by MisterReason
This is a great story. Very good writing. Got me hard, kept me hard, then got me off. Keep it coming.
Ludicrous premise. Poor grammar. Ridiculous dialogue. Too many uses of the words "baby" and "Daddy". Did you even bother to have someone edit this or did you attempt it on your own? If you did it yourself, don't do that any more.
There was nothing inherently unique in this story, nothing that hasn't been told in the same manner in hundreds of other stories of a similar nature: Single father consoles vapid daughter; he knows it's wrong, but fucks her anyways; somehow they magically find "love" in the end, even though it's plainly obvious they only wanted to fuck.
Your story was no different from the rest of the usual tripe.
Thank you for your support. This is NOT a Chapter one. This is the entire story. Thanks for reading it.
her pussy----Great way for a girl to get vaginitis.
Great taste too I guess
Other than that and the big dickey it would have been a good read
i came 5 times baby it was like i was the girl in the story ohhhhhhh i just love to feel guys cum inside me i got turned on big time you made me cum 5 times thanks so much
Don't let them get you down. It was a damn good story. If they don't like incest, they should stay out of the cat. I love how they treated each other. A really good Daddy/daughter couple.
i loved this story so much. very well written with lots o detail. keep up the good work babe!
I really enjoyed this story. I've actually read all of your stories and have enjoyed them all. Keep up the great work and don't worry about the negative comments. I'd like to see them try to write a story and have as high ratings as you do!
This is an excellent story. There is a tenderness that comes through that is just as important as the obvious erotic content. The emotions also are well described. This is a good read!!
I really enjoyed it, especially the mirror/closet scene and the way she took control and mounted him when he got hard for her again. The plot is a bit implausible, but this is a fantasy, and a good fantasy it is. As a man, I was aroused by the action, especially once intercourse began. Every horny single daddy should have a sexy little 18-year-old daughter like her.
just wish that girls wouldn't get suckered in by the real dicks on the planet; so, so friggn hot. I adore smaller breast and in fact dislike D+
DKP
If you've read one like this, you've read 1000. There is nothing in this story to set apart from the others, not even the forest of arm hair.
Not much new to this story line since there was NO story, The plot line was so thin from his tapping on her door trough the requisite BJ to the actual insertion that it was trite . . . .