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not again please
This plot is getting old real fast.
Umberto
As Usual Well Written
At primary issue is whether this will move towards consequence. If it does, then it could be well worth everyone's time as an arousing and entertaining credible story.
Failing that, just another glorified samo suck and fuck tail which almost anyone could write.
Where are you going writer. Hopefully more towards reality.
Old Story Line
But well told
Wonderful MILF
Great start to an interesting story. Keep up the great work and do not let the complainers get you down. If they are only going to complain, they should quit reading. Maybe you should include some pictures nexy time as it seems they do not understand your writing.
Great start!
Keep it going!
Yummy
Your story was mentioned on the New Story Review Thread on Literotica's Bulletin Board in the Author's Hangout Forum. ~ Red
Great Story
Can't wait for next installment. Always exciting to read your stories. Thanks
Oh Yeah
Louise need to get left with a little token of appreciation in the form of a set of twins in nine months that don't look a thing like her husband.
If not that, then a least a nice dose of the clapp or climedia for her to nurture. When hubby finally fucks her well used cunt, and takes his first piss in pain, he'll know something is awry. lol
You write very well
And that is the major attraction in reading your stories. You can seduce me into reading anything! Sorry that some of your readers just do not get it - this is erotic even pornographic writing. Go with the flow and enjoy it. All this talk about consequences and clap and what have you is stupid and missing the whole point by a couple of football fields.
Good start
Yes, we all know where it's heading but there are many things that can happen along the way and the conclusion may not be what we think. Maybe Louise will be lucky and wind up with a legitimate modeling career. I'm not betting on it, though!
But it is pretty hot.
go for it
great start im realy getting into it cant wait for next instalnent ignore the idiots who dont get it
the author's good
no doubt about his ability to tell stories, even ones ladden with high eroticism,,,
but as one anon commentator said, sex with money is so common, it is actually not as "sexy" as CONSEQUENCES from such acts.
now, we know if those doing that as a living are prostitutes, there's no serious repurcussions other than perhaps getting some diseases;
but with a supposedly "respectable" wife, of a spouse in some exectuve position, and two kids in college, the "consequences" for such pursuits --- more than gambling debts --- can be more APHRODISIAC!
we, readers/critics, like to see people cheat; but what we love better is to also see people --- especially those we think "deserve" it --- suffer deeply! what we, NO ONE including the very bad assed ones, don't like is to think that someone could walk all over us and get away with it!
in this case, the woman is that person and we are the husband. while some may want to be the woman, to get her cake and eat it, too; but no one would want to be the husband, but if she gets away with her crimes, then we feel like we are somehow the husband: we don't want our spouse and the spous's lovers to piss in our drink and soup, do we? lol
Very Erotic Tale
She is being pulled in by a couple of real sleezeballs but the reality of it is she loves it. Kind of makes it ok with me in one way, but in another way it makes me angry at them. She may be a latent slut, but she didn't want to be at first. She must have loved her husband to go this long without cheating on him. So, the guys are the real villians here.
Now with that being said, I hope there is a movement toward some retribution for them and even consequences for her. It is what I like to read so I unashamedly ask for it.
Thanks for your efforts author, they are appreciated.
Charleybear
p.s. I am sure that most of the male readers of this story had bulges in their pants like the participants. *S* And if you ladies read this I am sure there was some panty soaking being done. Good job author. Love those wet panties.
written like a woman ;)
The sex in this piece reads as if it were written by a woman, and by that I mean it absolutely sizzles! You've done a remarkably good job of capturing the thought process of a woman too tired to hold her "self" back anymore. The plot itself is a bit tried, but the sex is yummy enough to make it worth it. GOod job.
Great Start
Nasty plot! Now make her a real nasty whore.
Keep the writing at the same level.
wonderful
could not be better !
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