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Great Idea
But the writing is a bit clumsy and didn't flow as well as it could have. With a rewrite and some work, I think this could be an excellent story.
Good luck...
... in the contest.
Lizzy
A new way
...of looking at Earth Day. Good luck with the contest.
Very Imaginative
Probably needs another re-write to smooth out some rough edges but an imaginative plot. Good luck.
Rumple
Interesting concept, but...
This story is very much in the spirit of Earth Day, but the abrupt change in tense, with no apparent explanation or transition, is kind of jarring. Writing in the present tense is very tricky and should be avoided most of the time. A little editing could have helped.
Leaphilia : making love to the earth
I thought I was the only one! There was an AskReddit thread about unusual fetishes, (http://www.reddit.com/r/AskReddit/comments/1blqou/r edditors_who_are_into_sexual_fetishes_which_are/) and they thought this one was kind of weird. People have been "filling the earth" since the beginning of time; it's an ancient fertility rite. Where do people think that expressions like "the earth moved" come from? I'm glad to see that earth-loving satisfies someone else too!
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