Broken Dream

Second Comment

Reread this tale. She was a fucking whore skank slut cunt wife who thought she could get away with screwing around at work. Fuck her. Husband was a little wimpy at the end but he didn't take her back. He thought about it but common sense won out. If not now she would have cheated down the road so he made the right decision.

I hate fucking cheaters.

First Comment

Only a no-life loser would be working his way through the thousands of cheating wife stories here and re-reading and re-commenting - saddest, most pathetic no-life loser ever.
Poor shut-in, there but for the grace of god....

Four - No Five Because...

The last three lines! He's thinking - idiot, he knew when he heard her in the restaurant - I'll make it up to you!!!

She didn't respect him or her marriage to stay honest. The excitement was a big turn on and any woman would sense that she was being seduced ... AND...she liked it. Liked the attention so much that she stayed out a lot and lied to her husband.

The way this was written was understandable, any husband loving his wife would be, to some degree, in denial and making excuses/justifications for her actions but reality surfaced and even with reluctance, he did what he knew needed to be done - she was a cheat, willingly and he would neither forget it or ever trust her again.

Good story - Thanks!

This Started Shaky Then Just Went To Hell In A Handbasket

about the time you invoked Navy UDT, a unit that stood down in 1983. We'll leave alone that you don't know the difference between loose and lose, since you're l0ser, but c'mon! The husband's boss and colleagues show up at lunchtime at HER workplace?? wtf? The FBI let him sit in on a sting op???? Blow me. Dude, you're why they won't legalize it!

Great potential story.

The story had all the elements for greatness but just didn't seem to work.

Great start

This is a great start, I hope to read the next segment when it published.

There's a story in there somewhere

But you need some serious help from a good editor and spellcheck would benefit you too. Leave the Navy Seal crap out. You obviously know nothing about them. Nor do you know anything about how the FBI works cases. And what kind of man doesn't stop his wife when he KNOWS she's about to get into trouble? He certainly demonstrated his lack of love for her by his actions. I gave you a "1" because there were SO many things wrong with this whole mess.

Logic

1. It was up to her to walk away from the perverts at work.
2. Once he found out about the perverts, it was up to her husband to call her out and demand and end to it.
3. She chose to go to Denver and officially quit her marriage by cheating and her husband officially allowed her to leave with out telling her what he knew and that she was out of the marriage.
4. Everyone got what they wanted. She didn't want to be married and have kids, she wanted to cheat - she cheated. She would not have risked the marriage if cheating was not more important to her. He wanted to get rid of a cheater - he did. He would not have let her walk out of his life if she was worth it - she wasn't. There really is no need to blame anyone, they both made their choices. Funny how things kind of work out for the best when you think it through! Oh you can feel sorry for Laura, but she obviously didn't really want a good life, she wanted to be a dirty little hooker. He wanted a wife, a life partner, a mother for his children - selfish sluts need not apply.

Four...Because

You left the door open for reconciliation.
Remember = she was meeting with Chaz 2-3 times a week and treating her husband like he was an insecure ass.
In the restaurant she kissed Chaz back - easily and then...when she left Chaz at the elevator to meet hubby she ran back and aggressively kissed Chaz.
She ALWAYS knew she would fuck Chaz and would have already if hubby hadn't kept interfering.
So...even tho she was drugged in Denver, she went to Chaz fully intent to fuck him - husband - give me a break, she had decided weeks ago that she was Chaz's woman so...
Divorce - Damn Right. Yes, she was shook, learned a major lesson but at some point she would have to deal with the fact that she was easily persuaded to fuck around! Would that ever change...who knows - doubtful!
So finally, you left the door open in the last four sentences of a good story...you really pissed some of us off with that crap, and after writing a good common sense and potential reality story...DAMN YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

***

Couldn't go any higher. I never did see a real reason for him to wait as his "innocent" wife was pulled deeper into the mess. Good writing but the plot could not support itself.

That was pretty

bad. Needed an editor/proofreader.

messy

can't read this shit. get an editor. a good one.

3

3 is the best I can do. too many questions about story

fool

could have stopped her 100 times. this crap needs editing. 1/5

Are People Really THIS STUPID?!

The only thing the dopey husband has in common with a seal,is the intelligence of one with flippers! What a dumb fuck! If he really loved his wife he would have cut it off at the restaurant,confronted her,and MADE her see what Chaz was up to!
- Because his Fed friend asked him to,he sat by while GladAss drugged him and then watched his wife get fucked?! A Seal? More like a weasel! He's as responsible for the marriage ending as she is!
- All that remains at the end of this shit should be that the world is a better place because these two shitty people didn't have an off-spring!!!

she was thrown to the wolves by her husband but she is simply a whore

why regret throwing out garbage? 1*

Thanks for the story.

It is always hard to put your work out for others. That being said, I agree that you need an editor. They catch things, help you see different points of view, they generally help you with your stories. There are many good volunteer editors on this site, so use one and keep writing.

Seriously consider creating a second chapter for this story. Review some of the comments and see if any can be fleshed out. If he understands he made a mistake, maybe he could fix it.

A story like I like 'em. She got what a whore wife would deserve in real life!