by Dar_Jisbo
Well half the brothers and sisters in the world at some stage are living like that so why not.
It jumps a bit (from the sister approaching the altar to the ex-fiance's departing the country) but what's seen in normal speed is very descriptive. Thanks!
I thought you could have developed the background a little more, but once you got the bro and sis together, the story worked beautifully. And I disagree that the fiance leaving was jerkily written -- when someone gets cold feet, it IS an abrupt action.
I loved your story! Just wish there had been more chapters, but you told the whole tale. Thanks for your work.
That was such a good story, quick and right to it. I only wish it was longer because it was so good.