by Liar
1st - way tooo intellectual, for some of this crowd
2nd - either you have several unexplored potentials, or divergent threads. Invisible plate with spoon in the continental drift, very good there. Anartica works.
3rd - homogenic and polyphony, I'm not getting the drift here, unless it works by being an obscure reference to Björk. I don't know it.
4th - you may think of me as a hateful person for thinking this less than wooonderful, and pointing out what doesn't work for me, so be it. It is pretty good.
take the plates
stacked as broken china
in all your yearny yens
porceline betrays its faults
under glaze of time
so conversation drifts
from back to forth
while we wait for seconds
sharing our bits of little bites
savoring this serving
and looking forward to the next.
tectonics such a marvelous way to pass the time..
enjoyed the poem, will need a few more reads to understand the significance of some of the particular words, but enjoyable, made me think. I also have apoem about plates, wanna read it?
:)
marrria
This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 36,000 poems.
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