment on a story she read about on Literotica? what?) well that's why I'm here. We can't, but I've still got to take care of buisness!!!
Reading your story really brought back all the great things I had forgotten about from the earlier parts of our relationship when everything was new and there was so much to discover, it was so overwhelming!!
I adore it, this was written well and very beautifully, very raw and honest but tender and real at the same time.
It makes me wish my purity ring was a wedding band instead...
I am pretty sure if he were here with me right now in bed, I would not be able to walk tomorrow morning.
THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
incredible
This story was simply amazing.
It brings two thoughts to mind...the awkwardness of my first time with my first love...
...and the feelings I have but may never admit to the woman I call my best friend.
Wow!
Excellent. Brought back memories af my own teenage fumblings, longer ago than I care to tell you!
Really nice
Nice, detailed, and very very sexy. Keep on writing, please!
just lovely
Such a sweet and lovely way to spin a story around the first time.
just loved it.
A really fine story
Amazing well written, a compelling dialogue, and touches on
so many different moments of the real world that the couple share with us. Thanks for giving us this work of art.
hilarious
that was good, and suprisingly funny!
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