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I have read....
I have read my fair share of incest stories, since I started revisiting this site. I loved the story! As it had a good amount of plot to it, the way the characters interacted with each other, the vivid descriptions of the events that took place. I like stories like this one, where there is an equal amount of sex and plot. I have to say that I am very impressed with this author's writing ability! I am working on a story of my own, and can only HOPE to attain this level of ability! If this author is still writing, I have only one request: KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
P.S. To the person who left the anonymous comment entitled 'Wonderful Worderful', I would like to say that I am happy for you, that you have stood for what you believed in and felt what, in your heart, was comfortable for you. Though I don't know that I could ever do something like that with my own daughter, I have fantasized about it a few times! I'm happy for you!
Excalent
that was rathr good ty
I love this story...
I could hardly contain myself! It was that well-written!
Top notch!
Loved the slow build up - very horny
Nice
With exception to the racist slurs in the early parts, was by far the best incest story i've stumbled accross online. Thank you for not writing drivel like "Zomg i think mom is hot so we fucked whil i jeked off myself on her hug titz". You see too much of that on these sights. A real writer you are.
Excellent Writing!
Im new to this site and have read just a couple of stories here. But your story by far was the BEST! keep writing... Blessings Be Upon You...
Amazingly refreshing
I loved this story. Its so nice to read a story that is well thought out and planned, its enticing and has flow to it, its not like alot of these stories where its like i saw, i fucked, i came. You are a very talented writer indeed. Please keep up the good work.
Super sexy and Romeantic
wow i mean it makes one think and right now im calling up my girl so we can read it together
Excellent - 11 out of 10 ...
Dear Scouries, I have read I think most if not all of your stories. I think this is by far your best, and I thank you for it. The story itself is excellent; the storyline is complete - it doesn't just end at the first bonk but actually has a conclusion, and there are very few errors, so you obviously proof your work before submitting it. May I just say, you write 'she pled' ... she didn't. In English, American or otherwise, 'she pleaded'. The other is 'there', as in 'there going away'. "There" in this case is an abbreviation of 'they are', which written sounds and feels much better. Just my two-pennyworth! But again, thanks. Regards, Michael
Excellent - 11 out of 10 ...
Dear Scouries, I have read I think most if not all of your stories. I think this is by far your best, and I thank you for it. The story itself is excellent; the storyline is complete - it doesn't just end at the first bonk but actually has a conclusion, and there are very few errors, so you obviously proof your work before submitting it. May I just say, you write 'she pled' ... she didn't. In English, American or otherwise, 'she pleaded'. The other is 'there', as in 'there going away'. "There" in this case is an abbreviation of 'they are', which written sounds and feels much better. Just my two-pennyworth! But again, thanks. Regards, Michael
So realistic tha I lived the whole story
Your story is so convincing. I have 2 beautiful "daughters" and they are 16 and just 15. I am fighting the desire that I feel for them but it is only a matter of time before I succumb. The complication is that i have a beautiful young wife as well and I love them all.
WOW
Your stories turn me on SO much. It's incredible. You're totally the best writter on this site. They're SO sexy. I love it when you tell it from the kids POV. Like in this and the one about the Soldier Boy and him mom. I'm a younger adult and WOW it's stellar. Please right more of that type of story. pretty please???
Excellent
So much love and beauty in this story . True and Real. Loved it .
Absolutly wonderful . You are a genuine Writer.
Wake up and try again.
a little more tasteful and less anticipation... try not to indulge your delusions. keep the pace steady and unabided by ridiculous overtures (she's naked in front of him and wants him to fuck her now and he waits til Paris...get real!). don't infatuate your ego this was a trial run ...run amuck.
By far you are the best
Your all the stories not only arouses me but becomes a lifetime pleasure you procede so gentally while other writers prefers mindlessly paced harsh & rude stories but still i would rank this story of yours 2nd as the story i liked most was "momma.. I groaned..."-that too submitted by you
simply amazing
Your story was so realistic...I could feel the undying love between the two....great story please continue to write
racism
i liked the actual plot of the story and it was well-written and delicious in parts but i have to comment on your revolting language about the 'arabs'. i, too, am blond and american but it gives me no right to make judgements on any other person based on their race. it disgusted me, i think you should openly apologise.
take on the story
I thought the story was excellent, and very well written! I think the 4months leading up to June aren't really needed, but the ending culminated very well, and the epilogue definitely enhanced the story line! thanks x
Beyond Sexy
Brilliantly written! The best erotica I've read!
Ridiculous ending
I really enjoyed this story (minus the racisim, which seemed really out of place) until the end. They got married? And had two children? That's ridiculous. As doctors they should know that imbreeding is never a good idea.
The ending was such a let down since the rest of the story was so good. You should just remove the epiloge and leave the readers guessing.
Loved it over and over again. Beautifully written
I became so engrossed with the terminology that you used to described the events and actions we all love. Good sex..and primal nature. Loved it and will pass it along.
oh my
very climactic
WOW from NV
WOW!
RACIST
I like it but it's racist!!
amazing
This story is amazing. I got so into the context that it was more like a book with a happy ending. I loved it, it was adorable and extremely erotic.
Tremendous
A tremendous story and well written. It takes both and you did it not respective of idiotic comments about racism. The only problem such people have is a pseudo faithfulness to the Judeo-Christian Ethic to which they don't subscribe in fact only the shadow of it. This is a story and a beautiful one. It isn't a political critique and I'm sure it wasn't meant to be.
:O
Damn.. You don't even know.. This story was.. THE BEST. I've never seen anything like it! 5 Stars!
REAL PORN!!
the mnd need not lay passive but enjoy working out the whole sex scenery and all the little details incorperated therein
Good
I liked it but I didn't appreciate the racist comments, it is actually the arabs that are circumcised as it is part of their religion to be so, to not be circumcised is terrible in that region, sorry I lived there for a few years and I would know *wink* and they aren't dirty in the cities only in the country just like in America
Disbelief
Your writing is technically good, which is always nice to find here. However, the dialogue in the first page was so out there and unrealistic I just couldn't suspend disbelief and I gave up. I realize this is fiction but I still like characters to behave in a reasonably believable fashion.
I was also turned off by the Arab comment. Maybe if you'd set it up so we knew this girl was ignorant, it wouldn't have jarred so much.
Lots of mistakes. One defense.
In the spirit of constructive criticism, you need an editor. If you do have an editor, you might consider getting a different one. The possessive of 'body' is 'body's'. You used the plural: 'bodies'. And there are other mistakes. I will have to agree with someone who posted that the dialogue is pretty unbelievable. There were lots of good things about the way that you wrote. Now, I thought the father's reactions to his daughter's advances were minimal. This was pretty disapointing.
To the people concerned about the Arabs, it was only a dream. You cannot control what you dream, therefore you should not say what should or should not have been in her dream. Even the "racist" comments. Perhaps Stephanie didn't know that in actuality, that they are cut. The beauty of it is that it doesn't matter! It's a dream!
When addressing someone, there should be a comma. For example: "Do you like my new dress, Daddy?"
Hot except...
"The only problem such people have is a pseudo faithfulness to the Judeo-Christian Ethic to which they don't subscribe in fact only the shadow of it." What a bucket of hot, breaded, 11 herb-and-spices crap. The defamation has nothing to do with a religion and everything to do with an ethnicity, debasing a group of people who, depending on what area of the world they live in, may or may not be religious at all. While I agree you could use an editor, I found your situation and characters hot and kinky, until you completely lost me with your racist comments. But hey, I guess if we're all gonna go hog wild sinning with incest we might as well be racist bigots, right? Because one just involves our own preferences but the other doesn't hurt anyone or perpetuate an unnecessary stereotype... no...
I'd concentrate on writing a substantial INCEST story and leave the racism to a blog no one will bother reading. You had a good thing going until then.
I love it
wow and double wow. Wot a fantastic orgasm i've just had !!!!!!!!!!x
Bravo!
Congradulations! Thats got to be one of the best written stories I've ever read on this website, emotionaly and in sex appeal, you get a double thumbs up!
Very good...
There were probably some grammar/spelling errors as people have said, but they did not wreck the story for me at all...some of the grammar on Literotica is so terrible that I can't bear to read it, and it certainly wouldn't turn me on if I did.
I found the "racist" comments funny more than anything, it seemed to me that Stephanie obviously made up that nightmare on the spot and we all say ridiculous things when we lie sometimes...on the topic of racism, the way it ended with the incestuous couple living in the South was a tad too stereotypical for my liking, but it doesn't detract from the story a lot.
But nitpicking aside, it was a damn good story. Beautifully written, you have a fabulous imagination...I've never felt compelled to leave a comment on a submission before, so I hope you see it as a compliment. I'm only giving you 75 because it wasn't long enough, hehehe...
Keep up the good work, my dear.
i liked it
very good story
Pretty good
I would recomend getting a editor to proof read your stories before submission because you have a lot of potential and the story is good as it is but there is room for improvement grammaticly speaking.
wow.
I've never really read sex stories before tonight, but this was amazing. Stephanie is actually my name so it made this story all the more amazing for me. Just wow. I loved it. You're an incredible writer.
undescribable ! !
probably the best story i have read in a very very long time, love it
Soo Good
God I loved it! made me soo hot. I wish my own father was still around. I have read this in the past and I keep comming back. Thank you!-bookietwo
wow
i thought your story was fantastic! i have read it before and loved it then too. from the romance to the sex i just above all loved the story line. and it really doesnt matter if you need an editor or not most of us got the visual anyway...one of the better stories around here
Losing her virginity
Why oh why didn't you let her give her virginity to her dad?!!! I, a man, nearly cried when she threw away her most precious and irreplaceable gift that was meant for her husband. Their perfect and inspiring and continuing story (even with the incest - or perhaps their union was much more valuable to them because of the family tie) was really damaged by this flaw. Certainly her father was no virgin, but when her - then their - love was the center of their lives and this was understood by her, there was just no excuse for her having a tawdry fuck fest, more than once as you told us, with an old boyfriend.
LOVED THE STORY
HOTTER THAN HOT. I COULD NOT STOP READING!
loved it
good for the two of you.I just wich i had someone like you
wow!
very nice, super hot, amazing writing!!
5 stars!
Wow
Loved it
Get over yourself.
For being the self proclaimed "Literotica's #1 Author," you're giving the rest of us authors a bad rap. Get off your high horse and get an editor. Your ego will recover in due time. Typical and boring, went on too long, suspense didn't work out for you in this one. It wasn't the story that got all these people to bust a nut, it was the incest.
too slow
There was only one page of hot stuff. All the other stuff was boring..... I actually skipped 2-3 pages. I've seen better.
Fabulous
You worked "the device" to perfection. By "the device," I mean the sexual tension created when both persons desperately want sex, but one of them is trying to resist. When this device is deployed as well as you did in this story, the erotic effect is stupendous.
1 to 5?? I give it a 6
Better than all the other stories I have read
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