This is a great start. You have a wonderful voice and the pace of your reading just draws the listener in. I can hardly wait for the next installment.
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Anonymous03/13/06
Clean uo your audio stream
Clean up your audio quality! In this day of digital recorders, its sad to loose part of your great and improtoant message in a noise and hum filled audio background!
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Anonymous03/17/06
Interesting Introduction
This was intriguing and I'm curious. I like the idea and the scene set up. There are a couple of small things that, if you are interested, I can point out for your consideration, as they made me pause and distracted me from all the good stuff you were doing. I'll have to keep up with your writing!
The Pace Of The Story Grows Colder And More Boring As The Narrator Goes Along...What Could Be A Fabulous Slice Of Writing HAs Been Twisted Into A Mear Jumble Of Words.
Maybe, Mistress Jett Should Read Her Own Stuff Next Time And Then It'll Come Across In An Entertaining Manner;)
English
Talk to me!
Instead of reading to me.
Great start
This is a great start. You have a wonderful voice and the pace of your reading just draws the listener in. I can hardly wait for the next installment.
Clean uo your audio stream
Clean up your audio quality! In this day of digital recorders, its sad to loose part of your great and improtoant message in a noise and hum filled audio background!
Interesting Introduction
This was intriguing and I'm curious. I like the idea and the scene set up. There are a couple of small things that, if you are interested, I can point out for your consideration, as they made me pause and distracted me from all the good stuff you were doing. I'll have to keep up with your writing!
Monotone Reading Of An Interesting Slice.
Uh Oh!
The Pace Of The Story Grows Colder And More Boring As The Narrator Goes Along...What Could Be A Fabulous Slice Of Writing HAs Been Twisted Into A Mear Jumble Of Words.
Maybe, Mistress Jett Should Read Her Own Stuff Next Time And Then It'll Come Across In An Entertaining Manner;)
RudeNastyAssBitch
Well Done Frey
Totally Agree with U. Good Job Well done.
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