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A trick of a title
Mention beach or pool and it guarantees readers. Everyone knows that.
Just the same, I rated this story a 4, which is high for me. Why not a 5? Because there was poor character development, and too many typos. Now the typos could have been easilly fixed, with another read, but they were ignored and that's lazy.
The story was great at first, maybe almost believable. But we are never introduced to the other couple; they appear, it becomes a set up, etc. Where's the foundation? And why not include it?
It was a rediculous premise to begin with. I've lived in England. To sunbathe, people leave.
Very sexy
I coudln't decide if I was the slut leading the way or the novice being guided. Maybe a bit of both. It got me squirming in my seat as I read though.
Wet wet wet, fuck I've exploded. I wish it was me being broken.
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