A New Beginning: Bree's Story

Should have left this alone

I usually like your writing but didn't enjoy this one. A bit abrupt and contrived so everyone is happy in the end. Liked the way the story ended before this one was added.

Very Good DG

I don't know how you do it DG. A man writing stories from a womans point of view. If I see the name by DG Hear I know it's a must read. Again, another excellent story.
An avid fan.

Author comment!

When I finished the first story, I received a lot of feedback. They liked the story but thought Bree got kind of a raw deal as Jack took his friends back.
Life goes on for everyone, as life went on for Bree. She found a new life for herself.
I was proud of her for moving on with her life, but what about Jim and Bill and his girlfriend?
I just let you know what happened after the first big mistake.
Go Bree!
As always, thanks for reading and commenting on my stories.
DG Hear

Good story-- Bree did need something

Its a good story and while those who say this story about Bree was not REALLY needed they do have a point....

Still Bree did get screwed badly twice by "life" in fairly short period of time... so I could see the need for something good to happen to her...

However the use of a Cop character --MATT-- BY the author was brillant!!! If Bree was ever going to trust again and learn to rely on a man a COP would be the only way.

Fair ending to the story

I remember when I first read A New Beginning, and you managed to put together a rather romantic story considering the plot you started with. Here you go back and let us see the ex-wife's pain and suffering and learn of her terrible revenge on the 2 scumbags who destroyed her marriage and happiness for a laugh.

Sadly, I'll be honest and say that I still don't really find Bree to be all that sympathetic or likeable. She still is the same woman who had so little faith in her husband as to believe he'd cheat despite his promises not to, and who instead of talking to him went out and took a lover in revenge.
Worse, she allowed another man, Matt, to get her revenge with Jim and Bill. Although to be honest, I don't see Matt as being the type to do that if he's going to win Bree's love. The good cops aren't going to set up what is basically a felonius prank just to get a very belated revenge for a fiancee. The bad cops aren't going to win the heart of a woman like Bree who isn't going to be very trusting of men.

But its above average for this site and DG's usual high quality fare.

Mr. Long Poster

A fine stand alone story

DG:
It's a great compliment to a New beginning but also a fine stand alone story. It's well up to your usual standads. Thank You Ronnie W.

A wonderful follow up story

I was one of the ones who thought that Bree wasn’t given any kind of a chance to explain just like she didn’t give Jack one. I loved the story and if it seems too contrived to some I understand, but it was so well done, no surprise coming from DG, and yes it also made me feel more of the world is a nice place once in a while. Yes, I’m just a stupid romantic most of the time. I love the fantasy and of course your writing.
Thank you
With the highest of regards

Nice job

I enjoyed it, well done as are all of your stories. Thank you.

i agree ... no need for more

I agree with the comment of the reviewer whot felt that this story really didn't need a continuation. Also, the whole revenge motif is a bit juvenile. Sure the initial prank was stupid, as most practical jokes are, but super gluing condoms? Are these characters 2 years old? Live and let live.

Nice, but...

Although I liked both stories, I don't really like the way you wrote this in order to comply with your readers' wishes. People wanted a happy ending for Bree, you delivered, and that's ok. However, I can see that where people wanted revenge on the two friends, you didn't sufficiently agree with that as it was. So, in order to satisfy this, you changed the two friends to be more 'evil' and less 'stupid' between chapters one and two. This is the only way you were able to bring yourself to write a revenge story on them.

I happen to have been one of the people that would think the main character was too easy on his two friends, however I don't like to see an author kowtowing to the whims of his readers. The fact that I disagree with the main character and feel strongly about it is a GOOD thing, not a bad thing that you have to fix. It means that I am able to imagine him as a real person that I disagree with. If you continue to alter character personalities as needed to please your readers, they will no longer be able to treat them like real entities.

By changing the two friends to be more 'evil', you aren't satisfying anything, because now I feel like they are different people, and the original people I thought should have been punished are nowhere to be seen. If you didn't feel like they were owed any backlash, then you should stick to your guns and keep it that way. You shouldn't change them to people where you can agree with your readers and grant them a consolation revenge.

Imagine you're playing a game of golf. You try to hit the ball towards the hole, and the better you do the happier you are. But one day you go to a magic golf course where the hole automatically moves towards wherever you hit the ball. It completely sucks the fun out of the game.

All that being said, as a standalone, it was still a great story.

Puzzled

Was what the cop did illegal use of police powers?And surely a civilian not relaed to the two jokers would not be allowed anywhere near an emergency room.Matt said things would get better when Bree met his kids,but she had already met them earlier!

Fairly lackluster

You have done a lot better work than this before. The writing was pretty poor. Now before evey one goes ape shit, I mean that the turn of phrase was lacking and the plot drifted in and out and back and forth. Definately not one of your better efforts by a long shot.

Yep....shoulda left it alone

Really have bad feelings about law enforcement taking the law into their own hands.....for any reason. Makes them same as the criminals, like me. So here I sit, Matt's children are buried alive, I'm waiting for Bree to come to "rescue" them, she won't make it. Matt? his body is laying in a canyon a mile from here, .338 bullet found it's mark, see, bad cops make being an assassin like me easy. Gotta go, got poor old Bree is about to be in the crosshairs.............Got a job to do, shitty job, but it pays the bills. See 'ya in hell heeheehee

Lousy story

You are my favorite Lit writer. This story is beneath you. I would not have read any other of your postings if I had read this story before any other by you.

I wish you had left the story as it was.

Even though it was painfull and I felt for Bree the story made a point about the need for revenge.

Sometimes good people do stupid things that cost. You have to think of that cost before hand. She had unprotected sex with a stranger. STD's, unwanted pregnency were just begaining of what it could have cost. Even if she had really found her husband cheating her revenge would have only made her also a cheat.

I don't know, but I liked it---

Geez, DG is taking some hits for this one. I felt it fit fairly well into the current trend of one author finishing up another writer's story. I have no problem with the story, in fact I liked it. DG always writes well and with feeling. Bree made a stupid mistake in the original story - so stupid that it was almost beyond belief. But she had a history and responded accordinly. She wasn't the evil bitch that many of these stories produce, merely the victim of a stupid practical joke who responded badly.

This story puts her back on track. Again, I liked it.

What is the deal on this site anymore, anyway? If Ernest Hemmingway posted a story on Lit, half of the commentors would ream him a new asshole because he was so boring. Use some fuckin' adjectives, Ernie! What's the matter, not in your vocabulary?

Hey ee cummings - haven't you ever heard of fucking punctuation? How about capital letters?

We've got authors here who work for a living and every now and then find the time to throw together a little porn story. Some of them are pretty damn good writers, too. Some of the aren't. If they aren't, don't cut their balls off until you've tried it.

I just feel that guys like HDK and DG Hear, have created these expectations that would be impossible for anyone to live up to. DG invariably writes thoughtful stories with a real depth of feeling. Harddaysknight always seems to come up with a new cheating wives twist. Applaud them for their effort. Appreciate what they give you. But don't expect great literature every time out of the box, and don't eviserate them because you weren't as entertained as you thought you should be.

Enjoyed It

This was a nice stand alone story and also good on the ending. When people pull pranks like these two guy's did it normaly comes back around to them in spades.
Loved it
Bob

Like It

A good ending to a good story. Keep them coming. Thanks.

Interesting method of revenge

Definitely a new one. Good story and a happy ending. Good reading!!

Changed characters

and Bree's blaming of his friends spoiled this ending for me.
The friends changed spots from one chapter to the next.

unrealistic (one does think so)

everyone lives happily ever after, especially the silly women at the office who fucked around, literally, most of their waking hours,,,

that Barbara woman, the slut, she's now married to some doctor? lol

Bree, too, has changed her leopard spots and now she says (again) she's found her soul mate!

gosh, what a fantastic world!, with the really bad guys being taken care off eventually (by the likes of Bree, her new tough husband/soul mate, Barbara, et al.) and the good guys?, they all ended up marrying so many good women, even if many of whom (Bree, Barbara, et al.) think more about dicks AND fuck more of them than 15 year-old boys think about Penthouse and Playboy and/or masturbating to such magazines! lol

Another good story, DG.

Isn't there a wise saying something about knowing when to keep your pants zipped up? With my active imagination I seemed to actually feel a little vicarious pain!

I thought the story and characterization was consistent between stories.

Nice effort!

DJ

Do We Really Care About Bree??

Given what we know of Bree in the first story why would we care about what happened to Bree? However, since I read the story, because DG wrote it mostly, I have to say I still don't care about Bree.

I suppose three times is the charm for her but I don't know if she got any better man this time around. I appreciate Matt wanting to protect his woman but since all of this happened LONG before she met him I can't see where he has any reason to set up this elaborate 'revenge'. He seems way too sadistic for me, and a sadistic cop doesn't inspire much confidence. If he really wanted to 'protect' his woman then he should have waited until someone hurt her rather than act on some perceived hurt she says she had. For all he knew she could have been mistaken about the motives of the guys but she had an agenda and finally found some sucker to help her get back at the perceived cause of the breakup of her second marriage.

If she really wanted to get back at the person who wrecked her second marriage she'd have had someone shave her head and Crazy Glue her asshole and pussy shut since it was HER direct actions that caused that little divorce and no one else. Just because she was a stupid bitch and went off half-cocked and screwed some stranger it is everyone elses fault. Aw, poor little Bree!

Given the first story I think Bree should have been left on the trash heap of life because I sure didn't see her as any better person after this look into HER side of the story.

Ray

Thanks for giving us closure !!!

Well DG, so now you are being accused of allowing your readers to influence you - SO WHAT!!! In my comments to “A New Beginning”! I was one of the ones who thought that you were rough on Bree who was more of a victim. I also claimed that his so-called friends were plotting to break up his marriage and that you should write a sequel about his friends an their motives in destroying his marriage. I am proud to have been able to influence the great DG although your use of a cop in the revenge makes me rather uncomfortable. But enough DG, this was a very enjoyable story well up to your usual high standards. As always, a devoted fan! Pete.

GREAT STORY

In my opinion, you told a great story. For those that want to leave Bree and Barb on the trash heap of life, don't really understand life. People can and do make mistakes, but redemption is only a heart beat away.
I was pleased that Bree and Barb found someone to make their lives worthwhile. Keep up the good work. I enjoy all your stories. In the erotic genre, it is refreshing to find characters where love and morality triumph.

Brees second chance

Bree is just a human being she served her penance and now she`s getting another chance at life being a catholic i am she deserves it
Pat

A Big Mistake

The Big mistake was for Bill and his buddy was to messs with those girls and i am so happy that i was never in there place.lol
Pat

Bree

What about Bree you mentioned that Barb had a baby what about Bree did she ahve a kid also or could`nt she have children of her own?
Pat

Now That's Entertainment

I read "The New Beginning" then got side tracked to another author but left feedback stating that I thought Bree was a victim when I read others thought she got what she deserved. So when I finished reading the other author's story I started browsing through yours and noticed the sequel. I loved it! I mentioned before that I had known people that would pull dirty pranks just to watch an laugh and how I thought it was really mean spirited. So, reading this after leaving then coming back to your stories made it even that more enjoyable because i kept thinking about how Bree got used. Probably because I fell victim to those types of pranks. I'm told I'm a little too trusting, gullible, I believe, was the word. I laughed my ass off then cried like a baby at the end. Any author that can provoke such intense emotions like that in such quick succession is A#1 in my book. That's what writting is all about. Makes me glad that I've only read a few of your stories. Really looking forward to reading the rest. Thank you

"ANOTHER GOOD LOVE STORY!" ......... if you ever get any part of your body stuck togather w/super glue.... put an ice cub on it. ...... it will seperate in a matter of second's ............... rich

Three strikes and you are out.

Hopefully she has learned something in her previous two marriages and other misadventures. The real innocent victim of all of this was Barb.

idiot

A story about an idiot,ALSO ANOTHER IDIOT MATT.

Good Story

Well written. Matt and Ray come over as saints while the girls are a bit on the party circuit and seem to not to be as deserving. Bree deserved some revenge but I felt that there was excess use of force, but it is DG's story and he decides. The commentaries were fascinating, especially Bullet's about commentaries. He said it all there. We really have to support our authors!

The revenge fell flat, but not Bree's healing...

To the most part the strength of this follow up is in telling Bree’s perspective and her emotional healing. On the other hand the actual revenge (by proxy) fell somewhat flat for me. One evening the two jerks got drunk while getting ready for a mini orgy. Then - from their perspective - they lost conscience. The punishment started when they woke up and suffered pain which presumably was considerable. Still, not too long afterwards they were treated with pain killers, operated and pretty much moved beyond the worst of it.
It was not ‘in kind’ and I would say not on the same level of severity or magnitude compared with the prolonged emotional and psychological anguish and the pain and loss Bree had to endure – loosing her husband, facing mockery from the pranksters and alienation from her ex, not to mention the injuries she was suffering to her self esteem – for months.

Some ppl r not ready to date again

I loved a woman like Bree years ago. She was stunningly beautiful, but she had the same insecurities for the same reasons. I left her when I eventually realized that she would never trust me. People who are not ready to date again should stay single until they're ready instead of wasting other people's time.

Well written.

Boriiiiiiiiiing !!!!!!!!

Okay

The first page was almost entirely filler, reiterating the first chapter. No one is going to read part two of a two part story alone. You wasted a lot of time on this story repeating things we already knew.

Additionally, it didn't seem to go anywhere except for the vengence bit. I didn't see a lot of point to this story. She didn't offer any insights except she felt bad. We knew all this

The first chapter got a 3. This got a two.

I like the humoruos revenge stories and this story is that.
Bree learnt from her mistake and she can hope a happier marriage with the third husbands. Thank you Mr DGHear for this humurous story, because I laught 10 minuts and it was without murder.

I arguing with some comments.
1. Bree was victim in her first marriage and she began her second one with insecurity as a shadow of her first marriage and 2 evil men built a prank on her insecurity. She made mistake and she was punished.
I think Bree is not a WHORE because she learnt from her mistake and that's why she found a good third husband.
2. I have read 4 stories from different authors where the wives were pulled their legs by some evil people who did prank on them with her husbands fidelity. A bad prank with the infidelity can destroy somebody happiness and the revenge of Bree's Cop friend may be beyond the authority of a Cop, but the revenge did not couse anybody's death (the most important).
3. Sometime a humorous story can couse a little cheerfulness. It is not forbiden to laugh.

Over the top revenge

Bill and Jim's character changes from the first to the second chapter. They were pranksters, but mostly inoffensive. Ok, the last prank backfired big time, but there is no indication of malice from any of them, they tried to correct the mistake, were sorry when they couldn't, and apologized to both of them.

In the second chapter, Bill and Jim laugh and smirk. Sorry but that does not compute.

Anyway, Bree's boyfriend's revenge - criminal assault that could result in permanent, disfiguring body damage, mutilation or worse - is too way over the top and completely out of character for a supposedly good, honest cop.

@FD45 There is a very important thing in this second sequel story which CAN SHOW US DG HEAR HUMAN PHILOSOPHY WELL. Bree made mistake and lost a good mariage and DGHear did not chase her get suicade, become a slut or a miserable personelity. He wrote a way where she found a solid happiness and got a humorous redistribution. The glued condom can be removed by little demage (the rubber can be solved by organic solvents, new skin will develop and the glue goes away voluntary, a hole can be cut in the condom for the piss, etc). However somebody wants to removed the glued condom quickly it will cause serial damege on the cock, but the physicians are not stupid on the ER........

.I am sorry...serious damage....

she was a fucking whore

you dont just do a revenge fuck without seeing who your alleged hubby was actually fucking. so now the guys who were not fucking around on their wives get beat up because she was a whore. and who the hell would go to her wedding after the shit she pulled. women always have a bad reason for being sluts.

A little discuss

I think Bree is not a slut or she was a stupid bitch in the second marriage after her disapointment in first marriage and she is that personality who was able to change herself and to find a third connection with a divorced policeman. I think she can appreciate her third chance to find her happines. I think there are people who are able to learn from their mistakes, but not everybody. The diference between sluts and a simple bitches may be the sluts rarly can change against some bitches.......

I gave it 4 stars ...

... something similar happen to me, a guy at work put a bra in my lunch box, the wife found it and the situation would have gotten out of control but for my mentioning about the bra that was found on the job site . Boy was my wife pissed and then alright about it when we got our revenge. If I ever write about it I'll call it "Bra in a Lunch Pail".

Đear Anon If you have some writting skils you should write this story!

Should Have Stopped With 1st Story

This chapter added very little compelling content, and was needlessly graphic. Bree still remained unrepentent for her adultery; the cheating was totally a combination of her past and her ex's friends. I don't understand the over-the-top revenge...what revenge was she forced to endure? No reason to believe she will not cheat again.

Payback IS A BITCH!

She did wrong but admitted it. Moved on and found a good guy. GOOD TALE!

@ UndrApprctd I read almost in 10 stories and here in an Anon comment (below 4 comments), that the pranks were done with collegues, neighbors or "friends" on fidelity in the USA. For me this is a terra incognita in Europe, I have not met similar prank custom with others here. If this thing is a common prank in the USA, the over top revenge is a believable answer. The Bree charecter was not slut or serial cheater, DG Hear showed us readers during his character's POV. You are right a slut or serial cheater will change her mind, habit rarly, but Bree was not each..............

Fun Finish -

Quick point she made it clear MULTIPLE times she was wrong, regretted her haste, regretted her decision to take revenge on John etc. reread the story - use all the words this time.

The key here - Revenge is a dish best served cold - it was very, very cold! nice job