Good story and I now understand your take on life a lot better. I'll leave a note to your post in the Writers hangout.
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Anonymous05/24/06
Good
I read your open letter on the author's hangout. I found your comments helpful. You are a good writer. I have read your stories on this site and several others. I like some of your stories better than others. You are correct to write about what you know. I believe in constructive criticism. If I can offer suggestions about making your writing better, I will do so. Otherwise, I keep my mouth shut since personal attacks help neither you nor me. The only suggestion I would offer is to stretch yourself more. Your highest rated story on the site, The Bought Husband, has a good plot, character development, dialogue and narrative. I think you should write more stories like that one.
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Well, this is in response to your Open Letter post (above).
I went through five pages looking for your open letter and decided that if it was not good enough to get bumped before five pages were gone it probably was not good enough to read. I made the effort. I will comment on this story after I read it if I feel that it deserves a comment. Thanks for writing, Bob.
English
I think I should go for a drive today...
maybe there is a hitchhiker out there just waiting for me! Hmmm, I wonder.
He knew what he was getting into an he got into it!
Regards, DJ
Well hello JPB you are human
Good story and I now understand your take on life a lot better. I'll leave a note to your post in the Writers hangout.
Good
I read your open letter on the author's hangout. I found your comments helpful. You are a good writer. I have read your stories on this site and several others. I like some of your stories better than others. You are correct to write about what you know. I believe in constructive criticism. If I can offer suggestions about making your writing better, I will do so. Otherwise, I keep my mouth shut since personal attacks help neither you nor me. The only suggestion I would offer is to stretch yourself more. Your highest rated story on the site, The Bought Husband, has a good plot, character development, dialogue and narrative. I think you should write more stories like that one.
Regards, Boyd
Good little short story
But what the hell happened with Alice?
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Not bad
One of your better efforts.
Well, this is in response to your Open Letter post (above).
I went through five pages looking for your open letter and decided that if it was not good enough to get bumped before five pages were gone it probably was not good enough to read. I made the effort. I will comment on this story after I read it if I feel that it deserves a comment. Thanks for writing, Bob.
Weird Tale
This is a Fantasy! Fun.
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