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A Lovely Story
very sweet and hot.
Thanks
Thanks for your wonderful comments. I love getting feedback! I've been working on the next part of this story. It seems to take awhile for it to get approved but I will submit it when I'm done. Hope you bookmarked me :)
Very nice!
Can't wait to see the next installment!
Sexy and well written
Really enjoyed the buildup and sex scenes well written.
My Fantasy
The story was well written. It has all the parts of a great story. Start, high point, CLIMAX, and ending. I look forward to the next installment
Very hot and sensual
Realistic and *very* hot. Looking forward to more.
Sexy, hungry, but can't agree with comment that it
was well written. You need to polish up your grammatical structure. For example, some of your sentences are not real sentences. There are lines of speech melded into the next paragraph when should stand separately. This needs a good editor. However, having stated this, some of the sex is damn good!
Very erotic story!
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