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Don't Bother
Don't give up your day job.
first rate!
Please keep going. Perhaps you can write about the guy you met on AOL.
very hot
like your style, both writing and bj ability, got me hard
more...please !!
redstickmeow...you've paint a very complete image of a woman in lust with the words you used..PLEASE continue....
Keep Going
Enjoyed the story. Keep up the good work!
good initial effort
liked the bj description, very accurate and absorbing...but need some buildup as to what lead her to be there..keep writing
Gotta Love It!
Reading the writing of a woman who is not only NOT ashamed of her desires and prowess, but who takes great pleasure in the power she has to please a man... it's just invigorating. Keep up the great work!
loved every word
but the last para was best. Love your IRL cheating, tell all. you're bookmarked
Slut wife laughing at husband and world
In this fantasy the slut wife shows total hatred of husband by continuing to fuck anything she wants. She doesn't care about her children or husband just what ever she wants. God, how she must despise her husband. That is what makes it a cheating fantasy.
Many guy’s write about having other women and sometimes there is little harangue by people so why would a woman wanting other men be any different. For some reason on this site people get more up in arms about women cheating then men. More men readers? That’s why we have the listing Loving wives not Loving Husbands. There should be a category instead for Cheating Spouses.
In real life you would hope she still had at least a little respect for the husband and divorce him so he could find a real loving woman and have a good life. People who have truly strong fantasies should search their reasons for wanting someone other then their spouse. A sharing of her feelings may lead to both spouses finding where this is really going or if they need to change things in their lives. There is nothing wrong with a fantasy till it becomes the driving force in ones life and nothing is done to understand why and all that it affects.
I prefer cheating with consequence or it’s just an erotic coupling to me. Just my bent.
Story could use a little more buildup and character development. I thought the writing was fine for this fantasy.
Please keep writing
Try,Try, Again
Well your first story just didnt do it.It said nothing and went nowhere.It told about a wife and mother who was a cheating cock sucking slut.Gee, we sure needed another one of these.Give it up girl,we the readers dont need anymore of this crap.But,write what you like,just dont look for us to read it.
next door
wish you lived next door to me!!
Public acknowledgement of your betrayal
How great for you! To let everyone know that you hate and abbhor your husband and your marriage. Here's one reader that hopes he and your daughter find out.
GREAT Story
Great Story and detail....wish we knew what brought her to her knees though. Can't wait to read more.
Words almost fail me.
My comments are irrespective of sex; they apply equally to men or women. When two people marry, there are two marriages. One marriage is that of the people’s hearts joining to live life together and the other is the legal fiction that’s recorded in the legal system. When one party to the marriage breaks the vows unilaterally, the marriage in the heart is destroyed. Only the legal fiction remains. At that point, it would be common decency to tell the faithful party of the actions that had been taken to destroy the marriage. Perhaps, some kind of new, pseudo marriage could be mutually agreed upon or the legal fiction dissolved as well so as to allow the faithful party to regain some modicum of self-respect.
At least if the faithful party is told, the faithless party could lay claim to some shred of human decency. But, not to tell the faithful party means that the lying, faithless party couldn’t be trusted by anyone, anywhere, about anything. The faithless party is an affront and danger to society. Without adherence to reasonable moral guidelines, society ceases to exist. Do your own thing, if it feels good, do it. Murder, child rape. Anything goes, nothing’s wrong. Chaos reigns and society collapses. The faithless party can’t be trusted to give children an iota of moral guidance. They can’t be trusted, period.
The real definition of love is serving the needs of others before serving our own needs. You serve only yourself.
If your bio and epilogue are true, that’s where you are. Sickeningly sad. And disheartening to those of us who still have hope. At a minimum, you owe your “husband” and daughter the truth.
If it's fantasy, fine. No problem, anything goes. No people or small animals were hurt in the creation and narration of the fantasy. But, you say it's true, so ...
Phil
Forget It!
I have a better idea! Do not try writing again.
No desire to change that status
Not bad writing, but,according to you and/or your bio, you have been married for 21 years and "have no desire to change that status". If that is so, you had better hope your husband is incredibly stupid or plan what you are going to tell your 17 year old after your divorce. I hope your bio is just plain fiction too. the Ct. Yankee
I understand SHE IS A MARRIED SLUT--Right?
Is the married male neighbor some kind of a hero??
Explain this to me---PLEASE
Good sex scene
I give you a fifty because the writing was OK. Not great but just ok. Well, it was better than most. And it was rather hot and a good description of a blow job from a womans point of view.
Now, why you lost fifty points. Frankly, I like knowing many of these stories are a fantasy. You say these are not. I don't want to read about your dirty laundry, lady, and from many of the comments, I am sure I'm not the only one. I hope your daughter and husband are aware of your goings on. Becuse if not I am sure they will be soon. From this story and your bio, you show that you have no respect for either of them. I wonder how you are going to feel when the daughter starts this kind activity and come home with a good dose of the clap or HIV pos. How can you possibly look your family in the eyes? In fact, how can you even look in the mirror!
I loved this comment from you bio: "I was very promiscuous in the early years of my marriage but remained faithful for most of the time since. " What the hell does this mean? That you have been faithful most of the time since the early years of your marriage? Faithful most of the time? Some of the time? Ever? Is that like being a little pregnant? One is either faithful or one is not. By the way, this calls to question, who is the father of your daughter and does he know?
Go right ahead and post more. I am sure there are a lot of really sick people here who will love this shit. Just please, don't move into my neck of the woods. We still tar and feather here. ;-)
Regards,
C
Forget the Nay-sayers....Very Good!
Would LOVE to have you next door to me!
Lighten up on your comments! Geez...
Heck of a lot of criticism about this story. Was it a "story"? A fantasy? Yes, "she" (if the author is being truthful about his/her sex) states a confession of adultery at the end of the story. But again, is this a part of the "story"? Is this fantasy? Is this literary license by the author? Or is this the truth, the whole truth, and nothing but the truth? How many married men or women would so publicly admit something that could end their marriage? It may be true, but it sure sounds like a fantasy to me.
The story was a nice erotic read! Most of these comments sound like a book on the N.Y. Times best seller list is being trashed. Lighten up!
And it's nice to see something from a fellow Baton Rougean!
Be Careful If This Is True
If what you say is true and not just a ploy to titillate readers, then you are probably leaving tracks all over your computer that your spouse might find. In that case you might have signed your own divorce warrant. I don't have any moral issues here (though I do wish it were my fat cock!), but him finding out will be painful for lots of people, far beyond just you and him. Make sure it's worth the pain it will cause in the event that it is discovered.
Very Hot Blowjob!!!
I only wish my cock could be the happy recipient of your oral skills, and then I'd give you the illicit hard, hot fucking you so richly deserve. You are one hot bitch and I just wish you were in the Pittsburgh, PA area. My warmest thoughts & keep up the good work. I hope you get to experience some of the hot thoughts & fantasies you have in your pretty erotic mind.
Take it Easy!!!!!
Quite where so much "venom" comes from, from these critics is beyond me!
If the story is a fantasy or if it is indeed real... the author asks to be judged on her writing... and NOT her lifestyle... Like someone said.. lighted up for goodness sake. So far as I know we are NOT here to judge other peoples morals
Cheating
I loved your story, and your writing style. Can't wait for further stories from a hot, erotic woman who knows exactly what she wants out of life. The naysayer critics are jerks and you shouldn't let them influence you and/or your writing.
Hmmmm
What I noticed on this site is that the stories that get the most (if only) venomous, hateful comments are the cheating and interracial stories. Maybe it's because some people think they are morally superior?
What's funny is that incest stories rarely get hateful comments....I wonder why that is...
Maybe those haters go to church every Sunday and preach fidelity, then bang their daughters after the sermon?
Food for thought.
First-I seriously doubt that the author is a HER
Secondly if you and/or she are interested in quality writing
You/she should so state.
I believe the heading here says LOVE IT? HATE IT?
It does not say assign it a grade based on the quality of the writing
Goin to Puke If Married Cocksucking Lips Are
mentioned 53 more times. The trick to being here with any meaningful readership credibility is to respect at least one character per story. Well, unless you don't give a shit. In which case we don't either.
Assuming a sintar of self respect motivates you at each mornings dawn consider that we semi-normals too like some respect or being able to relate to someone or thing in your story.
So who in your tale is anywhere close to worthwhile - worth reading about??? Perhaps the poor dweeb married to a slut for over 20 years who cuckolds him at opportunity and especially next door? The poor braindead bastard here or in real life deserves a shotgun to use on himself or his whore when and if he stumbles upon her and the odds are piling skyward.
The daughter isn't & wasn't blind or far from the tree - so she doesn't give a shit about daddy or family.
Gee - that leaves you sweetie to muck up any and all peoples lives whenever and however you think it cute or needful. Consider that even the few sicko's who need you - don't like you but they will be your reader base. Cool huh.
Soon it will be decision time - to feverishly spread the scum about or ? It is your choice and some elect to do just that without regard for themselves or anything for that matter. Then we make our choice to either ignore or vent our feelings about and to you as felt necessary.
You appear to have some talent so consider getting off the true sick stories as true only makes them worse as you can see (comments). Its one thing to write about an axe murderer and quite another to be one isn't it.
Good Luck Choosing.
You did tell your hubby that he probaby
was not the daughter of your daughter right?
Great first story
It was short and sweet and got me hot. There was perhaps a little too much emphasis on the whole married thing, once it had been established that the husband was working in the garage it didn't need to be said too much more.
Some people build up these long dramatic stories with character backgrounds and all that crap, but who wants to read 300 pages to get to the good stuff?
Great first effort, and if you really have been as promiscuous as you say then I'm sure you've got some more great stories just waiting to be told
You are one hot slut baby bing on the daughter
Hey lighten up she says she's a slut and don't care about you or anyone even the wimp ass husband. She will show her daughter how its done and what fun it is to fuck around.
Man could she give me a blow job. I hope it no fantasy.
Keep getting it on baby. Get rid of that little dick wimp unless he has money.
pretty good at what you're doing
make sure you don't swallow TOO MUCH those millions to billions of little squirmy critters; some are rather mutated, even if not diseased; and others ARE diseased
you should pack a lot of condoms and high-potent mouth wash, if you don't want a slowly blemished mouth like those exceptional cocksucker professionals,,,
and, finally, while you should by all means enjoy your newfound love/hobby, you might wanna keep you fingers crossed that one of these "exciting" strangers/LOVERS don't give you more than little mutant sperms; if your luck runs out and you started feeling something twitching in the mouth or genital areas, I hope you don't fuck around with your good but doof husband or kids, transmitting such illness to them --- again, despite your enjoyment of such practice-make-perfect activities you've unknonwly denied yourself so long!!
lol
hopefully....
you are writing first and foremost for yourself.
Cheating slut
Cheating slut don't deserve a husband, daughter and marraige
New Author
Honestly, its no different (better or worse) than some of the other crap thats on here. Some of JPB's worse things or some wimp that actually likes watching. So she cheats. I am sure her husband isn't an idiot and knew long ago and does the same. She might not know it. But its more likely true than not.
Thanks
I liked it. I liked it a lot and hope you will share more.
Keep Writing
You have a great ability to write. The story wasreally good and you know the effect it had. You write and I'll read.
Thanks
Whats wrong with people?
I want to start by saying that I loved this story; it is very much in keeping with the style of writing known as short short story, a genre in which the ideas are more important then the details. I find too many authors on this site spend all their time reassuring me that the woman they are about to fuck is hot, and that she is dressed to kill. By skipping all that unnecessary description you let me decide for myself. Through your style of writing you were able to put me in the room, give me a glimpse of what you are thinking, and exciting me with the possibility of your being caught. I think that it all works to make a pretty hot story.
Now for all those would-be literary critics out there... what is the problem that you have with it? We are supposed to respect one of the characters? People aren’t supposed to write true stories here? There shouldn’t be any infidelity?
I have to ask... why are you viewing this site? This is an amateur erotic-literature site, not a morals and values blog. If one of the characters being a highly respectable individual gets you off, then so be it, but you can’t force your story telling ideals on someone else. The stories on this website are not fairy tales, they don’t have to have morals, I am not here to learn a lesson.
However, I would add that since my advice to the author is that you ignore the people who wish to give advice on form and style, you can feel free to ignore me too. I just hope to see you write a few more stories.
P.S. I love hearing about your married cock-sucking lips!
Not too bad
for a first submission.
I thought that the theme of cuckoldry, "married mouth", "married lips", "wedded cunt", was a bit overdone. I also think that you could have broken the story into more paragraphs for the sake of readability.
I liked the description of the BJ because it conveyed a sense of desire as well as haste.
Nice effort.
more..... tell.... us of yur cheating
please tell us of yur 'cheating episodes '
I am sure your husband is thankful...
I love this comment, "while I was promiscuous in the early years of my marriage, I remained faithful for several years." Gee, what a BIG sacrfifice on your part. Does your husband know about how many cocks you passed up during your pious phase? Better question, does her husband know how many cocks she didn't pass up? Also, does her husband know he is in an open marriage? I don't think so. This is typical, just another selfish asshole who doesn't deserve anything she has. She WILL get caught. I only wish I could read THAT story.
Not Judging "You"
Thank you for sharing your "story" with us. I am sure that those who commented that this and other stories on here are for "sick" people just happened to stumble upon the site and could restrain themselves from reading these depraved works of fiction!
The story has a lot of potential in it's completion and certainly kept my interest ;-) I just hope you don't delve into incestuous relationships, because then I would have to stop reading your submissions.
Keep up the good work!!
Good frist story
I enjoyed it. It was the sort of thing I come here to read. I take it the story was FICTION. Some people do not understand what FICTION is.
sexy story
very sexy
Quickie
I loved your story, and the way you delivered it. I especially enjoyed the reading thoughts and feelings you had while blowing the neighbor. I love hotwife stories, and yours is real good. As a reader I'd love to know where your husband fits in to the picture. Does he know? Does he enjoy the details of your dalliances? You spoke of kissing him after sucking down the neighbor's cum, did he have a clue?
I don't subscribe to the notion that this makes him a wimp...he's just letting you enjoy your sexuality, and get the thrills sharing the events with you, even if it's after the fact. Keep writing, I'd love to keep reading!
Married Mouth
Loved the story. Married mouth sucking cock taking cum, very good. Please write about cheating with that hard cock. More, More,More.
Liked it
It was great story for your first time. What I don't understand about the ones who hate cheating wives and wimp husbands is. Why do they read it. You can tell in the first 5 or 6 lines. What the story is about. Bur then most of them are like me. My english and my spelling suck.
I'm curious
Why does she hate her husband so much? Or is so extremely angry with him?? She wants to kiss him with a wet mouth? That's about as disrespecting as it can get!!
Great stuff
Great first story; I sorta hoped that it was not fiction, that would make it that much interesting. Your story reminds me of my first wife, in that she did most of what your story talks about.
Good short and erotic story
If this is your first story, you have done well. I will be watching for others.
Loved it
Can I have your phone number?
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