I loved the teasing way this is written. But I'm confused about Sarah being "she" and "I" -- why the switch? It strikes me that the story would be hotter if it stayed put with the point of view.
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Anonymous04/11/06
A familiar taste
It seems as if Sarah and I enjoy the same game. However, I agree, why the switch from "she" and "her" to "me" and "I"? Otherwise, it is a lovely, naughty story. Would love to hear more.
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Anonymous04/25/06
so great
This story is great. I worked hard not to come before the end. You need to work on keeping a constant point of view, but keep writing!
I love the way you describe each thing that she does that makes her such a naughty little girl. Every instance I was in constant oh no shes gonna get caught this time. over all 5 star quality. I do have to agree with everyone on the switching persons views had me confused for a bit.
English
*whimpers*
more i want more... need more... does he catch her... oooh god i hope he does
Fantastic
Builds tension and excitement gradually until you can almost taste her pleasure in the the teasing. Beautifully written. Thank-you.
Brilliant
Superbly erotic. I came so hard at the end
Good story
Nicely done, builds up well and lets us hope that she will get caught in the end. Hope that there will be more chapters and more and closer shaves!
great start
I loved the teasing way this is written. But I'm confused about Sarah being "she" and "I" -- why the switch? It strikes me that the story would be hotter if it stayed put with the point of view.
A familiar taste
It seems as if Sarah and I enjoy the same game. However, I agree, why the switch from "she" and "her" to "me" and "I"? Otherwise, it is a lovely, naughty story. Would love to hear more.
so great
This story is great. I worked hard not to come before the end. You need to work on keeping a constant point of view, but keep writing!
Wow
Gotta go read the rest!!
Very nice!
Loved it!
i like how you think
and am looking forward to reading more of your exploits, hoping, along with you, that someday you do get caught. and punished.
superb
I love the way you describe each thing that she does that makes her such a naughty little girl. Every instance I was in constant oh no shes gonna get caught this time. over all 5 star quality. I do have to agree with everyone on the switching persons views had me confused for a bit.
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