the last sentence a little more carefully; ". . he wanted right then was a hot night of great sex with his newfound black princess," is not idicative of a man intent on a onetime fling. It is rather the thought of a man who has met someone he wants to pursue for love and more. Great Start. Thank You Ronnie W.
by
Anonymous03/27/06
I Agree
I agree with you Ronnie, I can tell he wants more as well. Trust once he does slept her he's not going anywhere anyway because everyone knows there is something special about us black women that men can't get enough of.
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Anonymous01/12/07
OH wow! Great intro...
Great grammar, writing, pacing, love connection, etc! This just had it all!
English
Last sentence
The last sentence was a great disappointment. Is he
really after a one time fuck?
Then he is an asshole.
Great
Don't listen to the other guy. It was a great story. Keep writing.
Perhaps Anonymous in Scandinavia should have read
the last sentence a little more carefully; ". . he wanted right then was a hot night of great sex with his newfound black princess," is not idicative of a man intent on a onetime fling. It is rather the thought of a man who has met someone he wants to pursue for love and more. Great Start. Thank You Ronnie W.
I Agree
I agree with you Ronnie, I can tell he wants more as well. Trust once he does slept her he's not going anywhere anyway because everyone knows there is something special about us black women that men can't get enough of.
OH wow! Great intro...
Great grammar, writing, pacing, love connection, etc! This just had it all!
I like where this stor is going.
Just Found and in love.
I am liking where this is going.
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