I loved it, beginning to end there were no parts of the story I didn't like. I've had the site in my favs a long time and have rarely read a story that I enjoyed every part of. Bravo! Excellent.
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Anonymous03/29/07
keep up the grat work
exquisitely delicious. Loved every word of it! Definitely a pussy-tingler.
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Anonymous03/30/07
this is really fucking disgusting
this reallly is one of the most disgusting things i've ever read in my life. i have not homophobic, racist, or anything. but what the fuck is wrong with you. honestly it was pretty well written. so spend your time writing about things that don't suck your dad's dick. fuuuuuck. and what was that racist shit?
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Anonymous04/04/07
very very good
loved it. lots better than mum son stories which i usually seek out.HAVING BEEN AND DONE THAT but a very long time ago thou ,i,m always envious does no one ever have a small one!!!!
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Anonymous04/04/07
just a comment.
hot story.
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Anonymous04/12/07
Where to begin...
Oh, Jeez...
Hmmm... To begin with, some men can pull off writing from a woman's point of view. You're not one of them. I only read this story because I saw all of your self-advertisement on the forum. Well, there's forty minutes of my time I'll never get back.
Can you say editor? I thought not.
I have a hard time trying to believe the "woman" portrayed in this story is anything more than a thirteen-year old girl. Shouldn't it be banned from the site?
It's not a sexy story. It's just self-serving crap.
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Anonymous04/12/07
great
the story was great, so i dont see why that faggot with the comment below me has to piss and moan about it
fuck him
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Anonymous04/12/07
mahhh
i liked it but when i put it as me insted of steff i was disturbed but good story
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Anonymous04/13/07
WOW! HOT, HOT, HOT
Absolutely loved your writing style. In fact, I almost lost it myself at the end. Take that as an ultimate compliment when you consider that I'm a 55 year old gay man who normally doesn't have heterosexual fantasies. Hope to see more stories ahead from you.
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Anonymous04/15/07
Wonderful Story line "A story with-in a story" ...
Great story ... the story of a girl becoming a woman, of a daughter becoming a wife & mother, of a father becoming a husband ... romance, sexy, and erotic fantasies all mixed together much like real life ... there is never just one story to be told and you did a wonderful job of telling all of them at the same time. Thank You for the opportunity to read it. Please don't stop writing you have a gift, please continue to share it with the world around you.
An Admire & Fan,
Michelle Jo
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Anonymous04/17/07
Great Story.
Loved the story. Got off twice before I finished reading it. Wish I had a daughter to break in.
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Anonymous04/21/07
Manipulation
I liked the story tremendously, except that the girl was way too manipulative. She seemed to have no hesitation on her own part. It definitely was not written by a woman with a woman's viepoint.
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Anonymous04/22/07
Read It!!!!!
Once, when first written, read it again today, and felt the same way about the story both times "Great". Never been there, almost close with a grandfather, another story. But I love the storytelling and the almost trepidation on the fathers part,she knows pretty much what she wants, what at "18", and gets everything. Great story and a lovely dream. Fantasy fulfilled. Thanks D.
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Anonymous04/22/07
Beautifully Written!
I really loved this story. It was just beautiful. You have a real gift and should explore it furthur if you haven't already. WELL DONE!!!!!
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Anonymous04/22/07
Still LQQKIN @ 58 for the lil girl of my dreams.
This is well written and HOTTTTTTTTT. I have these fantasies also but would never touch my own. I guess that's the difference in Reality and fantasy? I might get barred for this, but then again the results might be beyond my greatest expectation?
bonifiedredneck@yahoo.com
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Anonymous05/11/07
Good Until....
Was sexy until you got to all that Arab crap. I don't want politics in a sex story.
Excellent story! Certainly kept my scroll button on fire. I enjoyed how all the strings were tied at the end. Very fulfilling.
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Anonymous05/14/07
Incredible...
This story was amazingly good! It was beautiful and extremely well written. Not to mention HOT!!!! I'm as gay as a guy can be and I STILL got off to this story!
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Anonymous05/18/07
BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL
The story was awesome
HOT ROMANTIC SOULFUL EXOTIC EROTIC
VERY GOOD WORK!!!!
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Anonymous05/21/07
Awesome!!!
i almost came just reading it ,will u make more!?
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Anonymous05/22/07
Awesome until the end....
I loved this story, but suggesting that father and daughter went on to have children together was really gross. We all know what can happen in those instances and that was an unfortunate addition in the ending...otherwise a really great read...and yes, many women can be that manipulative. I know I am.
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Anonymous05/23/07
Well done
A tantric story from start to finish. Well done.
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Anonymous05/23/07
cant wait
cant wait a few more years to have similar experience with mine, she seems to want it now
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Anonymous05/27/07
nieve?
I,m too young as well but crave for my dad and older brother, I've tried flirting with them and accidenly flashing but they dont seem to notice, what can a girl do?
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Anonymous05/30/07
Hmmm
I loved the story but the fact that an 18 year old girl was still saying "Daddy" every time she addressed her father slightly turned me off. Along with the racial expressions in the beginning...this story can only rate a 3 in my book.
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Anonymous05/31/07
You sure love your daddy!
I really enjoyed your story. I have never comed so hard from a story as I did with this one. It was well written and spaced wonderfuly. I will continue to read your stories. Thank you.
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Anonymous06/10/07
been there done that
its the best thing in the world to beable to feel your daddy fucken u in every hole u have....soooooo hooot
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Anonymous06/12/07
wish i had a dad like that
hott...nice work...I would also recomend leaving out the addition of children (slight turn off)
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Anonymous06/13/07
Very Good
yeah I agree. leave the kids out. good story tho. you might also want to make the dad more reluctant
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Anonymous06/14/07
Kids
Whats wrong with having Childern Most turn out okay that I know of
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Anonymous06/19/07
incest is best
Ilove fucking my daddy. I love his thick cock and the feel of his balls gently slsppung against my ass. I love the way his sticky cum feels in my pussy. I like the way his tongue feels inside my pussy as he licks my cunt clean. I love the way he unfurls my labia abd sucks on them while pinching my clit between his calloused fingers.your stories remind me of the pleasurable fucks I enjoyed with my father
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Anonymous06/20/07
magnificent
So beautiful, so sensual, so REAL. It actually moved ne to tears.... As one who has actually been there - it took me right back to my own earlier years....
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Anonymous07/03/07
Good good.
Very good. I totally creamed my panties. It brings back memories of me with my brother when we still lived together.
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Anonymous07/03/07
HMM...
The fact that she had a sexy father, was good. But I would never do that with my dad. That'd be awkward for me. [ R.I.P Dad ] But It was awesome. I loved it.
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Anonymous07/03/07
Racist
I would have really liked it, except for the overtly racist comments about Arabs, and how Americans are hated for how "attractive" and "blonde" they are. Sounds a little Nazi-esque.
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Anonymous07/06/07
WOWZERZ!!!!
i totally creamed my panties. i loved the detail and the way she seduced him soooo well. the fact that she waited was sooo sneaky but sexy @ the same time. i loved it.
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Anonymous07/08/07
THIS
Was what you've been bragging about? I'm sorry to say I had grown tired with the story midway through the first page and so I scanned it to find the sex, just so my batteries weren't wasted. Thank god for a vibe and Duracell, otherwise this would have been a waste of my time. I came, but not because of you and this so called wonderful story. *shudders* Go learn to write and when you do, come back and try again.
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07/08/07
Um....
Maybe I'm just cranky but this wasn't a very good story. It was way too long - the information about the dates was confusing and I really didn't like the part about her bad dream - just a little racist.
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Anonymous07/08/07
great story i wish i could right one like that
that was a great story i wish i could wright one like that about me and my mom who is like you dad single and very very sexxy and i love with all my heart
Loved the seduction and honeymoon and joyfull ending.
Felt uneasy about the medical/doctor/career relationships; but Hey, this is Literotica fiction.
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Anonymous07/10/07
ehn.
predictable, RACIST (wtf hitler youth? seriously, such a turn off), and the sex was moderately written at best.
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Anonymous07/11/07
Racist??? Get off your PC Guidebook...
First off, the character who used those racist comments was a young girl, who likely could give 2 cents of a crap for realism and-or not hurting people's feelings who heard it.. know why??? She was SPEAKING TO HER DAD IN A BEDROOM, not an auditorium...
So it was realistic, on the premise of her dad asked her a question, and she didn't have a pre-planned response... get over it... 18 or younger year-olds likely don't think that far ahead in what they say... that, and it was a ploy that fit the storyline (and again, hello, 6am in the morning, had to make something up quick, and this story was submitted not long after 2001, so go figure what a teen would fine most horrifying)...
So no... arab-bashing? Hardly...
And apparently the people who complained about the story being too long, are the ones looking to have a story start right off with sex, and not "move towards it" as a story should (at least a good one, that's not PWP).. if you want flat out porn, with no build up, I'm sure there's plenty of "less than 1000 words" stories out there.. so get over it.
Oh, and those who complain I posted anonymously? I don't remember my password right now, since I haven't been to this site in over 6 months... Still, I'll sign in with my alias anyway...
Trager Maximoff
(PS: I like paragraph seperations, so added the P-tags.. no clue if it will take though)
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Anonymous07/13/07
It Was Not Too Long
I liked the development of the story. It is fiction, and as such anything goes. Good writing and I would not refuse a beauty such as she.
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Anonymous07/17/07
lol @ racism
comeon people just cause she was arrogant because of her looks and lifestyle doesnt mean shit and the stuff about the arabs... well if you knew the ones around sydney (that sheik for example who said "women dressing provocatively deserve to be raped") its pretty close to being spot on with alot of peoples attitudes anyway, i liked this story it was interesting, well written and seemed beleivable which is what makes a good story
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Anonymous07/22/07
Too long! Where did this race thing come from?
Started out ok. but got way too long for a quick ending!
The "Race" thing was a turn off, no place for it here!
Please don't waste our time!
I agree with most other voters- the racist comments about Arabs did bother me; I found it distracting and unnecessary. However, I do see the reason for the quick lie at 6 am, but it could've been written better. A more clever lie, perhaps?
All in all, I thought it was a fair story. The development was good, I enjoyed the story and background and happy ending. The sex was a little weak and mildly anti-climactic though.
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Anonymous07/25/07
Well written... to an extent
For the most part of this story I think the biggest issue was the first two pages of the long text. I can understand the reluctance of a father and too make it exceedingly good that the daughter needs to convince her father of her taboo. Still I believe that she could have teased her father (and the readers) a little more. All in all despite the complaints and the slight racism (which I don't really think about anyway) I liked the story quite a bit.
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Anonymous07/27/07
great storyline
The storyline wasn't confusing, if you read fiction or novels at all you usually find a story has to begin it's tale and spin into the story slowly. That's what makes the story seem real and appear even more erotic. This author should write for Harlequin Romance or begin her own novel..it's the exact writing you find in a Jackie Collins or Danielle Steele. I think some people may not used to reading such 'good' material.
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Anonymous07/27/07
As someone who reads romances
as well as other genres of writing, you are so so so wrong. If he tried to publish something like this mainstream, he'd be crucified. I don't know of an editor willing to take on someone who uses mutiple consenants to express emotions. If this is something you think of as publishable work, you need to get your nose out of Dick and Jane and try something else.
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Anonymous07/29/07
Okay story
I somewhat enjoyed the story, but I feel it needs a bit of work. A lot of it feels slightly redundant and I found myself glazing over certain parts because they seemed repetitive.
There was a lot of build up to the story, but I didn't feel as though the "climax" as it were really hit the mark the writer seemed to be aiming for.
Definitely a good start, but it needs to be fleshed out a bit. At points literally lol j/k
English
Favorite story so far........
I loved it, beginning to end there were no parts of the story I didn't like. I've had the site in my favs a long time and have rarely read a story that I enjoyed every part of. Bravo! Excellent.
keep up the grat work
exquisitely delicious. Loved every word of it! Definitely a pussy-tingler.
this is really fucking disgusting
this reallly is one of the most disgusting things i've ever read in my life. i have not homophobic, racist, or anything. but what the fuck is wrong with you. honestly it was pretty well written. so spend your time writing about things that don't suck your dad's dick. fuuuuuck. and what was that racist shit?
very very good
loved it. lots better than mum son stories which i usually seek out.HAVING BEEN AND DONE THAT but a very long time ago thou ,i,m always envious does no one ever have a small one!!!!
just a comment.
hot story.
Where to begin...
Oh, Jeez...
Hmmm... To begin with, some men can pull off writing from a woman's point of view. You're not one of them. I only read this story because I saw all of your self-advertisement on the forum. Well, there's forty minutes of my time I'll never get back.
Can you say editor? I thought not.
I have a hard time trying to believe the "woman" portrayed in this story is anything more than a thirteen-year old girl. Shouldn't it be banned from the site?
It's not a sexy story. It's just self-serving crap.
great
the story was great, so i dont see why that faggot with the comment below me has to piss and moan about it
fuck him
mahhh
i liked it but when i put it as me insted of steff i was disturbed but good story
WOW! HOT, HOT, HOT
Absolutely loved your writing style. In fact, I almost lost it myself at the end. Take that as an ultimate compliment when you consider that I'm a 55 year old gay man who normally doesn't have heterosexual fantasies. Hope to see more stories ahead from you.
Wonderful Story line "A story with-in a story" ...
Great story ... the story of a girl becoming a woman, of a daughter becoming a wife & mother, of a father becoming a husband ... romance, sexy, and erotic fantasies all mixed together much like real life ... there is never just one story to be told and you did a wonderful job of telling all of them at the same time. Thank You for the opportunity to read it. Please don't stop writing you have a gift, please continue to share it with the world around you.
An Admire & Fan,
Michelle Jo
Great Story.
Loved the story. Got off twice before I finished reading it. Wish I had a daughter to break in.
Manipulation
I liked the story tremendously, except that the girl was way too manipulative. She seemed to have no hesitation on her own part. It definitely was not written by a woman with a woman's viepoint.
Read It!!!!!
Once, when first written, read it again today, and felt the same way about the story both times "Great". Never been there, almost close with a grandfather, another story. But I love the storytelling and the almost trepidation on the fathers part,she knows pretty much what she wants, what at "18", and gets everything. Great story and a lovely dream. Fantasy fulfilled. Thanks D.
Beautifully Written!
I really loved this story. It was just beautiful. You have a real gift and should explore it furthur if you haven't already. WELL DONE!!!!!
Still LQQKIN @ 58 for the lil girl of my dreams.
This is well written and HOTTTTTTTTT. I have these fantasies also but would never touch my own. I guess that's the difference in Reality and fantasy? I might get barred for this, but then again the results might be beyond my greatest expectation?
bonifiedredneck@yahoo.com
Good Until....
Was sexy until you got to all that Arab crap. I don't want politics in a sex story.
Kept my fingers busy!
Excellent story! Certainly kept my scroll button on fire. I enjoyed how all the strings were tied at the end. Very fulfilling.
Incredible...
This story was amazingly good! It was beautiful and extremely well written. Not to mention HOT!!!! I'm as gay as a guy can be and I STILL got off to this story!
BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL BEAUTIFUL
The story was awesome
HOT ROMANTIC SOULFUL EXOTIC EROTIC
VERY GOOD WORK!!!!
Awesome!!!
i almost came just reading it ,will u make more!?
Awesome until the end....
I loved this story, but suggesting that father and daughter went on to have children together was really gross. We all know what can happen in those instances and that was an unfortunate addition in the ending...otherwise a really great read...and yes, many women can be that manipulative. I know I am.
Well done
A tantric story from start to finish. Well done.
cant wait
cant wait a few more years to have similar experience with mine, she seems to want it now
nieve?
I,m too young as well but crave for my dad and older brother, I've tried flirting with them and accidenly flashing but they dont seem to notice, what can a girl do?
Hmmm
I loved the story but the fact that an 18 year old girl was still saying "Daddy" every time she addressed her father slightly turned me off. Along with the racial expressions in the beginning...this story can only rate a 3 in my book.
You sure love your daddy!
I really enjoyed your story. I have never comed so hard from a story as I did with this one. It was well written and spaced wonderfuly. I will continue to read your stories. Thank you.
been there done that
its the best thing in the world to beable to feel your daddy fucken u in every hole u have....soooooo hooot
wish i had a dad like that
hott...nice work...I would also recomend leaving out the addition of children (slight turn off)
Very Good
yeah I agree. leave the kids out. good story tho. you might also want to make the dad more reluctant
Kids
Whats wrong with having Childern Most turn out okay that I know of
incest is best
Ilove fucking my daddy. I love his thick cock and the feel of his balls gently slsppung against my ass. I love the way his sticky cum feels in my pussy. I like the way his tongue feels inside my pussy as he licks my cunt clean. I love the way he unfurls my labia abd sucks on them while pinching my clit between his calloused fingers.your stories remind me of the pleasurable fucks I enjoyed with my father
magnificent
So beautiful, so sensual, so REAL. It actually moved ne to tears.... As one who has actually been there - it took me right back to my own earlier years....
Good good.
Very good. I totally creamed my panties. It brings back memories of me with my brother when we still lived together.
HMM...
The fact that she had a sexy father, was good. But I would never do that with my dad. That'd be awkward for me. [ R.I.P Dad ] But It was awesome. I loved it.
Racist
I would have really liked it, except for the overtly racist comments about Arabs, and how Americans are hated for how "attractive" and "blonde" they are. Sounds a little Nazi-esque.
WOWZERZ!!!!
i totally creamed my panties. i loved the detail and the way she seduced him soooo well. the fact that she waited was sooo sneaky but sexy @ the same time. i loved it.
THIS
Was what you've been bragging about? I'm sorry to say I had grown tired with the story midway through the first page and so I scanned it to find the sex, just so my batteries weren't wasted. Thank god for a vibe and Duracell, otherwise this would have been a waste of my time. I came, but not because of you and this so called wonderful story. *shudders* Go learn to write and when you do, come back and try again.
Um....
Maybe I'm just cranky but this wasn't a very good story. It was way too long - the information about the dates was confusing and I really didn't like the part about her bad dream - just a little racist.
great story i wish i could right one like that
that was a great story i wish i could wright one like that about me and my mom who is like you dad single and very very sexxy and i love with all my heart
Mixed Feelings
Loved the seduction and honeymoon and joyfull ending.
Felt uneasy about the medical/doctor/career relationships; but Hey, this is Literotica fiction.
ehn.
predictable, RACIST (wtf hitler youth? seriously, such a turn off), and the sex was moderately written at best.
Racist??? Get off your PC Guidebook...
First off, the character who used those racist comments was a young girl, who likely could give 2 cents of a crap for realism and-or not hurting people's feelings who heard it.. know why??? She was SPEAKING TO HER DAD IN A BEDROOM, not an auditorium...
So it was realistic, on the premise of her dad asked her a question, and she didn't have a pre-planned response... get over it... 18 or younger year-olds likely don't think that far ahead in what they say... that, and it was a ploy that fit the storyline (and again, hello, 6am in the morning, had to make something up quick, and this story was submitted not long after 2001, so go figure what a teen would fine most horrifying)...
So no... arab-bashing? Hardly...
And apparently the people who complained about the story being too long, are the ones looking to have a story start right off with sex, and not "move towards it" as a story should (at least a good one, that's not PWP).. if you want flat out porn, with no build up, I'm sure there's plenty of "less than 1000 words" stories out there.. so get over it.
Oh, and those who complain I posted anonymously? I don't remember my password right now, since I haven't been to this site in over 6 months... Still, I'll sign in with my alias anyway...
Trager Maximoff
(PS: I like paragraph seperations, so added the P-tags.. no clue if it will take though)
It Was Not Too Long
I liked the development of the story. It is fiction, and as such anything goes. Good writing and I would not refuse a beauty such as she.
lol @ racism
comeon people just cause she was arrogant because of her looks and lifestyle doesnt mean shit and the stuff about the arabs... well if you knew the ones around sydney (that sheik for example who said "women dressing provocatively deserve to be raped") its pretty close to being spot on with alot of peoples attitudes anyway, i liked this story it was interesting, well written and seemed beleivable which is what makes a good story
Too long! Where did this race thing come from?
Started out ok. but got way too long for a quick ending!
The "Race" thing was a turn off, no place for it here!
Please don't waste our time!
Fair enough
I agree with most other voters- the racist comments about Arabs did bother me; I found it distracting and unnecessary. However, I do see the reason for the quick lie at 6 am, but it could've been written better. A more clever lie, perhaps?
All in all, I thought it was a fair story. The development was good, I enjoyed the story and background and happy ending. The sex was a little weak and mildly anti-climactic though.
Well written... to an extent
For the most part of this story I think the biggest issue was the first two pages of the long text. I can understand the reluctance of a father and too make it exceedingly good that the daughter needs to convince her father of her taboo. Still I believe that she could have teased her father (and the readers) a little more. All in all despite the complaints and the slight racism (which I don't really think about anyway) I liked the story quite a bit.
great storyline
The storyline wasn't confusing, if you read fiction or novels at all you usually find a story has to begin it's tale and spin into the story slowly. That's what makes the story seem real and appear even more erotic. This author should write for Harlequin Romance or begin her own novel..it's the exact writing you find in a Jackie Collins or Danielle Steele. I think some people may not used to reading such 'good' material.
As someone who reads romances
as well as other genres of writing, you are so so so wrong. If he tried to publish something like this mainstream, he'd be crucified. I don't know of an editor willing to take on someone who uses mutiple consenants to express emotions. If this is something you think of as publishable work, you need to get your nose out of Dick and Jane and try something else.
Okay story
I somewhat enjoyed the story, but I feel it needs a bit of work. A lot of it feels slightly redundant and I found myself glazing over certain parts because they seemed repetitive.
There was a lot of build up to the story, but I didn't feel as though the "climax" as it were really hit the mark the writer seemed to be aiming for.
Definitely a good start, but it needs to be fleshed out a bit. At points literally lol j/k
Good job, nonetheless.
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