All Comments on 'Old Friends'

One problem you have is every time you meant to use the word "they" you used the word "the".

First, the story jumps between present tense and past tense.

Second, spelling is an afterthought... "There bodies..."?

Third, punctuation is lousy. Example: ..."she turns and stands he pulls her close"... Huh?

I know people hate to read these comments; it's like being in grade school. It just detracts from the overall effect of the story to have to read over these speed bumps.

Please, if you can't write well, get an editor.