You don't think this manner of revelation is ... err... a bit extravagant?
You are leaving us readers unsatisfied with a story not finished that's not fair
Good job, and never mind the anonymous assholes, they should try writing themselves if they have the ability, imagination etc.
WHY NOT FINISH THE STORY ,AND BURN THE SLUT TO HELL
Basically a good story. However, it is short and it seems to me that the story is incomplete.
I would think that after being questioned that his wife would discontinue her activities or least be much more careful for a while.
Agreat way to get caught so now lets hear the good stuff about the fight and divorce... and of corse the famouse female line " it's not what you think"
Very original. I don't usually complain about grammar and spelling, but it would have been easier to read if those two qualities had been a bit more precise. Seems as if you rushed the writing. Nevertheless, I enjoyed the story.
gets caught and landed. TK U MLJ LV NV
Good story and I give again 5 stars. I am glad a consequens story writer from Europe. The NorthAmerican writers are cocky they have more consequens story writers than the Europeans have.
That is definitely one way of learning the truth -
We know the ending -
An editor can help with your English - that would reduce the distraction - but the story was very nicely done -
You succeeded in finding a novel method to discover her cheating. However, you left out the best part. The confrontation with the evidence was sorely missed.
But as others have stated it needs to be finished
he got the information and his cheating slut gets the boot. this story is over - nothing else to be said. 5
Mission accomplished in regard to originality. This was a good storyline, but it left me wanting more. The first part of the story was built upon the dialogue between husband and wife, only to be abandoned in the ending.
Well written. Sad,
... and not just fizzle out, as this one did?
I'm reminded of what happened to Scott Broadwell. His wife's affair with David Patraeus was exposed on television while he, Scott, was entertaining his wife Paula Broadwell at a Bed and Breakfast for her birthday. He got the facts about his wife's infidelity on the national news just before they went downstairs for breakfast. How humiliating.
BUSTED!!!!!! Thanks for sharing.
Short and sweet. Caught on live tv by millions.
you were betrayed by a slut, accept it and move on, TK U MLJ LV NV
From the existence of stories in a different language (Norwegian) in this account, I suspect that English is not your mother tongue. That's fine and I think it a great thing that even those people who speak English only as a second language participate here at Literotica. Still, what this story lacks is the polish of an editor, because some repeated errors, most likely due to this not being your first language, make this a challenging read.
usually one of the only ways I guy can tell if she is cheating on them, at least provable. at least he wont have a problem getting a divorce.
original. I agree with the need for an English-speaking editor.
For my liking. I must sound like a broken record, for the amount of times I call for authors to inject some emotion into their stories, and I don't count the scores of what passes for stories, where there is nothing but weeping and self pity. There are more than 2 emotions, people, use some of them! I just can't become immersed in a story where a guy is recounting the end of his marriage, when he is as emotional as a newsreader reading from a teleprompter.
Also, I wish people would stop commenting on authors writing in a second language, seeing as the vast majority of people claiming English as their first language can barely use it! (I always claim English as a second language too, with the first being bad English!) Most Scandinavians have better English than many English-speaking countries, considering sentence structure and syntax are worlds apart for the respective languages!
Good and original story...but for me it needs a part 2, maybe short too, with the consequences for the cheaters...
If it is you definitely need an editor. There are so many tense and usage errors that they detract from an otherwise interesting story. I agree with some of the other comments that it is too short or needs a part two. Good grades on originality.
No, hansbwl is Norwegian, English is a second language.
I do agree he would be well served to have a native English user edit and proof read, word usage and sentence structure are different from what he is accustomed to.
Four stars anyway, with a bit of polishing it could have been five.
But I have seen other stories here that look like they were written in a native language then run through something like Google translate.
Reminds me of old Japanese motorcycle instructions I saw.
I can easily see this happening. But cheating stories rarely are revealed in this manner. A wife's infidelity in real life has been revealed by their children, or neighbors, friends, classmates, TV cameras, coworkers, STD's passed to husbands by straying wives, and being spotted in towns away from their home town, and house fires.
an acceptance into a rigged deck is inane, TK U MLJ LV NV
I hadn't read that one before. Can you come up with an original epilogue? (That would be even harder.)
It's a good start, but the meat of the story is in what comes afterward. The marriage is clearly over, but I have to agree with ErotFan, at least an epilogue is needed. Not enough character development has occurred for us to draw our own conclusions about what happened. It is so open at this point anything from "everyone was kung-fu fighting" to cuckold wimp wouldn't be "out of character."
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