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good story

i hope there are more chapters in this story

since you asked,,,a bit long, but,,,

a good Lit editor can deal with the "you're", "your", etc.; it's (it IS; or, it WAS) the story that I wanted to comment on:

go one of two ways: have the mom join in and have a family orgy, without sense of pseudo/real morality --- making it, in other word, into a porn DVD type of a story,,, like 90 percent of the incestory fiction here in Lit;

or develop it into more than a masturbatory tail: make it into a struggle of people and their senses of what's considered right and/or wrong, moral and ethical issues (or why we should not conform to them); etc.

in both developments, you can still tell an erotic, truly taboo story. remember this: a TABOO story is NOT a taboo story if the members of the household, or of their commuity or society, say having sex with family members is OKAY, and everyone is fucking like happy rabbits.

a "taboo" is only taboo, in addition to it also possibly being EROTIC, if and only if there's SERIOUS reservations, there's conflicting thoughts, about it.

a seemingly digressing example of what a "taboo" (note that it is not always about family sex; TABOO can be of any nature):

ole Bill's Romeo and Juliet would not have endured so long, endeared itself in our heart all these centuries, if you simply had two young kids fucking around, sucking each other to their hearts content and their respective parents --- the Montagues and the Capulets --- just urged them on!, or would even bring them food after long sessions of "love making",,, NO!

Romeo and Juliet is such a beautiful, EROTIC, and heart-breaking story because it was a TABOO story: both of their parents wanted to be immortal enemies and thus they wanted, no, they DEMANDED, that kids be immortal enemies as well. Being enemies was the NORM, was acceptable to their parents. Thus, when Romeo and Juliet became lovers, it broke the parents respective/mutual dictums, it broke their sense of norms and mores!

THAT'S why Romeo and Juliet is SO LOVED, so read, so famous, so cherished. It's about the UNEXPECTED, the exception, the willingness to go against what was/is normally considered TABOO.

and a brother, a sister, and their mother and possibly a whole bunch of others having sex, laughing, groaning, gyrating happily ---- THAT is not "taboo", okay? why not? because there's no sense of secrecy, shame, tiltillation, forbiddence, fear of being discovered, punishment, etc. and when THAT is the NORM, what you have, then, is no more than again a cheap porn DVD, where everyone is happy, gorgeous looking (fake breasts and all!), having endless orgasms and screaming sessions, etc. all of which, of course, are fake and badly faked, too! LOL

kind truth

You have the right idea for your story line. More sex, than talk would have been better. Several typos, but because the words were spelled correctly, (spell check never caught them), they were not the words you intended, you might want to read through it more carefully, before submitting. Throws the reader off.

Third way to continue

Have the mother turnm both kids into her naked sex slaves. Since they are both adults in college.

well done

Looking forward to the next episode, hopefully he gets to fuck mum as well as the sister. Be good if mum was bi as well.

shit

shit i give it a 1 out of 5 it would have got a 5 if you had finished it but it's been two years so no hope of it ever being finished glad you never half wrote anything else

THANK YOU!