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by drksideofthemoon05/09/06

Moving

I don't know much about poetry, but I liked this one. I could feel the city moving in on me as I read it. I liked the form of the poem, and how it read.

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by vampiredust05/13/06

Good

This is a good poem but I think the imagery of the city could be developed further (esp the simile in third stanza which is excellent)

Think about experimenting with the viewpoint, perhaps it could read better if you removed the narrator.

Good work and am looking forward to reading more

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by LeBroz05/09/08

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This poem was selected from Lit's archive of over 39,500 poems for inclusion in today's Archival Review.



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