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Paybacks...
Paybacks and revengea are so fun, but they can get nasty. Usually you think that your payback and revenge are great, but don't turn your back.
He and the wife are both lucky
assuming they have not wound up with STD or HIV. They seem to deserve each other.
All Losers Here
Wheres the beef - this wasn't erotic - it wasn't arousing - it was about a bunch of fucked up people fucking each other up. The only character worth a possible shit was the ex-cop.
So again - where is the beef? - whats the mission? - to create a helpless and humiliated male???
It need the final confrontation between him & wife
And maybe Shala, who is now going to be seriously pissed.
id give her some reports to work on
called divorce reports ... and id show her the reports on her boyfriends also ...who would touch her ..probably have aids and all kinds of shit fucking with animals like that ...couldnt ever fuck her again with out wearing a rubber ...might as well get another one to fuck instead
Great writing and story
I know you do as you please and have reach the culmination of this fuck them all and revenge story, but wow, I’d love to here about Elaine and him meeting that night. Two fucked up people who now have fuck others and what does love between them now mean.
I can’t even imagine what your mind might come up with, but would love to read it. I know write it myself, but I’m no writer and you are one hell of a writer.
Thanks you pervert. Great story!
Kinda hard
to root for anyone here. Who's the good guy? Sure would like to be a fly on the wall for the confrontation though.
More?
Come on JPB let's have a part 3
Bob won't give us Part III
You have to write your own conclusion to this story. Bob will not finish it, he wants you to imagine it all. Thanks again Bob, I have already have it.
As always your writing has given us a lot to think about.
Keep them coming.
Charleybear
BORING !!!!
I mean a real snoozer
Great Fantasy Story!
If this was a real life drama the marriage would be toast. Even though they were both cheating the fact is that the husband did not know his wife and as a result allowed a predator Shala into their lives.
BTW Readers: Send JPB an e-mail if you want to write a part 3.
SleeplessinMD
What a dud
Sorry , boring , non sexual, racist clap trap.
Sorry your attempt to pull this racist crap out is
a total waste. If you are really into IR you could try Africa. In many conutries blacks are still slaves, even to blacks. And to clear it up most of the people that populated the early US were not slave owners, they were debtors, indentured debtors (read that slaves), and slaves who were brought here by the French and Spanish mostly after having been brought here into the new world, not just the US, and saved from being killed by their fellow Africans.
Seriously Bob
What fucking planet do you live on? It certainly isn't Earth. can't you just once, just one time try to write something where just one, not all, not most, just one fucking person in your story behaves in a manner that just one of your readers could beleive that someone in the 5Billion plus people on this planet would behave... cause I've read many of your postings... and there just not erotic, they're not about loving spouses... they are just childish crap! Not once could I read your posting without thinking that you're a bad comedy writer.. the people are not real, so it is a WASTE OF TIME! Seriously Bob, you must know a few hundred, or a few thousand people in your life... has anyone even just once come close to doing anything as ridiculous as you write?
Loved it.
Keep up the good work!
OH BOB!
You cut the story off just when it was getting interesting. I wanted to know Shala's reaction, her brothers' when the cops picked them up and Elaine's when she ran into her husband at Shala's house. You have quite the sense of humor Bob, sick but funny. Keep em coming
THE SET UP
has a confusion factor. Its up to each to fathom out. TK U MLJ LV NV
Fun Read!!!!!
I love getting even. Thanks for the read.
Lousy People
Some of the most fucked up people ever born live in this fucking tale of depravity and racism. In the end everyone involved loses. Fuck 'em.
HA
Can't believe it.
How these two stories got a rating above a 4. The plot sucked, the encounters sucked, that the wife fell for it so fast even with drugs sucked and the ending sucked. Should have just have everybody kill themselves.
One More Para
She went from knowing he cheated as an excuse to have sex with a black guy, then being drugged for more and totally enjoyed herself.
Now - sober, she is going for more.
Big difference...she is now a BBC Whore, gang banger and an addict. Had she had the occasional and discreet fling, even black, okay but now...One More Paragraph Bob! You didn't just leave it open, you had him display a total indifference to the wife so........??????????????
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