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This title 'Just'
Doesn't do this poem. I suggest another. Very hot image, annaswirls, thank you.
Loved it Anna...
Visual, along with the sounds painted of their moment together. Erotic, certainly naughty and exciting. Dangeous...thank you.
Simply lovely
Sensual yet soft and warm in the mind - thanks.
Hot and raw
Very, very nice. Quick and clean language to describe something that is anything but. Not quite a perfect 100, but close enough.
Raw
unbridled poetry. Enough said.
Raw
unbridled poetry. Enough said.
Title and poem
The title emphasized, though, what I like most about the poem which is the repeated reference to dropping of pretense and other roles.
The word information in the first stanza seemed too clinical for the rest of the poem and made a little speedbump for me, making me reread the first paragraph before going on to the second and third (then going back up to double check before completing). This feels also to have an undercurrent of delusion for the narrator who is in the hotel room, but using the phrase 'every day' to describe the sex (a contrast which points to subtler undercurrents in the scene). Aligned with the hotel room is the use of the word whore, a word that usually puckers my sensibilities like unripe lemon. Unless, of course, it is used to mean an actual prostitute who chooses that name for herself. Here it didn't bother me, perhaps because of the hotel room.
Anyway, this was an engaging, rough-edged, raw poem in keeping with the theme and the title. Thank you for it, annaswirls.
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