by candlelight_romance
The first person approach was much hotter than your first story; nicely written. But, even though you use dirty language, the story comes across very genteel. I would have preferred it dirtier
Nice photo
Hey :-)
Thanks for the comment... i realize this story isnt quite as steamy as my debut, but that is for quite a specific reason. It is set in the Morning After, and the atmosphere i aimed for is quite deliberately dreamy and fuzzy (as you may have noticed from the millions of commas). The main action happened the night before, this is more a softer sequel which explores more emotional rather than physical aspects of the passion of sex.
I for one am glad that you continued the story as you did, it feels to me, from that point of view, that you are putting more of yourself into the story, letting your emotions flow a little more freely... It adds that extra bit of realness to the story.. At least that's how I see it... I loved it :)
it was a good follow up tot he last story. Well thought out and well written, "I" (opinion only) would have preferred it to read a little hotter, and a little dirtier.. good none the less..