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Raw Emotion
This poem is full of raw emotion, I can feel the emotions that you are writing. This is a very powerful and moving poem. Anyone who has lost someone, or is missing someone can relate to this piece. Well done!
Bri
Heartfelt ~
I can feel and see your pain. You painted this poem with words of despair and hurt that reaches out and holds the reader in the palm of your hand. Kuddo's my friend ~
I agree
with the previous commentators that this is heartfelt but it isn't your strongest poem. Think about removing yourself from the poem and adding imagery to say what you're feeling. Often, a metaphor can be more powerful than simply saying 'I feel...'
From the heart
It was from the heart... technically it could be a better poem but what the fuck, it is a bare heart... i wish i could work on this and set it to music... would you mind ???
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