This second chapter is much better than your first. Besides smoother prose and more graphic detail, you took your time with the sex and with a little more character buildup. Keep it going.
Good writing and story.
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Vastly improved
This second chapter is much better than your first. Besides smoother prose and more graphic detail, you took your time with the sex and with a little more character buildup. Keep it going.
Verry good
Good writing and story.
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