All Comments on 'Evidence'

is as heavy as you want to read it. "Evidence" flows

well for me. All the pieces smooth, I just can't

figure out the puzzle. sand s.

the pull from

north to south

mixed with particals

a water drop

is enough to remind

and keep this thing

alive

A+, miz teacher.

curt

I was able to finish the poem but it didn't help me understand what in the well.... you were saying??? I read your poem <grin

"you come to me on days of trancendence"

good open, followed by the crow dropping the cross, demands attention

#3 is a bit shopworn, but a nice visual

#4 blows me away, consider changing imaginary to imagined to mirror other line more closely.

#5 - like

#6 I like the use of the words you(3) coming(2) fall(2) down(2); hypnotic

#3,4,5 have hair, easy enough to put it als into #2, consider a unifying word,

*11

deep and different...very visual!

good write!

~LB~

I just love 'in voice-over photographic collages' Also I think you are right, 'it must be raining somewhere in the North'

ty,BD

This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,500 poems.

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