This story was MUCH too short..there was little description.. practically no build-up.. and the sex scene was really short
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Anonymous05/10/06
encore encore
I really loved, please write somemore about this story, i really liked the part where she tool control over him and taking him a little rough but then that's why i loved this story.
Proof that the screening process of this site is low. Either you are 18 and still in high school or you lied and are under 18 and still in high school. I was very much confused as to where this "college" is that there are bells for classes to start? Interestingly naive... otherwise the story was good but you really need to proof read stories not just for error in spelling and grammar but also in silly mistakes like where are these siblings going to school since it sounds like hes a freshman in high school and thats like usually 13 or 14 yeahs of age.
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Anonymous07/11/12
No. Take out her losing her virginity to anyone but her brother. Fix that.
A girl's body should only be shared with the man she loves for life. Anything else is intolerable. Fix that, now. Please.
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Too Short
This story was MUCH too short..there was little description.. practically no build-up.. and the sex scene was really short
encore encore
I really loved, please write somemore about this story, i really liked the part where she tool control over him and taking him a little rough but then that's why i loved this story.
khuh
Proof
Proof that the screening process of this site is low. Either you are 18 and still in high school or you lied and are under 18 and still in high school. I was very much confused as to where this "college" is that there are bells for classes to start? Interestingly naive... otherwise the story was good but you really need to proof read stories not just for error in spelling and grammar but also in silly mistakes like where are these siblings going to school since it sounds like hes a freshman in high school and thats like usually 13 or 14 yeahs of age.
No. Take out her losing her virginity to anyone but her brother. Fix that.
A girl's body should only be shared with the man she loves for life. Anything else is intolerable. Fix that, now. Please.
Wow, that was very different! I really liked it :)
Thanks for writing it for us!
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