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Unreported Attack: Avenged

byKayeRoiben©
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by Anonymous

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by Nightowl2204/07/06

Revenge

Definitely a case of revenge carried out quite effectively.
If more women were capable and able to get revege like this there might be less rape in this country.

You need help with spelling and grammar. I'm assuming English is a second language.

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by Anonymous04/07/06

I liked it

As one of those people who get moaned at for liking revenge on women I also enjoyed this one, no permament physical damage. Bet his hair is a mess now as he probably doesn't use a brush any more

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by Len Bee04/07/06

Not Enoough Thought Process

This could have been a really great revenge story, but instead fell flat on its face. There was nothing to it. No character development, no real story development, nothing! Letting the readers know a little more about the good guys and the bad guys makes the story. Even a little more in the planning for revenge stage would have added a great deal to this story. And a better understanding of the English language, especially in written form, would also help a great deal. After all, she "plaid" with his sack? Did you mean "played"? Very distracting. Oh, well!

Len Bee

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by don-donna204/07/06

A fitting ending to EVERY rape, non consent story.

Actually she should have brought a baseball bat and batted his balls out the window and then stuck the big end up his dainty asshole.

Rape perps and their fans dserve no less.

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by Anonymous04/07/06

could have been

It could have been a good story. But really, you have to learn to write! Spelling, word selection, grammar; wow, what concepts!!!!

-- KVK

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by 04/07/06

Great idea

but as everyone else said, you could use an editor, and it could have been developed just a little more. But that all comes with practice.

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by Anonymous04/10/06

Excellent

Nice, quick, easy, suscinct(don't know how to spell that word, sorry). You've obviously left everyone wanting more. Thanks.

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