by creamscream
I would have liked it better if you had gone into more derail about the first night.
I agree with the other people... there's nothing erotic about this story.
Your story was mentioned on the New Story Thread on Literotica’s Bulletin Board - Author’s Hangout forum ~ Thanks for the read ~ Red
To make a completely horrible story? I mean, you give a back story that could have been told a little more, maybe give us something to work with. You went by too quick with everything. If you're going to write something, try not to do it in between jerking off on other peoples, good stories.
I hope you continue enjoyed her rough treatment. There is nothing fluffy about forced sex and it shouldn't be written that way. But a little more detail of her abduction, his intentions and rape scenes would make story better.
Though the story could have been good, the way it was written is pretty poor. I think it would be in your benefit to rewrite it, and perhaps get someone to help you along the way.
Just out of curitosity, being a woman who loves a good forced sex fantasy, what was this about? the premise is okay, but it reads like you started it, then got tired, or bored writing it and just ...stopped
i dont care what you guys say, that story was one of the best things i have ever read. i though it was written very well, and i loved the whole story from begining to end. BRAVO!!