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Very good!
Rings true.
Despite her comments to the contrary the fact that she would be so casually unfaithful after insisting on fidelity as a marriage prerequisite indicates that she was ready to move on. And her initial stand of being willing to do it again despite his feelings was rather callous.
Too bad neither could recognize it then. They could have saved 3 years.
Sad at the end but that is not uncommon, is it?
Not bad at all
but fregen is right.
She should have had the guts to move on before she went outside the marriage fucking, and he should have had the balls to leave her after her spiteful explanation - if this was real. For the story it worked reasonably well.
I haven't noticed your work before - I'll go look.
Strong emotions, well told.
She was just so ... casual about it for any real healing. Sad that their marriage just drifted into nothingness.
Your writing is excellent and the story is quite engaging. Too few stories actually make me think. This one did!
Regards, DJ
Good
One of your better stories.
Boyd
A good story
that leaves wondering just what the hell did happen. It really sounds like she'll be fucking just about any guy that catches her alone with a few drinks in her.
Normally I would say one mistake could be gotten over with enough effort but she had no real remorse. It was like ok, I did it, it was a mistake, let's fuck.
Where he should have used the cat-o-nine-tails on her ass, either literally or actually, he rolls over in bed after saying he wanted no man fucking his wife. Hell, that's a given with the marriage vows, no? With nothing solved it became inevitable they would part. Sad ending but we really know nothing about how deep their love was before. It sounds kinda like the marriage was in neutral, just coasting along. Just waiting for trouble. And it happened.
What a Load of Shit
The hubby should have kicked the slut out ages ago. How the hell the spiteful bitch thought she could get away with fucking around beats me. Neither of these two idiots deserve any consideration waste of time and space
no emotion period
the story and the plot was dry.
Very nice
I'm actually living this right now, but the roles are reversed. The author has the details so very correct, that they must have lived it too.
This is exactly what writing is supposed to be. Taking the reader to an exact location and helping them to feel the authors experience.
Excellent job!
Its About Time
Its about time that someone had the guts to write a cheating wife story that was true to life.No revenge,just what the final results were to a marrige.
Just another boring one
Nothing new here. A guy has his wife cheat on him and then he leaves. It's getting very boring around here
great
Thanks for writing the story. Seems Like the wife in the story was very eager to lend a helping hand to this "rod' character though. Even after the altercation with her husband, she defiantly told him that it was her intention to do it again as often as he wanted her. Also it seems to this reader that the wife of Rod who was supposedly to sick to fuck him but was able to host parties. This in itself for me was a little hard to believe that she couldn't fuck,suck, or jack him off enough to keep him from "wanting to hurt his friends", as his statement to her said.
I think that part was the only part that I had a hard time even remotely being believable. The other part that seemed a bit unrealistic was that he even went to bed with her at all. I mean the guy's load was still running out of her. She sure as hell couldn't have cleaned up very well in a strange bathroom unless she'd brought along a disposable douche or found the hostesses personal hygeine supplies in the toilet. She didn't clean up at home either, just went to bed like a fresh fucked barnyard animal. It would have been a well known fact that if Rod had a rusty load backed up in him, that his cum would have definitely ran out of her a good long while.
Another wimp husband story
Another wimp husband story.
What stopped me, and still does was the wife's
about the wife's confession. First of all, this was completely voluntary. It was something she felt needed to be done, if not something she WANTED to do. This in itself reaction. What stopped me there was that she felt she had to do it THAT MOMENT. No thinking, no wringing her hands distraught at having sinned, she just wanted to tell her husband. That spelled a serious problem in the marriage. Either she didn't feel he would really care all that much, or she wanted to hurt him severely. Neither possibility seems to have been the case. So I was left befuddled.
Then after the husband foolishly insisted on full disclosure, she gave all the salacious details. And she seemed to be enjoying telling her husband about it.
Then she tells him quite strongly that she was going to screw around on him. Of course only if some guy wanted her and she was attracted to him.
So the husband didn't understand she was no longer considering the relationship with hubby a marriage? After that the story made little sense.
An excellent attempt but not completely thought through. Still, I think it deserved a to score, if nothing else than for originality.
A real marriage of 2 people who buried love
This was short and to the point. The characters were written (I believe on purpose) with little emotion of the incident. It was like they had just survived a car accident and moved on. The wife’s need to try and get control of the conversation and not show any contrition was never resolved. She never faced the consequence even as he put his feelings of betrayal before her. She could not lose control and face up to what she had rought. After 10 years he would know her well enough that this is how she was. They both tried to just let it drop without any real resolution. They buried their emotions and moved on for three years without either coming to terms with their thoughts or apprehensions. This is a classic scenario of denial.
We all have to face our torments no matter how small or they start becoming larger in importance. The lack of real communication and facing up to those nagging questions in the mind eventually move from denial to resentment to a depression of it’s not worth handling these feelings anymore. Of course if you can’t handle those thoughts anymore you have to find a way to cope and these two had no real trust they could talk about it with each other or the need to bring it up to third party, so what ever their previous closeness, candor and love, and you wonder what kind of a base they had to start with, progressively deteriorated and died.
There is the old adage of communication is the backbone of a relationship, and they had no real communication as they buried their feelings and marriage.
Real to life story to me with not a lot of wringing of hands just a feeling I give up and I want all of this to end.
Thank you for the great writing and take on this entertainment
PT
a dark story
It's a very dark story, and I don't particularly like it. But it is well-written, and unfortunately plausible. Real life doesn't always fit the template we would prefer.
-- KVK
good story
good job no old rehashed storylines i liked it a lot
Left me sad.
I think a few comments addressed the issue that the marriage was probably already on the rocks even before she cheated. It is too bad that he didn't just divorce her because it never had a chance anyway. Her comment that she would fuck whomever she wanted and whenever she wanted tells it all. End of marriage for me.
Thanks for the story author, it leaves me with a terrible empty feeling in the pit of my stomach though.
Charleybear
Hes A super wmp-- hes a super wimpy!
sung to the tune RICK JAMES " she a super freak...
He's a super wmp-- super wimp... super wimp...
hes a super wimpy!
everything in the story is fine and reasonable and even to some degree believeable UP to the confrontation at home... this part is truely MORONIC vile and where the author fucked this story up BIG time
"I have another question. Are you going to fuck him again?"
...."I don't know," she replied. She rose from her chair to signal that the conversation was over. I had never seen her face as hard and unyielding as it was then. "I don't know if he wants me to," she shot back at me. "But if he does and if I decide to, I will! And I will fuck him as much as he wants me to and whenever he wants me to!"...
so after the super wimp hubby makes his little speech about what he wont accept and what marriage means he has have SEX with the whore wife!!!!???
are you kidding me?
are you fucking kidding me???!?!!?
are you seriously fucking kidding me....??
the super wimp hubby says
"But there is no room in this marriage for a third person. Not as a regular thing or even on a casual basis. I do not want other men to fuck my wife and I refuse to apologize for that!"
hey hubby you stupid bastard -- SHE just TOLD that she has already FUCKED someone else... and she says SHE WILL FUCK HIM AGAIN and you have NO say in the matter ASSHOLE!!!!!
WHY for god's sake WHY? would you then go have sex with her..... 5 monutes later....
Wife makes a CLAIMS to fuck other men -- she enver syas it was an accident -- and then in fact DOES just that ... and still thinks she can fuck you --the stupid hubby-- and she does...
then she thinks you the stupid hubby gets off on it...
The wife has done MORE than betrayed her Husband... she has ATTACKED her Husband when she claimed the right to fuck anyne she wants b/c she has too much Stress...
what an outrage!!! This is far more than a classic TRUST issue
Her attack shows that she HATES and totally disrespects him... and if she doesnt think he is a decent perosn and a MAN... then she certainly can never work out issues of TRUST his feelings... and stay in a conventional marriage.
This is why the marriage failed. They both claimed to want a conventional marriage... but his acceptance of sex with the whore wife so soon after her ATTACK and betreyal on him DOOMED the marriage...
Great reading!
The story was good, no...EXCEPTIONAL! But like so many others on this site, was definitely something I have a hard time agreeing with, as a Social Scientist. Our society is definitely fucked up when it comes to good mental health of its residents.
I agree with Troubador
For me the story was powerful for a while. But, after their reconciliation (which I found implausible, as it happened so quickly), the author tells us that the marriage just slowly withered away. But he does not explain exactly how and why this happened, nor does he make clear that it was her adultery and the erosion of trust that caused it. In fact he almost says the oppostie.
So I like the story and admire the talent of the writer, but agree with Troubador that the story was really not well thought-out, and that it petered out in the final section.
ohio
So so
While there were no grammatical mistakes and the story flowed well, I found the statements by the wife to be unrealistic, and so I can give you only a 75%. The incongruities have been pointed out by several other commentators (the wife insisting on fidelity and then being unfaithful because of several lame excuses, such as neglect by the husband, alcohol, a rough time at work; the husband immediately reconciling with a wife who has just stated that she may be unfaithful again, and then minutes later insisting she will remain faithful forever; Rod's wife being sick but not sick enough to host a party, etc.). Yes, your story was sad and realistic as to how two people can fall out of love, but I would have liked to have seen a more realistic portrayal of why the wife chose to be unfaithful and why the husband would try to immediately reconcile with her. -- WhiteKnightAR
Gutless
The way she presented her cheating to him and then said she would do it again if she wanted to ended it for me. And it would have for any husband I know personally too. This guy is a fool or a woman. Men don't think like that. After that statement, she would have had a choice, leave, or be hurt, or die. No more discussion that day. And then to "forgive" her so quickly? What bullshit, you live in a bubble, or what? Stories like this deserve a big old ZERO
I agree with below totally gutless
I have often found that people write stories from their own minds. Your's is a fucked up gutless mind. Please do not write any more. No don't thank me. My advise is free.
Interesting
story. So, this is how a marriage dies, not with a bang but with a sad whisper. The 'trust chip' was played, even though trust is never a bargaining chip. It can't be by its very nature ever thought to be negotiable, tradeable, or part of any other bargain. It is or it isn't there. Fini. It is too bad all that passion was spent around a table instead of being used to regain their fire. Sometimes marriages end because of the ennui, the 'don't give a shit anymore', the passive acceptance of atrophy and death. I felt that ennui in your story and I think you did a good job of bringing it out.
Good job.
I Liked the Start
of the story. The infidelity was brought out in a different way than we usually see. Most often the husband comes home early and discovers his wife in bed with a friend/stranger/ next door neighbor etc. At least we were spared that.
The calmness of the husband disturbed me throughout the story. Where was the expression of disgust, outrage, anger, or any other emotional response? Less than two hours earlier his wife was spreading her legs for a friend of his and doing so willingly. Yet he calmly asks for a recitation of events and then forgives her. I found this part hard to accept.
But I did like the ending which described the deterioration of the marriage over an extended time period. I found this to be believable.
Thanks for a good read.
Yeah, you know, can't say I was a fan of this =(
I mean I *tried* to keep an open mind, but I just couldn't be a fan of this story.
Hopefully this isn't taken as offense, but I do have to say this: Your not a fan of husbands, while staying civil, getting upset with their wives for cheating on them for any reason are you? It appeared to me that you see that as demeaning the husband to even ask about their wives affairs. It almost appears to me that if the husband doesn't quickly accept it and go on by the end of the story he's really the bad guy.
I say that for a few reasons:
-You had the wife describing how she gave their mutual friend a bout of mercy sex, but the wife was the one who got offended by the husband even daring to ask any questions about what she did.
Examples:
Husband:Did he . . . did you let him . . .?" I blurted out.
Susan sat erect in her chair, staring back at me levelly for several long moments then she spoke, calm and low, her voice edged with ice, "Of course! I don't pull away from you, do I?
Ok, this blows me away. The husband was wrong for asking? I have to tell you, if my wife is expecting me to reconcile after this (and an ice cube has a better chance of staying frozen sitting in a skillet on the stove) I want to know what I'm in for. Some folks may not want to know, but I want to know if he's getting things she's been denying me, whether they were wearing condoms (HIV is a possiblity you know), if the condom broke, any host of things. Asking what happened needs to be known. Only stupid people don't ask and hope for the best in a case like this.
-Gotta say I loved this piece:
I felt miserable and small for having forced this recitation and I wanted something back. My resolve finally crumbled and I gave in to the need to hurt back, to regain the upper hand and force her to surrender.
The husband felt miserable and small for asking "Excuse me, you've been screwing my friend, called it mercy sex because his wife was unable to have sex with him, and you decided, without talking to me about it in any way shape or form to be her proxy, and now I'm the bad guy for making you tell me what you did so that I would know if I should be calling the "Free Clinic" to see when the next appointment is available.
Small and miserable you said.
Really?!??!
Darn, I didn't really hide that scarcasm did I? You made the husband out to be the bad guy for asking details about his wife screwing around on him. Wow, just wow.
-Then you added this gem:
"Yes," I said at last and with all the venom I could muster, "I have another question. Are you going to fuck him again?"
I knew before the sound of my voice finished dying in the room that I had made a mistake, lost my self-control and damaged my dignity badly.
Let me see, his wife just had sex with his friend. She told him matter factly that she did it, wasn't ashamed she did really at first, was more put out that they didn't just move on quickly after her little revelation, and when forced too she gave him all the details she could presented in a manner to inflict the most amount of pain she could while taking jabs at him, and you rob the husband of any dignity what so ever in this story.
You didn't write the husband as ranting and raving. You didn't write him as screaming or hitting her. The only thing you did was let him ask "once" a scarcastic manner "Are you going to fuck him again?" and then you wrote this about the husband "I damaged my dignity badly"?!?!
Ok, I'm sorry, but I have to ask, are you really Male?
No man would sit though such a "SELF RIGHTEOUS SPEACH" from his wife about how it was for the other guys benifit that she had sex with him, or how his wife did it because she needed to blow off steam and the extra marital affair was her way to do it, doing this all while at a party with her husband, and the sole angry comment made by the husband is seen by the author as damaging the main characters dignity!?!?
I guess the wife was so far in the wrong it wrapped itself around itself at some point during the story and was seen as her being in the right somehow?!?!
SAY WHAT!!
-Then when you had him asking for her forgiveness for daring to asking for details of what she did, again most everyone, male or female, would want to know what the full extent of the battery of test they would require when the free clinic opened the next day, because he had no right to ask about her brief affair??!?!
Ok, after reading this I have to say, I was so ....... GEEESH, I can't even think of a good word here. This story was so slanted it wasn't funny. I can't believe the number for folks saying what a good story this was.
You had a wife who felt it was perfectly fine to give another married man sex, because his wife was unable to help. The same wife felt it was ok because she was helping him out and she was frustrated by lifes problems, and instead of talking to her husband about his part in those problems, felt it was ok to seek this from another man. Pulled out the 'SELF RIGHTEOUS' card on the husband for daring to not understand she was doing their friend a favor by having sex with him and sought to hurt him as much as possible for daring to ask what she did. And then, when I thought it couldn't get any worse, you topped it off by having the husband being so pittyful that I starting getting ill to my stomach. What husband sits quitely by while his wife confesses to an affair then thinks he's "damaging his dignity" by asking if she planning on doing it again, only to tell beg her forgiveness for asking for details of her affair.
Bleah!!
-Risq
I think Risq gos a bit to far sometimes
But not this time. He covers the husband and wife pretty well. I'd also like ask about where you had Rod say "Susan, I would never do anything to hurt you or Jim."
How in the hell can you have sex with your friends wife and not hurt someone? I'm not crazy about revenge, But I don't think I've ever seen a wife cheating with a friend story where the friend deserved and beating more then this one.
The way the break came with a whimper seemed in line with the end of some long term marriages I've seen. How you got there wasn't.
Bullshit
Do any of you readers condone this crap?
Time waster
This sort of self-indulgent nonsense is not suitable for Literotica. You waste our time.
Rhaspike loves super wimp hubbys & Male bashing
once again RISQ is 100% correct..
first it is OBVIOUS that rhaspike is QUEER... and /or MENTALLY ILL. The inability of the author to come even close to what married or committed heterosexual couples think... say.. act.. and do in various situations is a MOST significant.
In fact if you go back and read ANY of rhapsike's silly little stories you will find NO case of the hubby / man EVER gettng angry shouting screaming walking out and turning the wife/ woman away... NO MATTER SHE HAS DONE.
not 1 example....
Amazingly People who should know better THIBNK this is a good story... PeggyTwitty called this story "GOOD writing?..." what the fuck? Kanga Fregen and Nighowl alos said this was Good story...
I think the evidence is clear... in the loving wives categoty the number of readers that insist the hubby always reconcile" no matter what far FAR exceeds the "throw the whore ou"t crowd
every story is from this no talent author is the same shit.. super wimp hubbys
Unfair criticism...
from the trolls, my dear.
This is a very pure, and -true- telling. In the pressure of making a decision, as he had brought to bear when his wife demanded him to forgive her, people say things they don't have time to take back. No matter how hard you try to live that commitment down- sometimes you just can't.
More marraiges die a slow death after a breach of trust than in any other fashion. You stop loving each other, then you stop liking each other, and eventually, everything in between just withers away and dies.
I enjoyed this story immensely. Ignore the trolls, anything that doesn't allow them to stroke off in thirty seconds or less is beyond their capacity for understanding.
Falling.
Not a great story
I can't give this story a good rating. Though some of the comments are worse. People try to remember that you can criticize a story without attacking the author personally. This is particularly obnoxious when done either anonymously.
I do think that Risq's comments were right on the money but there was one thing that caught my attention that no one else seems to have commented on.
Specifically:
"What I wanted you to understand was that I had this happy feeling about having helped him --- balm for his ache, I suppose, and I wanted to protect it, to keep it just for me, a completely female reaction. Describing what happened in grisly detail ruined it."
"Sorry, Babe."
She had a happy feeling about having cheated on him and he ruined it. And he then apologized for it!
Another thing that just didn't fit to me was that she supposedly felt so terribly guilty about it but her apology was weak and very late. The husband apologized more than she did!
I do not feel that any man (or woman) who forgives and reconciles with a cheating spouse is automatically a wimp but in my opinion this particular husband did qualify.
Getting Closer to Reality But
Your talent and style is very strong as it has been.
You can verbalize thoughts we all have extremely well. However, your males while quite accomplished and educated are too soft at inappropriate times.
There might have been a few men who did what your lead did, but the majority either 1) would have turned back and a)dropped her back at the party to find her own way home or to stay with her lover, b) dragged her in to confront and belittle her and her lover while informing his wife to ready a room for her husbands new slut. 2)Pulled over and discussed everything right then and there while losing it at interval as a man would more likely have done.
However, it was your story and it was very good until home. People / men are not that rational or in control - it felt contrived. Good God man, Do Not Pass GO or Collect $200.00 but go right to bed - with her after what she said!
Cmon, you were driving toward a preordained but contorted slippery position that wasn't real. The fact that you didn't see it is perplexing. You had a strong story of consequence but introduced a male who didn't fit. Rational horseshoes throwing kinda guy and now aw shucks sorry you are mad but I'm hurt. Hurt? Bloody ripped up as I see it.
The ending was quite believable and deeply introspective.
So, great ability, opening, and close - the meat of this wasn't comparable to either side. Perhaps you haven't had your manhood stripped from you - lately? More than that your expectation of human respect.
Talk to a few spouses who have experianced a disrespect as you describe. Contrary to what you said - the trust never comes back but you described the big insidious slow death very well - it was expected and you delivered.
One has a sense that a self imposed 2 page limit governed some what you did but perhaps I'm wrong.
Damn you are talented - just a few wrinkles to iron out if you wish.
Excellent Story!
It was sad and bitter but the overwhelming point was that cheating has its cost. Although the couple discussed the act what was not discussed was the reason why she did it. Had she lost respect for him (she even had to tell him so she could feel better and unburden herself)? What does it mean when she said she loved only him (she fucks a friend at a party where they could be discovered)? Why was it important to let him know how good she made it for Rod?
Obviously the marriage was dying even before this incident.
Although more true than not some people do not have the courage to end a bad situation so it just lingers.
SleeplessinMD
Realistic, well–written, but...
I always watch the fur fly anytime anyone publishes a "Loving Wives" story with some amazement. I'm particularly not sure why this one has aroused such passions. It's well-written, realistic and believable--what it's not is very interesting or involving. Yes, she cheated, yes, he was stunned: so what? The problem is, I think, that the husband and wife seem to be generic prototypes rather than specific people, and it's hard to emphathize with a prototype. It also seems to me that the more interesting part of this couple's saga, the steps by which they move from momentary reconciliation to divorce, are compressed into a few brief paragraphs at the end. Of course, that process would be a whole lot more difficult to write about. Neverthess, you are a good writer and I look forward to reading more by you. Best, Ken
I'm so angry with her!
and, then, "tell me... all the [juicy] details... of what he did to you, with you..."
she did. but not juicy enough. so, he said: "I mean every little detail..."
"well, he uh,,, [all the juicy details]"
"well, are you happy now?"
"yes, [his anger is now replaced by an err uncomfortable hard-on] that's aweful but it's good to hear it all, Susan. Now, if you want us to be back together, you must promise never to do that again, y'hear?"
"yes"
"let's go to bed and make love, now that that business done with",,,
LOL
that's "believable" as a story?
Unrealistic
I usually would not read a story by an author who wrote the other stories this author wrote, but the subtitle piqued my interest in the lack of other interesting stories. I usually take a look at the submissions page of an author I do not know or read the feedback before I read such a story. I was unlucky this time.
I naturally agree with what Risq said, but not the way he said it maybe because I have not read other stories by the author. The Troubador spelled it out more gently.
The whole story is like nobody gave a damn about the marriage or fidelity despite their saying otherwise. The only explanation I could come up with was that both were mentally disturbed. K.K.'s last parody was much more realistic than this one.
I know what it was like. I lived this story
Very sad and most real. not what I come to the site for mnormally. BUt this one was right on the money
Let me appologise to the author a second
While I still feel the same way about the story I did when I first read it, I think I may have come off a lot more "harsh" than I intended. I thought about it on the way to work this morning and I'm pretty sure that what I wrote could really be viewed that way. As harsh I mean. And I'm sorry I didn't mean for it to come off that way when I started typing.
What I should have said was this:
The story for me, when I read it, came down to this, the wife had an affair with a man in a house where his wife and her husband was close by and she felt that neither her husband or his wife had any business knowing about it.
In the story, for all intents and purposes, the wife didn't really feel all that sorry or guilty about. Just sorry that he felt hurt by it. She viewed it, and continued to view it, as a "gift" from her and not as a tawdry affair, and that it was her buisness and only her business alone. That her husband didn't factor into what she did and he had no right to ask her about it and he had no right to know anything more about it. Other than when she told him it gave her a good feeling to do this with his friend. And that she didn't want to have to tell him that the other man was a better lover than he was.
Now what confuses me is that people have felt for years that it is wrong for the husband to be out Tom Catting around, sleeping with various females and spreading their "gifts" around to them. But in this story we have a woman doing the same thing and the story is written as her defending her right to do so. Why is it seen as wrong for a man to do this, and not consider his wife's feelings, but it can be written for her as her "right" to do the same thing? That is a double standard for me that is of the worse kind. For me it's the same as when people do reverse discrimination and feel it's ok because they believe they are justified in doing it to other people some how. That's what I thought of as I read this story.
But when I looked at your "husbands" character in the story, it was the complete opposite of the wifes. He was quite, meek, non aggressive, he felt he had no real rights beyond what the wife told him he had when they were first married. Does really make sense? He was the wronged party here, and by the end all he did really was tell her it couldn't happen again reasoing that it was because "she" was the one that pushed for fidelity in their marriage.
His wife had just had sex with one of his friends, defended it as a gift of her body to a man in need, and now she was trying to make him feel as bad as she could with both her attitude and the way she told him graphically how much better his friend was than he was with sex, and the husband agreed with her assesment of him in the end. And continually, you as the author, gave the appearence that the husband's character shouldn't have pried into what his wife did and that it was never any of his business to begin with.
Then again I guess I again am lost here because, the next day they carry on like nothing ever happened. But later what does the marriage in, wasn't really the affair, but the fact that now they have to consider that one of them at any time could cheat on the other, well in the wife's case a second time on the husband. They broke up, not over what did happen, but what was possible and now "could" happen at any time since it had already happened once.
The main character didn't really seem "real" to me. He seemed like man who was married to a woman, and I apologize for any offense with my next statement because I "HOPE" it's reads as I intended and is not taken as an insult, but the main character reads like it was written from the view point of how a woman might feel (or think) a man "should" feel for intruding on or into somewhere she feels he shouldn't. And the husbands character validated this opinion I have when I read it.
The whole story seemed to be slanted to give the impression that from his wife's view he was in the wrong. She was giving a gift of sex to their friend and the husband tarnished it. But that was a gift that wasn't hers to give away freely. Well by most marriage vows, and what made it even harder to read and follow was that the husband seemed to validate her opinion in everything he did once he was told. Giving me the impression he felt he really had no business even asking her anything beyond what she wanted to tell him. That possibly that he should have freely forgiven her, with blanket forgiveness, and that not doing so was possibly another factor in their divorce 3 years later.
That's why I didn't really like the story.
Hopefully this isn't as combative as what I wrote earlier. Sorry about that, I guess I get tired of so many one sided stories around here.
-Risq
balance
I went back and read this story two more times. For me part of the problem with the story is that the confession/confrontation was written so powerfully that it overshadowed her weakly written remorse later in the story when she cried and sobbed on his shoulder; and then she asked again if he really forgave her.
In my opinion if the author had written this section a little stronger and left out the husband's apology then the rest of the story would have worked.
But, that is just my opinion.
THIS SUCKED
I AM SORRY i WASTED MY TIME READING THIS SHIT
GAVE THIS A FIVE.....
WHEN A STORY ALWAYS ENDS LIKE WE WANT IT TO THATS.....TELEVISION AND WHEN PEOPLE WHO HAVE POSTED NOTHING TELL A "WRITTER" WHAT HIS STORY SHOULD SAY THATS...HYPOCRITICAL...THANK YOU FOR SHARING YOUR TALENT
Very Believable & Enjoyable
Some people may not like this story because it is well written and there is no rape, colour, incest or amazingly large cocks. I found it to be a very well told in a different style to the norm.
lets be real
she treated and talk to hubby like a sissy.she go and fucks another man like it was everyday thing.no emotion and feeling .
Great story
Even if you lived through something like this you wouldn't know if the marriage died because of the infidelity or the fucking happened because the marriage was dying.
Well written, but confusing
I thought this was a very well written story with a plot that started out well but seemed to fade badly after her confession. There seemed to be very little emotion between the couple and her irritation at having to provide details of the encounter totally confused me. Her complaint that the details destroyed her "gift" did very little to clarify the situation. Did she plan to give herself to any unhappy man or did she plan on sex whenever she became depressed? As I said the plot was vague and depressing. the Ct. Yankee
Saddened
This story had a depth and level that spoke of reality. It was written in such a way that led you to believe the author was simply trying to get pain off his chest from an actual, similar experience.
I would have preferred something more erotic rather than painful and heartwrenching, but I'm not the author, only the reader.
I hope this story was cathartic for the writer.
Well done
For what it's worth, in my opinion this was a well done, well written and thoughtful tale. There are more truisms here than most realize. Kudos to the author.
Well Worth The Reading
The story part of the actual act of betrayal was sketchy and limited, the confession a bit diminutive, I would have enjoyed seeing far more suspense as a lead up to the confession and more emotional content in the confession. Still, as far as the outcome of the story and in comparison to others of its kind, it tops them in being far closer to reality. (There are no winners in such situations.) All in all it was well worth reading.
I Love A Happy Ending
Took the sorry ass wimp long enough!
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