Cheating Surprise

Cheating is.........

Well, cheating is cheating, put a foot in her ass and get a divorce. She's still ignoring his needs to be with another, doesn't matter if it is another woman.......get rid of the bitch.

Too short

This was kinda short for a story. More like a teaser than a story proper. Please continue the story. Now, if I was in the guy's shoes I would have kicked her ass. So what if it was a hot scene, she still betrayed him and had been doing so for a long time. Now I don't think that's your style but then that's my opinion. Anyway, this is an intriguing story. Please don't stop now.

Fails by comparison

I would have rated this higher if you had developed the story more. If the twist was the husband finding that the wife was cheating with a woman, then that was not very surprising.

Variations of his theme can be found in ‘Discoveries’ by curious2c, ‘Rainy Day Rubdown’ by particia51 and ‘Shannon gets Her Revenge Ch02’ by Rob Conner. If fact, in ‘Discoveries’ the lover is both black and a woman.

When I compared your story to those well-written tales…well it was lacking. You gave us a beginning but no middle or end.

Has been done before and had a ending

The author says she wants to show something new. This is not new and has been done on Literotica by a number of writers before. I guess this writer hasn’t read a lot of the cheating wifes stories. No ending no new scenario’s not much of a story.
Good writing.

In defense of the lady...

I think the twist is in the first paragraph, quote:

“and the fact that their sex life had completely deteriorated within a matter of months.”

In most “Loving wives” stories the sex seems to increase rather than decrease, a situation I’ve often queried in my own mind. So in my book, the twist is a turn towards reality.

My best wishes.

Your Implication Is Troubling

You imply he has hard cockedly forgiven her for all the prior shutdowns of thier sexual life.

Why did you not resolve it beyond that sick implication?

No reasonable semi-normal man will accept a lesbian wife as not cheating on their marital agreement. Only a weak helpless man would have stepped back and watched then left not having said something.

You have trouble in this arena as I recall.

Sorry, but the wrong implication ruined it for me.

Bullshit

Bullshit.

Something new?

What? A wife cheating with a woman? A story with no ending? As tory with no action?
What, pray is the 'new' bit?

twist?

This is something different? Well enough written, but no real twist here. Perhaps you intend the something new in part 2?

Twist? Not!

The danger in setting a goal (and announcing it) is you make it too easy to evaluate! The writting is good; well above average for this venue. But where was the twist. Cheating with a woman? No. Husband is turned on by lesbian action? Duh! Wife licks ass? Maybe she doesn't do it for Mike and he's jealous? Women don't hear Mike wacking off in the hallway. That's it! I've never been able to enter our house without my wife knowing it instantly. Muff diving makes women hard of hearing! There is a story here but without resolution. I envy your skill and the shear numbers of your submissions but this effort needs something.

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boring

typical

I will say your writing has improved in grammatics, but that is all as these queer stories stuck all over Lit in all categories have no surprises as they are all done there done that.
You still write boring stories after hundreds.

Something New For Loving Wives

Pretty well done. My only comment is that you didn't continue on with the story. It just didn't seem to end in the right place.

As for the typical negative commentors, you gave them their own comment when you said you were trying something new. The unimaginative meatheads just had to write "nothing new" or something juat as assinine to give you a bad rating.

wifes betrayal

why didnt you kick her and her lover out of the house or take a snap shot of her adultry and use it for your divorce against her.is there a ending to this story is there an explanation to your wifes cheating?will you be writing your wifes side to the story?

Pat Murray
Atlanta,Ga.

What!! You stopped it I hope to submit another

chapter. if not youhave a really bad story here. I'll wait and see. Gave you a 3 and will bump iy to 5 if you continue.

cheating is cheating

betrayal is fucking someone else and not telling hubby.she not being doing her job at home and home life suffered.no respect for hubby,fucking in their bedroom.

dissapointed story

You didnt confront the wife and this has been done before except in that story he confronts the wife after the lover corrals the husband to keep him from running off

PatM.
Atlanta,Ga

*yawn*

same-oh, same-oh, nothing new, including NOT finishing the story. this sucks.

It's OK as long as she shares and...

the other girl is hot. That's the rule in my house.

Where's the beef?

Zero score for a zero ending. Unresolved stories can be interesting, but stories that stop in the middle of things are just bad stories. Finish the thing!

ok but

The story was ok but for me it was incomplete, just to damn short. It was just getting interesting, then what, the fucking end. You do a great job but this story needed as much of a long drawn out sex scene as any of those interacial stories get. I don't mean more freaking background. The sex scene was to short and for your info, most husbands would have just walked in and started fucking one of the two women, without asking either if he could join in or not.

BIG ZERO

This was too short, it contained nothing origional and there is no ending.

Men naturally get hard watching sex. Ever watched

buffalos fuck? Or the discovery channel? Getting hard seeing two women fuck doesnt mean you approve of your wife being a slut. It really doesnt matter if she is fucking a man, a woman, or a dog, she is fucking around on her marriage. The wedding vows dont say dont fuck men but women are ok. Divorce her and let her live her lesbian life, she has already emotionally and physically left him. All she wants now is lifestyle paid for by their joint incomes. What od bet her employer will be interested in her working in bed at home instead of on her assigned task?

home projects

a pov that she cheated, and maybe needs more time with mary, a lot more time. and him, find someone else. there is a reality here and that does not invlove what he thought it did. re-adjust and re-format, without her

cheating's cheating

sure it may be hot to watch, but the results are the same. she's distant, pushing him away cutting him off what have you. She ruined what could have been a fun time for all when she decided to go outside the boundrys. If she had communicated her needs before acting it may have worked out differently but her actions left him with no choice but divorce.

Good Time

To move on, get a beer and wait till they come down than ask her to leave, if Mary is married be sure to let her husband know. Wife doesn't love him anymore or she wouldn't have shut him out. Should have finished this, thats the hard part.

one star

when will you shit heads learn to finish a story or don't bother starting one.

That's it?

Gave you 2 stars because it was well written. Would have given you more if you'd finished it.

3***

Too short for 5*****.

So when she cuts you off, or done to once every three or four months, from sex. Once she starts looking at you with less and less regard. You can still hide in the bathroom and jerk off, oh hell do it your bedroom because she wont be there she has left you.

Read the story she was already leaving the relationship. It is only a matter of time until the divorce.

Only worth one star as you couldn't be bothered to finish this story

It's not even that original and I agree with some of the other posters she has already showed the hubbie that he is second behind her lover/lovers so this marriage is over.

once again

Stupid wimp husband hmmm starting to see a pattern I this authors plot lines.

Doesn't Matter

Whoever the wife is cheating with doesn't matter. Cheating is cheating. Forget about two on one fantasies. Dump the bitch.

Their fantasies!!

All of you taking this story out of context saying "It's already over" "He's second to her lovers" its a fucking story! A Story about fantasy, don't take them so seriously

ok she is a cheating fucking whore but i would forgive her as long as i get to play too.

Why did you end it there?

And?

I REALLY don't like to write/imagine my own endings. Trust me when I say most readers WANT an ending. Even if you end it in a way we don't like. FINISH IT!

She's lying to him...denying him sex ... Cheating on him ...I don't care if it is every guys fantasy to have sex with two women. Doesn't this guy have any self respect? I figure not, as the story contained a variation of a line found in every cuck story ... "He also wasn't expecting the stirring interest of his dick." Surprise! He likes watching his wife having sex with someone else - that's your classic cuck! Yup, you did something totally different.

Yet another author on her that can't be bothered finishing their stories! 1* just for that

ending I would put on.

The Girls come downstairs, surprised to find Mike seated on the couch, Sharon immediately asks her husband how long He's been home, His reply, long enough then says, thank God it wasn't with another man, Then he looks at Sharon and Mary and tells them to have a seat,We do have some things to talk about, namely, my participation.

NOT AGAIN!?

You couldn't think of an ending? Not even a BAD ending? For me, this is the worst thing an author can do, leave his/her story unfinished. There's nothing clever or titillating about an unfinished work. I'd rather read something I hate that has an ending than something that has promise, but has NO ending. Go in your bedroom, pull them both by the hair and throw them out naked. Rip your clothes off, jump on the bed and fuck the hell out of both of them. Grab your gun and kill one or the other or both of them. But DO SOMETHING! BAH!

1* Until you finish this

You really need to add chapter 2 to finish this.

Thanks JPB

oh, sorry GA you did not finish and for a moment I thought, well you know. JPB.

Lived it

Since my wife left me for a woman back in 1989 I have a somewhat unique view of this type story. Finding out the cheating is going on is at best the opening paragraph of a lengthy and painful story regardless of what happens after the initial shock of discovery. You have begun a story, barely. That's all. Nothing more. Oh, some trivia: You even got my first name right...lol