The basic idea to this story is fine but it moves too fast to create any kind of atmosphere. On top of that, the result of this undue haste is that I was left feeling that it was too much a flight of fancy and had no basis in reality. While I appreciate that stories, and certainly erotic stories, aren't generally grounded in reality anyway, they work much better if they can at least provide an illusion of reality so that the reader can buy in to the fictional world created by the writer. Try to develop the characters more so that they become more 3-dimensional and work at developing the mood of a scene more.
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Anonymous04/26/06
Works for me
I enjoyed this very much. I'd love to be f**ked like that. Where are all the good (hard) men?
When a women is lying flat on her stomach with her penetrator mounting her from behind there are several names including lazy-doggy, the flatiron, jockey position, the cobra, but my favorite is calling it prone bone
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Too fast
The basic idea to this story is fine but it moves too fast to create any kind of atmosphere. On top of that, the result of this undue haste is that I was left feeling that it was too much a flight of fancy and had no basis in reality. While I appreciate that stories, and certainly erotic stories, aren't generally grounded in reality anyway, they work much better if they can at least provide an illusion of reality so that the reader can buy in to the fictional world created by the writer. Try to develop the characters more so that they become more 3-dimensional and work at developing the mood of a scene more.
Works for me
I enjoyed this very much. I'd love to be f**ked like that. Where are all the good (hard) men?
Very Nice!
Great story - loved it.
We Amy's are pretty crazy.. lol
ANAL PRONE BONE IS THE BEST SEX POSITION
When a women is lying flat on her stomach with her penetrator mounting her from behind there are several names including lazy-doggy, the flatiron, jockey position, the cobra, but my favorite is calling it prone bone
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