Just two points to bear in mind to improve a very good story:
You seem to mix current and past tense, as well as swapping viewpoints between first-person (EG: I did this) and third (William did that) when talking about the same character, even within the same paragraph.
Other than that? immensely enjoyable - now off to read ch2.
Just another unfinished story on here,as with so many others,,a waste of time to get started reading,if there is no ending and it was posted more than 5 years ago,,dont see an ending in sight......
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