All Comments on 'Consoling Sister'

by Dar_Jisbo

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thekiwicharmerthekiwicharmeralmost 18 years ago
Hot & Horny

Well half the brothers and sisters in the world at some stage are living like that so why not.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
Good

Unoriginal but well-written.

stevaroonistevaroonialmost 18 years ago
A little disjointed, but great potential

It jumps a bit (from the sister approaching the altar to the ex-fiance's departing the country) but what's seen in normal speed is very descriptive. Thanks!

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 18 years ago
Good job

I thought you could have developed the background a little more, but once you got the bro and sis together, the story worked beautifully. And I disagree that the fiance leaving was jerkily written -- when someone gets cold feet, it IS an abrupt action.

oldwayneoldwaynealmost 15 years ago
Short but sweet!

I loved your story! Just wish there had been more chapters, but you told the whole tale. Thanks for your work.

AnonymousAnonymousover 6 years ago
Why Not?

Interesting Treatment.

linnearlinnearabout 5 years ago
Quick and Hot

That was such a good story, quick and right to it. I only wish it was longer because it was so good.

Rancher46Rancher46over 2 years ago

Good story but needs more.

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