Strictly Business Ch. 02

thanks for finishing the story

cliffhangers are a pain.good story.

Very Good

Nice ending to your story.

Boyd

My Apology

I told you I would apologize and I will. There was no neck snapping horseshit in this part and no stupid revenge stuff. Well done. Two suggestions: Maybe this could have gone into the romance category, although I really don't care which category one puts his stories to tell you the truth. And the Navy SEAL stuff is a bit overboard.

I noticed that none of the evangelicals bothered commenting on this story when they found there was no revenge plot in part two. It's what they love to see but writing to please them (which some do you didn't) is always a mistake. It takes away from what you really want to write.

Good read.

A very good read. I hope to see more of your stories in the near future.

TOLD YA!!

muchg ado about nothing

Nice

A feel good story,which is a rarity in these cynical times.Welcome to a new very promising author.

Thank you!

What a pleasant surprise, such a feel good story. This is what the Loving Wife section should be all about.

Really different plot and well developed and told

I thank your writing is good and your plot was different enough. That is hard to do.
Thank you for your hard work and sharing your talent.
PT

excellent

I thought she was betraying him,but only about Ron's surprise .Very good writing. Can't wait to read more of your stuff.With high regards, Luis

I enjoyed the story

A bit contrived here and there, but what story isn't?
Can someone tell me why Holly had to go up and get fetch Ron's new love from behind a door? She couldn't find her own way thru a door?
And, we really could have stood the pressure of reading the whole page and a half in one session.
But a good start.
You might also consider replying to those who send you private comments and include their email addresses - just a thought.

Original and Well Done

Excellent story. The plot was original---at least to me. A nice ending.

It is a pleasure to come across a story of this quality.

Doubt's can be like cancer

eating away at a relationship.

This was well done with a good understanding of relationships.

Regards, DJ

Very likeable

Sure, it's got a whacky plot but LYG tells the story in grand style and makes us enjoy the characters, liking them for the foibles as well as their strengths. Thank you for a story well-told.

Great story

and unlike some others I have held of comments until it was finished.The story was well written and well thought out, and I enjoyed it very much.I had a little laugh in part one when Ron said that Holly would not give up the baby because she had been brought up in a strictly moral family.Did not stop her going of with her married boss and getting pregnant though did it?

Typical LYG

and good writing as well. I love it. Thanks.

Now At'sa Lovin Wife Tale....

Nice job buddy, really well done. --- To answer someones question: The trip across the stage was a T-E-N-S-I-O-N builder. Worked pretty well too, huh?

Stick in the Mud

Loved the story so don't get me wrong. It takes two to tango and Holly knew Ron was married when she committed adultery with him. So once a cheater always a cheater. Given time and opportunity she will do it again. But don't feel sorry for Rob when I happens after all he was involved with the cover up.

Loved it

With respect to Tears of Sorrow's comment, I am first a bit skeptical of the proof of the " once a cheater always a cheater" proposition. Is it 50% correct, 95%,99,99%? Nothing is that absolute in my experience! Especially in human relations... Furthermore, if she was a cheating spouse it would carry much more weight with me. But as a fairly innocent maiden, come on! She does not have that feel about her! rob knew what he was doing, except he should have mentioned his love earlier!

ORIGINAL

I can truly say that I haven't read another story that even comes close to being similar. I would have liked a little more fluff about the family life after they recommitted themselves which would have included a brother or sister for Marie. What can I say, I'm a romantic at heart. Great Story, Thanks LYG

Business or Pleasure?

Don't have much to say about this story. It is well written and a story that has something behind it. It is not just a story that has honor and class in that he is willing to sacrifice his single lifestyle to help out a friend, it also shows the class that a young woman can actually show a bit of class (and honor) by not blackmailing the boss. One other thing that puts this story at the top, it has a happy ending, something becoming very rare in many of the stories written recently...also I am a sucker for a happy ending.

Magnificent Story

You did a great job in writing this story. It is more of the kind of story that I like more than all of the fucking and sucking stories that you find on Leroticca. It had a great ending and you made it a great story by giving it such a great ending. Thank you.

This story is not super, but hyper, Hyper, HYPER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

74000 years ago, when the supervulcano Toba erupted, the Homo Sapiens Sapiens remain only 500 persons only in Africa. It was important to survive the climate catastropha in the early paleolit. It was very important for the mankind, that the male are able to help to grow up a not genetical relative children to adult to save the Homo Sapiens Sapiens subspecies. Yes not the love alone but the affection and fondness became an evolutionary advantage. I hope this evolutionary advantage remains forever at the Homo Sapiens Sapiens species.

This is what this site is all about.

After sifting thru excrement you rarely find a diamond. This is one of those times. It makes me think that an Author of this caliber should not be publishing on this site. It only shows all other writers what they are lacking and how high they have to aim just to be on the same level.

Superbly written,thank you.

We are human being and some people can learn his/her mistake. Yes it is also true not every people can learn from the mistake. A cheater is cheater American way of saying is true for the serial cheaters as a lonely single woman who got a child from a unthinkable connection. This story is in my favorite collection and it will remain there.

I liked the fact that even though they didn't know each other

she did go around fucking his friend, she stayed true to her husband. nice story 5*s

TLW story

I suggest this type stories the TLW abreviation = TRUE LOVING WIFE stories. I hope the reader fellows will aprove this term.

Nice to see some readers liked the story.

It was frustrating most of the way in the insecurity of the male and the ways the author kept communication from happening, as if in LW stories everyone goes around talking to themselves but never to each other. Hard to reconcile everything in the last few paragraphs.

Aaah

Don't give up your day job. What trite, banal crap

Duna

take your friggin meds!

1st sentence to Harry

@ Harry (1) The most things can be shown by the Gauss curve or normal distrobution and the human behavioral may be approached similar way.
I divided the 10 sentences of my answer to Harry In Va in distict 10 stories.
1. Sentence leapyearguy „Strickly Business Ch. 02”
2. Sentence ohio „Visiting Richard Gronier”
3. Sentence DGHear „Another Chance”
4. Sentence K.K. „Flight Delay”
5. Sentence lucsmith „Let the Punishment Fit the Crime”
6. Sentence the Troubador „Wife Get Even”
7. Sentence FrancisMacomber „The Stairway to Haeven”
8. Sentence StangStar06 „Divorce and Future”
9. Sentence cpete „Blood from a Turnip”
10. Sentence Vulcez „How Are You”

I liked it and that's why I read...

I was afraid it was going the other way l love happy endings.

And we have a winner -

It did seem like you had built towards this and it would have been formulaic to have her leave him so i am glad you did it the way you did -

It is interesting that Ron could have met someone new etc without him knowing it but you left hat way - so be it.

Loved it

A wonderful storyline that I wished you had more fully developed. A little more development of the Holly character would have given the story more emotionally punch. We really don't get a glimpse of who she really is until the very end.

You had your main character asking the one question I was asking: "Why not just ask her or Ron? Wouldn't that make more sense?" How cold they have never discussed this issue after the marriage? Again, this added to the lack of depth early on.

Good writing. Five stars.

Some previous history...

There has to be a backstory that would explain why this man has so low a self-esteem that he expects his boss, to whom he had given nothing but loyalty and support would betray him callously, and his wife would collude in it and sever him from the child he had raised with love and kindness.

Was it his experiences in the Navy? Was it his childhood and upbringing?

Meet Mr, and Mrs Putz

Specially Rob, but Holly could also put Forest Gump to shame.

Story was way too weak on intellect.

Huh. Whaaaaa?

UDT Boy goes from semi-weekly beers with the Boss, to trusted second, and he doesn't know the boss has a new woman? We find out the wife is dead and no longer a threat? An ex-military boss springs succession ambush on UDT Boy without prior coordination? LOL. Too much, man. Too much.

There are a few plot-holes in this story, but the general idea behind the story - man offers suggestion and is roped in to help out by his boss -was a laugh a minute.

@Anon When the hero was bachelor he and his boss went to drink beer, when he became husband they stopped this habit. So the lack of the information for Tosha is understandable. This is not plot hole.
Naturally the majority of the men will not marry such pregnant girl as Holly was this Century. Kings from the mediavel or baroque ages did similar thing with their pregnant misstress and they looked for a newer misstress. This marriage was a friendly request for a temporary time.
The true plo hole however this, Who would pay the child support after divorce????

All is well...

All is well when ends well...

I'm a sucker!

5* but wish they would have had a child between them.

Sad in a way. If Rob is such a good guy, it'd be a pity if his genes didn't get passed on.

ROBBYS PARANOIA SKATED RIGHT THROUGH

the truth and loyalty, TK U MLJ LV NV