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Needs a trim
This poem gives you a rush of blood to the head when you read it. Couple of suggestions: 1) typos: I've noticed several typing errors 2) length: I think its just a tad too long, think about going through it with a comb cutting out anything which detracts from what you want to say.
a place~
and time, I don't think it is too long, maybe brake it into stanzas, a break or two, but the whole poem tells one thing, passion in a powerful write. I enjoyed it.
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VD's call seems about right;
Run a spell check but then still run through again with your eyes,
For spell check won't tell whether bare or bear is appropriate;
Then split it into at least 2, preferably 3 strophes
To make the reading flow more smoothly.
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