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Redeem the heroine
Engaging characters are what make a romance. We have to care about those characters to be interested in the story and what's happening to them. I hate this "heroine." I'm hoping you redeem her in the next chapter.
rather....
short for my normal tastes...i have a hard time getting the feel for the "motivation" of the story in such a short chapter but you pulled it off well and left it well..hope to read on soon enough and see just where this is going. Thank you for sharing with your readers. respectfully fan in Texas naynay
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