I think the story was very good. I hate it when all the story is just "the hot stuff" as one person put it. It needs some STORY to it.
BUT, i do think you are too full of yourself. There are other great authors on here, some of which I enjoyed more than yours. You ARE good, there is no doubt about that. But your editor's notes almost ruin the enjoyment for me. Without the editor's notes I would give you a 75, but your cockiness ruined it for me.
Sorry!
by
Anonymous05/28/09
Wish I Could
I totally LOVED ur story! This is one of the best ones I have read. Just the Desription got me to orgasm. I wish I Had some one like him to fuck. Live a happy life with him and keep on making those stories.
by
Anonymous06/04/09
FANTABULOUS
ITS AN AMAZING STORY. REALLY LOVED THE WAY U BUILT IT UP TO THE HARDCORE CORE OF THE STORY. THANKS.
by
Anonymous06/05/09
uh!
all the morals seem wrong, but what can i say?!?!??? truly amazing!!
by
Anonymous06/08/09
No story, couldn't even get excited.
I hate to leave a bad comment, I really do. I'm not going to tell you the story was horrible, you're obviously a gifted writer, as apparently I am as well because I too write on this site and rarely get below a 100% on every comment. I am leaving my name out though for the sole reason that I don't post comments under my writing name.
With that said, I think your story would be SO much better with less sexual talk and more of an actual story. Plus your main character Stephanie talks like a child which makes the story ridiculously unbelievable. Again, I'm sorry to be harsh, I really do intend to just give advice.
While some people love your story, I guess they are also the same people who can get off simply by watching meaningless porn. There are other's like myself who need an actual believable story to get any kind of excitement from it. This was not one of those stories, as I couldn't even get a tingle. I hope you write another story that doesn't have the father and daughter together in bed naked in the first few paragraphs. No build up.
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Anonymous06/10/09
Too Hotttttt
It should have a score of ten! I'm 48 and dreamed of this with my eldest daughter. Partway through part 1, I had to release my cock from my jeans! I don't know how I made it to the end of part 3 without squirting cum all over! Fast then slow and the wet, slippery, precum lubed my cock like never before! This story reading is new to me, I'll be back!
by
Anonymous06/13/09
Great story
WOW!!!!!!! Super hot story! I could not keep my finger off my clit while I read your story. I wish that was daddy & me in your story! I run around the house in my bra & panties and I know daddy likes me , because of the lump his cock makes in his boxers. I`m kinda scared because I am only 16 years old! After reading your story , I`m going for it , I`m going to walk into his bedroom naked jump on bed & suck his cock!!!! Wish me LUCK!!!!
by
Anonymous06/14/09
best
this is one of the best storys i have ever seen i could make real money writing good luck
by
Anonymous06/19/09
Did not like that Arab hating crap.
I loved the story but that racism really got me pissed and it ruined it a bit.
by
Anonymous06/26/09
Greatest one EVER
i loved the way your sotry built up, and id love to read another, or if you write a series. the title on the site struck me as odd, but ive seen 2 others like that. 1-5, i give it a 10
by
Anonymous06/29/09
Not that good
It was not bad, it's a bit lousy and unbelievabul tough.
But the sexual part was ok... Not the best, I have read much better stories and as others said you need an editor.
And racism comments were totaly inapropriet and not right, there is a really hot Arabian singer his name is wael kfoury, you should check him out, I had so many orgasms thinking about him.
BTW not all Arabs are Muslim, last year we had at our school a youth exchange program, and there was an Christian Arabian from palatien and a Muslim from Egypt and they were really nice and they don't hate us...and there was a really stupid thing you said, that they hate us because we are beutiful, now that's really stupid... Hahaha.
Another thing, you start the story sexually, you should start it as a regular story and then the sexual stuff, that is much exiting.
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Anonymous07/02/09
Love your story
I love your story. It's very imaginative and well written.
by
Anonymous07/04/09
Very hot, but dude...WTF is up w/ the racism?
Title gets the point across, I think.
by
Anonymous07/05/09
Cool and Nice
Girl i loved it. i love the way how it been told. i really can imagine a great love of simplest purity. i loved it
by
Anonymous07/05/09
all sholud have this experience
of all things that could ever happen to you this is the most well the greatest ever
by
Anonymous07/06/09
comment
it was good but a little long
by
Anonymous07/10/09
its ok
i thought it was ok it took a little too long to get to the end and it was a little boring in some parts but it was ok overall
by
Anonymous07/11/09
Fantastic!
This story is unlike any other! The description and length of this story is just fantastic. I usually am not into the "Family" type of stories, but you've basically changed my views!
-Looking forward to more stories from you 'Scouries!'
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Anonymous07/11/09
Fuck u hater
wat the fuck do u hav against us arabs u fucking bitch we are no diferent than any1 else in the world
by
Anonymous07/12/09
Fantastic
I am a young girl just starting with puberty and I am learning about sex,sexaual tension,love and I think If thta were real I would put a vote towards I think that u should be able to love whomever u want be it ur father or anyone
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Anonymous07/12/09
Nice Story, but...
As much as I enjoyed the story, I almost didn't bother reading past the first page. Your comments about Arabs was uncalled for and quite frankly, stupid. The fact that you portrayed this character as a good looking, healthy, smart, happy, blond American, who happens to be CHRISTIAN!!? seems beyond me, considering the type of story you're telling here. Yes, most stories on this site are fiction/fantasy, but I think you need to base yourself in reality.
by
Anonymous07/14/09
Delicious
Loved it wonderful build to the climax!!!!
by
Anonymous07/15/09
I am glued
Beautiful, except for the racism. The daughters lust for her father is wrote to true magnificence
This is one of the first stories I read and reading it again after a long time I think it`s the best, Well done!!
Keep on going you have a special talent...
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Anonymous07/23/09
needs editing
This is honestly one of the best incest stories on the site. But the racism totally killed it for me. What a shame! Needs to be edited out. Why can't you just make it a bunch of men raping her instead of "greasy Arabs" as you put it?
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Anonymous07/26/09
Genetic concerns otherwise superb!
I loved the story! The only issue I had with it was related to recessive genes. Allow me to elaborate : Within a typical individual there are a certain number of "recessive genes" that will manifest only when said gene is inherited from both parents. Common examples are blue eyes or blonde hair. These are examples that are harmless. There are other recessive genes that have very deleterious consequences. They are not present in a large percentage of the general population but within a given family..... well father/daughter the chance for the same gene manifesting are 50%. Given that a typical individual posseses an average of 8 recessive genes of a deletarious nature the chance of a father / daughter coupeling producing three healthy offspring is statistically highly improbable. jmhopkins@gmail.com please comment.
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Anonymous07/28/09
Attention
All of you about he racist BS i didnt even notice i was focusing on the story thats the problem with you people always looking for any reason to bitch anyway great story
I love the fact all the people commenting that it was racist are anonymous. If you are so upset leave your information and I will tell you why it is that part was used. It doesn't matter of the enemy was Arab, Negro, Indian, or white hell they could have been Asian for all that matters maybe it has something to do with the current war. I don't know the author nor do I pretend to know what his or her motivation was. All I know is that it is a wonder piece of work that I hope to be able to compete with someday. However being pre-med i am so swamped myself my writing time is currently limited. If it weren't for my wonderful Sara I would drown, and I would have never seen this site or been exposed to father/daughter incest in real life. It was a bit shocking to me at first but it is a way of life I have grown to accept.
Excellent story, I could live the story through the her eyes and I think that was the just of what you wanted. Regardless of the subject mater, this is a love story.
by
Anonymous07/31/09
wow
awesome story, please keep it up
by
Anonymous08/01/09
almost perfect
I have to take issue with your utterly pointless bouts of unbridled racism. Ruined a fine story (to a degree).
Still one of th best though.
Magnifique.
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Anonymous08/02/09
good
great story, but i agree, was the racism needed?
by
Anonymous08/02/09
Best yet
Love overcomes all stumbing blocks. A marriage
contract does not make a marriage, love between
two humans is a beautiful thing.
by
Anonymous08/06/09
sso sexy and slow
one of the best ones i have read recently ! very sexy and slow and builds up to a hot ending!But i wanted the seductive bit to be longer and not end
The sex scene was of course well written, but the character set up was a turn off for me. The "innocent" blonde "oh daddy save me from the big bad Arab man" just ruined it for me. I guess my sexuality is on a whole other side of the spectrum and that's why I really couldn't enjoy your story as much as I'd like too. I mean your female sexual lead just came off as an air head. "they hate us cause we're blonde, good looking, fit, American and christian"?!? Come ON. What is she five? Being a writter myself I don't focus on grammatical errors and things of that caliber that much. Because what a lot of people lack in their stories is the sensuality and the lacivious connection the two (or perhaps more than two) sexual leads share. And you definately brought that to the table. But the characters is what makes the stories HOT. And I'm sorry, but your characters ruined it for me. But keep it up though, you really got a talent for describing a good sex scene.
by
Anonymous08/10/09
WOW!!!
Fantastic story
by
Anonymous08/14/09
Whoa....amazing
that was freakn awesome i loved every bit of it
by
Anonymous08/27/09
AMAZING
Best thing i ever read ever! It made me really horny because i fancy a girl called stephanie and she is really fit! if you could give a score of 200 i honestly would. fantastic read
by
Anonymous08/30/09
wow:.....it was good
if i want to write, i can't for sure be even a speckle close to ur work. Congratulations. Please write , and u can contact me .... all_mits@yahoo.com.my
by
Anonymous09/01/09
Incredible
Wow, admittedly the innocent bit was played up a bit too much but I didn't really mind as I read it. Amazing story, well told, nice ending.
by
Anonymous09/02/09
Ignorant
You know nothing about Arabs and killed this entire story by your nasty racial comment in it. Arabs do not go around raping people you need to learn to get your facts straight. Your ignorant and really believe Arabs hate Americans . You probably believe they're all terrorists too. Your writing about incest and you think you have the right to write a comment like that? You disgust me.
You know nothing about Arabs and killed this entire story by your nasty racial comment in it. Arabs do not go around raping people you need to learn to get your facts straight. Your ignorant and really believe Arabs hate Americans . You probably believe they're all terrorists too. Your writing about incest and you think you have the right to write a comment like that? You disgust me.
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Anonymous09/04/09
Love my daughter
I loved your story it was awsome.I have lunch this week with my oldest daughter who is 24.And I plan to finish what we started on her 18th birthday.I only ate her that day but after reading your story its time to finish.
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Anonymous09/17/09
OFF THA CHAIN
I FUCKING LOVED IT AND I HOPE THAT U KEEP WRITING THESE WONDERFUL STORIES AND BLESSING ME
by
Anonymous09/18/09
Some people can't read
The people who made comments that the blonde was an air head because of her Arab comments missed a major point. She was saying those things off the top of her head in jest. She never went to sleep and didn’t actually have a dream but she was making that up as she went so she didn’t have to say daddy I came to bed naked to feel you naked.
She was only pretending to act as a child to not talk about the sex she was there for.
I have read a bunch of your stories & even marked you as one of my favorite authors, but this story took the cake... bought the farm... and has the Midas touch!!! The writing was amazing, the dialogue felt like it was real, and the eroticness of the whole story was, on a scale of 1 - 10, somewhere in the triple digits!!! After reading this story (not to mention all your others... sorry for not commenting earlier) I am DEFINITELY a fan for life!!!
~Mathias
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Anonymous09/22/09
Best Father daughther
This is the best Father Daughter I have ever read
by
Anonymous09/27/09
A Magical Experience
You are a wonderful story teller, a sorceress with words. What a delicious torment the little girl was for her father, from the moment she learned of her true feelings for him. He didn't stand a chance!
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Anonymous10/01/09
loved it!
wow..what a story!it gave me butterfly feelings in my stomach...it was more than an erotic story..a love story.it surely showed a pure love and sexual desire between a father and a daughter and the ending was most pleasant,maybe it is forbidden though,but still it has a big pleasure,a success...wish to have stories like these,full with passion,more from u,please!keep writing.!!
English
Good, but...
I think the story was very good. I hate it when all the story is just "the hot stuff" as one person put it. It needs some STORY to it.
BUT, i do think you are too full of yourself. There are other great authors on here, some of which I enjoyed more than yours. You ARE good, there is no doubt about that. But your editor's notes almost ruin the enjoyment for me. Without the editor's notes I would give you a 75, but your cockiness ruined it for me.
Sorry!
Wish I Could
I totally LOVED ur story! This is one of the best ones I have read. Just the Desription got me to orgasm. I wish I Had some one like him to fuck. Live a happy life with him and keep on making those stories.
FANTABULOUS
ITS AN AMAZING STORY. REALLY LOVED THE WAY U BUILT IT UP TO THE HARDCORE CORE OF THE STORY. THANKS.
uh!
all the morals seem wrong, but what can i say?!?!??? truly amazing!!
No story, couldn't even get excited.
I hate to leave a bad comment, I really do. I'm not going to tell you the story was horrible, you're obviously a gifted writer, as apparently I am as well because I too write on this site and rarely get below a 100% on every comment. I am leaving my name out though for the sole reason that I don't post comments under my writing name.
With that said, I think your story would be SO much better with less sexual talk and more of an actual story. Plus your main character Stephanie talks like a child which makes the story ridiculously unbelievable. Again, I'm sorry to be harsh, I really do intend to just give advice.
While some people love your story, I guess they are also the same people who can get off simply by watching meaningless porn. There are other's like myself who need an actual believable story to get any kind of excitement from it. This was not one of those stories, as I couldn't even get a tingle. I hope you write another story that doesn't have the father and daughter together in bed naked in the first few paragraphs. No build up.
Too Hotttttt
It should have a score of ten! I'm 48 and dreamed of this with my eldest daughter. Partway through part 1, I had to release my cock from my jeans! I don't know how I made it to the end of part 3 without squirting cum all over! Fast then slow and the wet, slippery, precum lubed my cock like never before! This story reading is new to me, I'll be back!
Great story
WOW!!!!!!! Super hot story! I could not keep my finger off my clit while I read your story. I wish that was daddy & me in your story! I run around the house in my bra & panties and I know daddy likes me , because of the lump his cock makes in his boxers. I`m kinda scared because I am only 16 years old! After reading your story , I`m going for it , I`m going to walk into his bedroom naked jump on bed & suck his cock!!!! Wish me LUCK!!!!
best
this is one of the best storys i have ever seen i could make real money writing good luck
Did not like that Arab hating crap.
I loved the story but that racism really got me pissed and it ruined it a bit.
Greatest one EVER
i loved the way your sotry built up, and id love to read another, or if you write a series. the title on the site struck me as odd, but ive seen 2 others like that. 1-5, i give it a 10
Not that good
It was not bad, it's a bit lousy and unbelievabul tough.
But the sexual part was ok... Not the best, I have read much better stories and as others said you need an editor.
And racism comments were totaly inapropriet and not right, there is a really hot Arabian singer his name is wael kfoury, you should check him out, I had so many orgasms thinking about him.
BTW not all Arabs are Muslim, last year we had at our school a youth exchange program, and there was an Christian Arabian from palatien and a Muslim from Egypt and they were really nice and they don't hate us...and there was a really stupid thing you said, that they hate us because we are beutiful, now that's really stupid... Hahaha.
Another thing, you start the story sexually, you should start it as a regular story and then the sexual stuff, that is much exiting.
Love your story
I love your story. It's very imaginative and well written.
Very hot, but dude...WTF is up w/ the racism?
Title gets the point across, I think.
Cool and Nice
Girl i loved it. i love the way how it been told. i really can imagine a great love of simplest purity. i loved it
all sholud have this experience
of all things that could ever happen to you this is the most well the greatest ever
comment
it was good but a little long
its ok
i thought it was ok it took a little too long to get to the end and it was a little boring in some parts but it was ok overall
Fantastic!
This story is unlike any other! The description and length of this story is just fantastic. I usually am not into the "Family" type of stories, but you've basically changed my views!
-Looking forward to more stories from you 'Scouries!'
Fuck u hater
wat the fuck do u hav against us arabs u fucking bitch we are no diferent than any1 else in the world
Fantastic
I am a young girl just starting with puberty and I am learning about sex,sexaual tension,love and I think If thta were real I would put a vote towards I think that u should be able to love whomever u want be it ur father or anyone
Nice Story, but...
As much as I enjoyed the story, I almost didn't bother reading past the first page. Your comments about Arabs was uncalled for and quite frankly, stupid. The fact that you portrayed this character as a good looking, healthy, smart, happy, blond American, who happens to be CHRISTIAN!!? seems beyond me, considering the type of story you're telling here. Yes, most stories on this site are fiction/fantasy, but I think you need to base yourself in reality.
Delicious
Loved it wonderful build to the climax!!!!
I am glued
Beautiful, except for the racism. The daughters lust for her father is wrote to true magnificence
Fantastic!!
This is one of the first stories I read and reading it again after a long time I think it`s the best, Well done!!
Keep on going you have a special talent...
needs editing
This is honestly one of the best incest stories on the site. But the racism totally killed it for me. What a shame! Needs to be edited out. Why can't you just make it a bunch of men raping her instead of "greasy Arabs" as you put it?
Genetic concerns otherwise superb!
I loved the story! The only issue I had with it was related to recessive genes. Allow me to elaborate : Within a typical individual there are a certain number of "recessive genes" that will manifest only when said gene is inherited from both parents. Common examples are blue eyes or blonde hair. These are examples that are harmless. There are other recessive genes that have very deleterious consequences. They are not present in a large percentage of the general population but within a given family..... well father/daughter the chance for the same gene manifesting are 50%. Given that a typical individual posseses an average of 8 recessive genes of a deletarious nature the chance of a father / daughter coupeling producing three healthy offspring is statistically highly improbable. jmhopkins@gmail.com please comment.
Attention
All of you about he racist BS i didnt even notice i was focusing on the story thats the problem with you people always looking for any reason to bitch anyway great story
Ignore the detractors,
I loved it,it's romantic, sexual and sensual.It in the spirit of a story I want to write if I ever figure out how to do this on this site
xcellent
I love the fact all the people commenting that it was racist are anonymous. If you are so upset leave your information and I will tell you why it is that part was used. It doesn't matter of the enemy was Arab, Negro, Indian, or white hell they could have been Asian for all that matters maybe it has something to do with the current war. I don't know the author nor do I pretend to know what his or her motivation was. All I know is that it is a wonder piece of work that I hope to be able to compete with someday. However being pre-med i am so swamped myself my writing time is currently limited. If it weren't for my wonderful Sara I would drown, and I would have never seen this site or been exposed to father/daughter incest in real life. It was a bit shocking to me at first but it is a way of life I have grown to accept.
You want a 5 you got a 5
Excellent story, I could live the story through the her eyes and I think that was the just of what you wanted. Regardless of the subject mater, this is a love story.
wow
awesome story, please keep it up
almost perfect
I have to take issue with your utterly pointless bouts of unbridled racism. Ruined a fine story (to a degree).
Still one of th best though.
Magnifique.
good
great story, but i agree, was the racism needed?
Best yet
Love overcomes all stumbing blocks. A marriage
contract does not make a marriage, love between
two humans is a beautiful thing.
sso sexy and slow
one of the best ones i have read recently ! very sexy and slow and builds up to a hot ending!But i wanted the seductive bit to be longer and not end
Ung your character set ruined it
The sex scene was of course well written, but the character set up was a turn off for me. The "innocent" blonde "oh daddy save me from the big bad Arab man" just ruined it for me. I guess my sexuality is on a whole other side of the spectrum and that's why I really couldn't enjoy your story as much as I'd like too. I mean your female sexual lead just came off as an air head. "they hate us cause we're blonde, good looking, fit, American and christian"?!? Come ON. What is she five? Being a writter myself I don't focus on grammatical errors and things of that caliber that much. Because what a lot of people lack in their stories is the sensuality and the lacivious connection the two (or perhaps more than two) sexual leads share. And you definately brought that to the table. But the characters is what makes the stories HOT. And I'm sorry, but your characters ruined it for me. But keep it up though, you really got a talent for describing a good sex scene.
WOW!!!
Fantastic story
Whoa....amazing
that was freakn awesome i loved every bit of it
AMAZING
Best thing i ever read ever! It made me really horny because i fancy a girl called stephanie and she is really fit! if you could give a score of 200 i honestly would. fantastic read
wow:.....it was good
if i want to write, i can't for sure be even a speckle close to ur work. Congratulations. Please write , and u can contact me .... all_mits@yahoo.com.my
Incredible
Wow, admittedly the innocent bit was played up a bit too much but I didn't really mind as I read it. Amazing story, well told, nice ending.
Ignorant
You know nothing about Arabs and killed this entire story by your nasty racial comment in it. Arabs do not go around raping people you need to learn to get your facts straight. Your ignorant and really believe Arabs hate Americans . You probably believe they're all terrorists too. Your writing about incest and you think you have the right to write a comment like that? You disgust me.
Ignorant
You know nothing about Arabs and killed this entire story by your nasty racial comment in it. Arabs do not go around raping people you need to learn to get your facts straight. Your ignorant and really believe Arabs hate Americans . You probably believe they're all terrorists too. Your writing about incest and you think you have the right to write a comment like that? You disgust me.
Love my daughter
I loved your story it was awsome.I have lunch this week with my oldest daughter who is 24.And I plan to finish what we started on her 18th birthday.I only ate her that day but after reading your story its time to finish.
OFF THA CHAIN
I FUCKING LOVED IT AND I HOPE THAT U KEEP WRITING THESE WONDERFUL STORIES AND BLESSING ME
Some people can't read
The people who made comments that the blonde was an air head because of her Arab comments missed a major point. She was saying those things off the top of her head in jest. She never went to sleep and didn’t actually have a dream but she was making that up as she went so she didn’t have to say daddy I came to bed naked to feel you naked.
She was only pretending to act as a child to not talk about the sex she was there for.
You have a magical way with words
I have read a bunch of your stories & even marked you as one of my favorite authors, but this story took the cake... bought the farm... and has the Midas touch!!! The writing was amazing, the dialogue felt like it was real, and the eroticness of the whole story was, on a scale of 1 - 10, somewhere in the triple digits!!! After reading this story (not to mention all your others... sorry for not commenting earlier) I am DEFINITELY a fan for life!!!
~Mathias
Best Father daughther
This is the best Father Daughter I have ever read
A Magical Experience
You are a wonderful story teller, a sorceress with words. What a delicious torment the little girl was for her father, from the moment she learned of her true feelings for him. He didn't stand a chance!
loved it!
wow..what a story!it gave me butterfly feelings in my stomach...it was more than an erotic story..a love story.it surely showed a pure love and sexual desire between a father and a daughter and the ending was most pleasant,maybe it is forbidden though,but still it has a big pleasure,a success...wish to have stories like these,full with passion,more from u,please!keep writing.!!
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