All Comments on 'A Super Human Among Us'

somehow i couldn't get into the characters. they seemed wooden. i think it was the relentless 3rd person.

This story, not the sex part, sounds like a series on tv where a character played by John Goodman get hit by a subway train and his brain is removed and put in a younger body with super abilities. His wife and daughter thinks he is dead. Dude make up your own stories.

Short sentence. Next short sentence. Another short sentence. Somehow, this is very boring and annoying to read. A bit more STYLE would help a great deal, especially since you seem to want to actually tell a story.

There was a televison series some years ago on cbs which this story bear a close resemblence to in many of its detail. Like many stories I like it die a quick death.