I loved it! The author managed to create an atmosphere of sexual tension in just a few paragraphs. I think it is an incredibly erotic act to braid your partner's hair, though, in the 21st Century, it's usually the guy braiding the woman's hair, rather than vice versa (not a whole lot can be done with a buzzcut). Also, the age difference struck some sexual sparks too- their ages aren't given, but I'd bet he's old enough to be her father- and the references to his long, thick salt-and-pepper hair simply add to the eroticism. I'd like to see a Chapter 2- in which she teaches him to braid her hair the same way she's braided his- though perhaps in a non-classroom setting? Please give us some more of this story!
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looking good. slightly longer chapters, please, and hurry them up!
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I loved it! The author managed to create an atmosphere of sexual tension in just a few paragraphs. I think it is an incredibly erotic act to braid your partner's hair, though, in the 21st Century, it's usually the guy braiding the woman's hair, rather than vice versa (not a whole lot can be done with a buzzcut). Also, the age difference struck some sexual sparks too- their ages aren't given, but I'd bet he's old enough to be her father- and the references to his long, thick salt-and-pepper hair simply add to the eroticism. I'd like to see a Chapter 2- in which she teaches him to braid her hair the same way she's braided his- though perhaps in a non-classroom setting? Please give us some more of this story!
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