Very hot but really oh my did this happen????i did get very wet reading this story, and my nipples where so hard they hurt, oh my i wish I could have two like this stroy.
I think part 1 was better than 2, but still great. Would love to have you continue, but maybe with seduction of other men in semi-public places like a park, or an office?
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Anonymous03/30/07
Hot Stories -- But Please Proofread!
These stories are hot... I expect that before long the hubby will be prepping and cleaning the guys too. But hey Slick, how about some attention to proofreading? There are so many typos and grammatical errors. Trying to figure out what you mean slows down the reader e.g., Scoot was supposed to be Scott, etc. Perhaps English your second language? Try using spell check or ask somebody to read it over for you before submitting the stories online.
Good start to what could be a really good story. She has set the rules and he's still a boy. He might become a man one day but Debbie will have accepted being a slut by then. Someone with a big cock and the will to use it right will have turned her into his whore by then.
One of the hottest stories I have ever read. This would fulfill one of my favorite fantasies, Would like to read more like this. This and the Double Date, pleased me immensely.
English
What nonsense.
Just a little of bit of reality would help.
really???
Very hot but really oh my did this happen????i did get very wet reading this story, and my nipples where so hard they hurt, oh my i wish I could have two like this stroy.
MORE
Yes love to read more
MORE PLEASE
I think part 1 was better than 2, but still great. Would love to have you continue, but maybe with seduction of other men in semi-public places like a park, or an office?
Hot Stories -- But Please Proofread!
These stories are hot... I expect that before long the hubby will be prepping and cleaning the guys too. But hey Slick, how about some attention to proofreading? There are so many typos and grammatical errors. Trying to figure out what you mean slows down the reader e.g., Scoot was supposed to be Scott, etc. Perhaps English your second language? Try using spell check or ask somebody to read it over for you before submitting the stories online.
I see you have continued your sick life.
Cant figure out why.
more please :)
doesn't top your first chapter but it was very good ... you do need to edit this one a bit more closely :) but still loving it :)
I soon got too weird.
So, when it sounded like he was going to allow him to fuck her, I stopped reading and rated it 1*.
Terrific sequel
Another erotic classic.
good start
Good start to what could be a really good story. She has set the rules and he's still a boy. He might become a man one day but Debbie will have accepted being a slut by then. Someone with a big cock and the will to use it right will have turned her into his whore by then.
Double Date
One of the hottest stories I have ever read. This would fulfill one of my favorite fantasies, Would like to read more like this. This and the Double Date, pleased me immensely.
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