All Comments on 'Zoo'

...a lot. Stories about how mutants (or metahumans or super heroes) would live in real life are difficult to write. You've made a pretty good start.

I have often played with a similar notion, (I always wanted to be part cheetah!) which made your story very interesting, however, I really struggled with the first person narrative on two different characters, it made the story pretty hard to follow and didnt do it justice. I would still like to see how the story progresses however.

I am a professional writer, and I think you show real talent. If you don't already write - particularly for a young adult audience - I think you should. This story shows a real gift for writing exposition and internal dialogue, and though I am neither interested in the fantasy genre nor in nonhuman stories, the technical ability you show transcends genre.

I like the concept behind this, as someone else said, it reminds me alot of a couple ideas i've head. Everyone wakes up and is no longer fully human, and people start to side with their own 'kind' and it leads to bad stuff that of course has an underlying meaning for the prejudices in todays world... or something like that... heh.

Always wanted to be a kinda dragon-hybrid myself (I grinned when Ben mentioned the dragon-kid, had a lil mental image of how I imagined myself.) Wings, tail, fangs, the works. Hope to see more of this.

you have a good start for a world that could develope with more entrys i hope you do go on with zoo i will look foward to reading more of your work

keep it up i would love to read the next story

I hope to be seeing more about the "Zoo" Keep it up

So far so good, I would really like to see more, where you take it etc.

wow,thats some great writing just enough detail to keep the reader interested but not to bore,would like to see where it goes perhaps build lives and relationships-say where a new character has a failed relationship because the partner couldnt handel the change and the group help him through-you've got some great ideas, run with it

That was nice. I would love to see another piece.

Perhaps it could have even more different changes such as a Colossus style metal mutation

I love this, it's a great idea. You wrote this in a nice way as well. Good job!

I LOVE the concept. I hope you finish it.

it's really cool! you should definately add to it; u'd win somethin', i'm sure.

You should flesh it out some more. Great short story material.

its awesome, it made me remember something from highschool, pretty much the only thing that i can remember from that time...damn amnesia

Theres no sex.

Fail.

Fuck you,

This is a fairly good intro to an idea. Hopefully your thoughts stay consistent and you expand it or someone else might.

please?

Its a bit confusing when you discribe them. Maybe you can make each chapter from different points of view.

I would love to read more ,,, on how they all

Became ,,, more specific ,, very good start

that was cool i wish you'd continue the story

It Is one of the best stories I have ever read. you should make it in to a book when you finish it.

i have a keen interest in "monstergirls" and i love your take on children like this as a whole. The trials and tribulations of these people are amazing ^_^ please keep writing.

Hope you write more. :)

Can you do a chapter 2? Maybe even a full series?

I know this was written several years ago and you haven't posted again. That's a shame, at least from my view point.

Really enjoyed this short piece of fiction and would appreciate more to this story. Perhaps a series of stories about the hybrids, going into greater detail about their lives and interaction with other "normal" people.

I hope life has not gotten in the way of your writing and please consider rejoining us here at Literotica.

Thanks for the story.

Woodmanone