of the old joke we have probably all heard about a gal that tells her boyfriend to put three fingers in her pussy, then a hand, then two hands, then clap your hands, the guy says " I can't" She says "tight aint' it honey?"
All I can say! The twists and turns were well done. Good writing. See, you can put a few surprises in there when you try. I don't even mind a good cuchold story when it is this cleverly written!
Everytime I'm "TOTALLY" ready to give up on you...
You manage to write something worth reading and giving me a good chuckle.
-I didn't like it because the husband got one over on the wife
-I didn't like it because the wife was stupid
-I didn't like it for the revenge (of course it helped)
I liked it because, well ok I did like it for the above reasons too, but it was because the wife and her lover decided to put one over on the husband, and he waited till he could find something that would allow her not to screw him over twice. Once by cheating on him and the second time when he divorced her for cheating. I think it's unfair how some of the laws are abused by guilty folks when they are meant to protect the innocent ones. This story made it funny to see how someone used a dirty trick to trap someone guilty into harming themselves.
One of your better stories Bob.
I didn't have to worry about my breakfast even once!
He just wanted not to get fucked by the divorce, and he got so much more....
What will JPB think of next??
LOL!
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Anonymous04/11/06
Nice one
Nice one Bob,good guy wins, slut and assholes lose.
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Anonymous04/11/06
CHANGE IN STORY LINE
WOULD RATHER HAVE SEEN YOU DRUGGED AND WITH A BEER BOTTLE IN YOUR ASS!
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Anonymous04/11/06
awesome
Wow, Bob you ought to write movie scripts...great twist of events and it really caught me off guard. Looking forward to your next story...It sure will be tough to top this one!
Here's a movie waiting to happen. I see Michael Douglas as the husband.
Another great story from the man with a million ideas.
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Anonymous04/11/06
Good story
I have only recentlydiscovered Literotica.com and already you are my favorite author. This story was really different and I congratulate you for it. I have read some of the negative comments of you and some of your stories, I feel though that although I don't always agree with your endings, I have to admit that I did enjoy the story. Keep on writing.
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Anonymous04/11/06
JPB at his best
You have the talent to write a real good story. I just wish that you would use it more often. Thanks for this good read.
if you had not lied to us.
An anonymous commentator below mentioned the problem too.
Leaving out information is, in many cases, a reasonable course in a story plot, a few 'red herrings' are also acceptable, but outright lies from the author to the reader are utterly indefensible in any way.
Because Rob knew his wife was a slut waiting for the ganbang on poker night, there is no way he would be wondering if sam copuld screw her, is there?
The line: "I could have been wrong, but I didn't think that Sam could get her." is utter bullshit - he knows Sam will get her - he is bloody well planning on it.
That paragraph about the drive home reduces the whole story to shit.
JPB has not lied to his readers. He may have omitted some things at the start, but he has not lied. Rob knew all about his wife and friend, but he had no reason to think that Sam knew anything about them. After recording the pair for three months he knew their habits and fantasies. Nothing was brought up about Sam. So naturally Rob would wonder why Sam was so sure. Then it is just a small leap to get their fantasies to catch everyone.
As for the author not spelling out every detail at the start, I think he did a very credible job of skirting the facts to have a suprise ending. Its been a while, but I do not remember Doyle or Christie explaining who the killer was to the reader in the first chapter. LOL
JPB, I may not personally like the outcome of some of your stories, but I admire your talent and appreciate your efforts.(okay...okay...Ieally liked the outcome of this one!)
This is probably one of your more intricate plots. Even so, it was handled well. Given the main objective of the husband to divorce his wife and not lose all he had worked for, I found the outcome quite satisfying.
Yeah you did the 'new fad' of not telling us everything. If i could, i would penilize ya ten yards for it but still enjoyable and a good read.
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Anonymous04/13/06
great set up
JPB,
One of the things we don't see enough here are wise husbands who take affirmative action to deal with a cheating wife. This trick is one of the best ones I've read. the husband ends up with everything.
However, I have to wonder about the wife not realizing that this might be a setup, and Bill's refusal to take the dive when the hero reveals he has them cold. I can understand stubborn pride to a point, but it can also cost you a ton, and in this case, it did.
There were six guys involved in the gangbang, but only five of them were supposed to be betting Bill they could get Jenny, so there should only have been $2,500 in the pool, or only $2,000 if Bill took the offered $500 for taking the bets. I always enjoy JPB's stories, including the ones where I don't like the ending.
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Anonymous04/14/06
AMOST PERFECT
THIS STORY IS ALMOST PERFECT.
I REALLY LIKED READING ABOUT TEH ORANGE JUMPSUIT
BUT IT COULD HAVE USED LESS SEXUAL STUFF AND MORE ASSKICKING.
A LOVING VIVES STORY ISN'T GREAT WITHOUG SOME BROKEN BONES.
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Anonymous05/24/06
nice surprise
nicely done.
i liked how the revenge went on. nothing outrageous, but very effective.
great job
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Anonymous09/10/06
this was one of the best you have wrote
thanks for writing this story.it was uplifting to the guys who have been shit on.
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Anonymous10/15/06
Perfect story
Dear Plain Bob,
This story is essentially perfect. I find nothing to really criticize or suggest possible changes on. Continue written along this line. This type of writing is also instructional, at least I learned from the "Trip to Cancun.
RAG
if not indeed your best story ever, right up there w/ "All's Well That Ends Well". Well paced, well structured, the payoff was funny as hell. Just all around, one of your very best.
A delicious tale of coolly calculated revenge where the cheaters get all the rope they need to hang themselves. And, my goodness, they do a spectacular job of it. Excellent storytelling by JPB.
This is one of your better stories. I liked how the cheated husband turns the tables on his cheating wife. There are some little typos in the story
1) "Ai called ahead to let your wives know what was coming and what it was." Ai?
2) "I hung up on her and called John and told him Jenny's decision and he said he start the ball rolling." +would?
3) "I don'' know if he seduced you or you led him into your affair" don't?
4) "so you get Bill to somehow go your bail." go -> get?
5) "Sometimes you just get lucky and damn, but it sure feels good." -", but" ?
If you notice the mathematical errors, you're not wanking hard enough. hahaha
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Anonymous08/11/09
Out of Sight
Loved it, thanks for having a guy with a knock dead gorgeous cheating wife come out agead. Two things, I would like to have read when and how she started cheating with Bill and if there had been others. Next, where did she end up?
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Anonymous01/08/10
The best JPB story.
Some of your stories are good and some bad,but this is your best one.
However, I doubt that so called criminal activity would have any bearing on the divorce. Regardless, she would get half and likely, since he never was drugged the charge if any would only be a minor fine.
I read one of your stories that I hate and then you write one like this one, that is absolutely outstanding. What's a reader to think? Are you bi-polar, or perhaps multi personality!!!! lol
I loved it. Perfect revenge, so refreshing to see a story that does not have a cuck theme. JPB normally writes wimpy stuff as he loves cuckoldry themes....So this one is one of his best stories if not the best. 5 star rating.
Perfect revenge against a cheating skank whore slut wife and her fucking cohorts. When she comes out of prison she can work the streets because that's all she good for.
English
Great Story
The perfect revenge on all the assholes and the wife.
Gotm to tell you
Bob:
Sometimes I like your story, sometimes not.
This one I enjoyed. It was almost devine retribution, and that is a good thing. Thank You. Ronnie W.
Best yet
Well thought out and excellent story, Have been a fan of JPB for a while and this story was his best yet.
best yet lol well close
bob is either very good or very bad no in between ..this is a great one
Wow! Just too good
Outstanding. Just says it all.
Great
Well done - fitting retribution. Good story.
Reminds me
of the old joke we have probably all heard about a gal that tells her boyfriend to put three fingers in her pussy, then a hand, then two hands, then clap your hands, the guy says " I can't" She says "tight aint' it honey?"
Priceless!
JPB,
All I can say! The twists and turns were well done. Good writing. See, you can put a few surprises in there when you try. I don't even mind a good cuchold story when it is this cleverly written!
Best Regards!
C
Everytime I'm "TOTALLY" ready to give up on you...
You manage to write something worth reading and giving me a good chuckle.
-I didn't like it because the husband got one over on the wife
-I didn't like it because the wife was stupid
-I didn't like it for the revenge (of course it helped)
I liked it because, well ok I did like it for the above reasons too, but it was because the wife and her lover decided to put one over on the husband, and he waited till he could find something that would allow her not to screw him over twice. Once by cheating on him and the second time when he divorced her for cheating. I think it's unfair how some of the laws are abused by guilty folks when they are meant to protect the innocent ones. This story made it funny to see how someone used a dirty trick to trap someone guilty into harming themselves.
One of your better stories Bob.
I didn't have to worry about my breakfast even once!
-Risq
Decided to let the good guy win one, huh?
It's good to see you write another strong husband story. I think that this one will be one of your highest scorers.
Ditto
I'll just join with the others. This was a "10". Do it again.
Good going
Nice work Bob - a change from your usual storyline
Nicely done !!!
Very Satisfying
One of these is worth 20 of the 'Becoming a Slut Wife' stories.
fooling us, the readers, by lying
i hate those storys where you the author spring a surprise on us readers by lying. and you did.
q>"On the drive home that night I wondered why Sam was so sure that he could get to my wife.""I found out about you and Bill three months ago."
Justice prevails!
Great job... this was a fun story to read.
Regards, DJ
This was so sweet....
He just wanted not to get fucked by the divorce, and he got so much more....
What will JPB think of next??
LOL!
Nice one
Nice one Bob,good guy wins, slut and assholes lose.
CHANGE IN STORY LINE
WOULD RATHER HAVE SEEN YOU DRUGGED AND WITH A BEER BOTTLE IN YOUR ASS!
awesome
Wow, Bob you ought to write movie scripts...great twist of events and it really caught me off guard. Looking forward to your next story...It sure will be tough to top this one!
Another Winner!!
You're on a winning streak JPB.
Are you finished the screenplay?
Here's a movie waiting to happen. I see Michael Douglas as the husband.
Another great story from the man with a million ideas.
Good story
I have only recentlydiscovered Literotica.com and already you are my favorite author. This story was really different and I congratulate you for it. I have read some of the negative comments of you and some of your stories, I feel though that although I don't always agree with your endings, I have to admit that I did enjoy the story. Keep on writing.
JPB at his best
You have the talent to write a real good story. I just wish that you would use it more often. Thanks for this good read.
Ditto the screen play comment
Cast Sharon Stone as Jenny, except you might have to get a porn star instead of a "real" actress. Maybe Paris Hilton would screen test for the role?
Great story JPB.
Could have been a great story
if you had not lied to us.
An anonymous commentator below mentioned the problem too.
Leaving out information is, in many cases, a reasonable course in a story plot, a few 'red herrings' are also acceptable, but outright lies from the author to the reader are utterly indefensible in any way.
Because Rob knew his wife was a slut waiting for the ganbang on poker night, there is no way he would be wondering if sam copuld screw her, is there?
The line: "I could have been wrong, but I didn't think that Sam could get her." is utter bullshit - he knows Sam will get her - he is bloody well planning on it.
That paragraph about the drive home reduces the whole story to shit.
Hold up a second, you guys...
JPB has not lied to his readers. He may have omitted some things at the start, but he has not lied. Rob knew all about his wife and friend, but he had no reason to think that Sam knew anything about them. After recording the pair for three months he knew their habits and fantasies. Nothing was brought up about Sam. So naturally Rob would wonder why Sam was so sure. Then it is just a small leap to get their fantasies to catch everyone.
As for the author not spelling out every detail at the start, I think he did a very credible job of skirting the facts to have a suprise ending. Its been a while, but I do not remember Doyle or Christie explaining who the killer was to the reader in the first chapter. LOL
JPB, I may not personally like the outcome of some of your stories, but I admire your talent and appreciate your efforts.(okay...okay...Ieally liked the outcome of this one!)
Thanks JPB
Gus
a fiendish pleasure
This is probably one of your more intricate plots. Even so, it was handled well. Given the main objective of the husband to divorce his wife and not lose all he had worked for, I found the outcome quite satisfying.
One of your best....
In my opinion.
Slow, measured, controlled.
Yeah you did the 'new fad' of not telling us everything. If i could, i would penilize ya ten yards for it but still enjoyable and a good read.
great set up
JPB,
One of the things we don't see enough here are wise husbands who take affirmative action to deal with a cheating wife. This trick is one of the best ones I've read. the husband ends up with everything.
However, I have to wonder about the wife not realizing that this might be a setup, and Bill's refusal to take the dive when the hero reveals he has them cold. I can understand stubborn pride to a point, but it can also cost you a ton, and in this case, it did.
Mr. Long Poster
A quibble
There were six guys involved in the gangbang, but only five of them were supposed to be betting Bill they could get Jenny, so there should only have been $2,500 in the pool, or only $2,000 if Bill took the offered $500 for taking the bets. I always enjoy JPB's stories, including the ones where I don't like the ending.
AMOST PERFECT
THIS STORY IS ALMOST PERFECT.
I REALLY LIKED READING ABOUT TEH ORANGE JUMPSUIT
BUT IT COULD HAVE USED LESS SEXUAL STUFF AND MORE ASSKICKING.
A LOVING VIVES STORY ISN'T GREAT WITHOUG SOME BROKEN BONES.
nice surprise
nicely done.
i liked how the revenge went on. nothing outrageous, but very effective.
great job
this was one of the best you have wrote
thanks for writing this story.it was uplifting to the guys who have been shit on.
Perfect story
Dear Plain Bob,
This story is essentially perfect. I find nothing to really criticize or suggest possible changes on. Continue written along this line. This type of writing is also instructional, at least I learned from the "Trip to Cancun.
RAG
One of your best, Bob
if not indeed your best story ever, right up there w/ "All's Well That Ends Well". Well paced, well structured, the payoff was funny as hell. Just all around, one of your very best.
Good effort.
But lets try and move away from the whole gangbang motif eh? Just for a little while...
Fine work
A delicious tale of coolly calculated revenge where the cheaters get all the rope they need to hang themselves. And, my goodness, they do a spectacular job of it. Excellent storytelling by JPB.
hahahahahahahaahhhahhhhahahahaahhhhahhhh
hahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahahaahahahahahah.. .ouch hahahaha.....
Nice twist in the story
Bob,
This is one of your better stories. I liked how the cheated husband turns the tables on his cheating wife. There are some little typos in the story
1) "Ai called ahead to let your wives know what was coming and what it was." Ai?
2) "I hung up on her and called John and told him Jenny's decision and he said he start the ball rolling." +would?
3) "I don'' know if he seduced you or you led him into your affair" don't?
4) "so you get Bill to somehow go your bail." go -> get?
5) "Sometimes you just get lucky and damn, but it sure feels good." -", but" ?
Regards
1+1=7
If you notice the mathematical errors, you're not wanking hard enough. hahaha
Out of Sight
Loved it, thanks for having a guy with a knock dead gorgeous cheating wife come out agead. Two things, I would like to have read when and how she started cheating with Bill and if there had been others. Next, where did she end up?
The best JPB story.
Some of your stories are good and some bad,but this is your best one.
See Bob
You CAN write a satisfying story when you try!
Such originality is worth a 5.
However, I doubt that so called criminal activity would have any bearing on the divorce. Regardless, she would get half and likely, since he never was drugged the charge if any would only be a minor fine.
God damn,what an entertainment!
It could not get any better than this!! Again,well done JPB !
I read one of your stories that I hate and then you write one like this one, that is absolutely outstanding. What's a reader to think? Are you bi-polar, or perhaps multi personality!!!! lol
Fantastic
I loved it! And justice for all. Thanks for the great read!!!
Wow!
I loved it. Perfect revenge, so refreshing to see a story that does not have a cuck theme. JPB normally writes wimpy stuff as he loves cuckoldry themes....So this one is one of his best stories if not the best. 5 star rating.
I agree with Karan.
Hell of a story, it makes up for a couple of your willing cuckold stories.
Excellent Tale
Perfect revenge against a cheating skank whore slut wife and her fucking cohorts. When she comes out of prison she can work the streets because that's all she good for.
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