I Need To Know

Very loving

It may be the wrong one and you can delete this after the new one comes. ;) But this letter was and is beautiful. I enjoyed it very much. If the ending was rushed, I didn't see it, but perhaps I was in a hurry to see the ending and so it worked for me. I thought this was a beautiful piece and I enjoyed it very much. I will look for the replacement. Thanks for a great read. ~ Red.

great

the hardest thing would have been to never know the truth, one of your best yet.

i like heart of the hubby,he was strong

he was a strong man and it showed.good story.

Your Story

was mentioned on todays Author's Hangout New Story Review thread.

Wonderful Tale

Well written, thanks

Great read even if it's the wrong version

Good story and the ending is a bit rushed after the thorough buildup. If you hadn't mentioned it I never would have commented.
Thank you DG looking forward to the revised submittal. I am in wonder how you find the time and effort to do these wonderful entertaining stories.
As always with respect
PT

Wrong category

Should have been in "loving wives". This "non-erotic" category makes no more sense than "humor/satire".

I would have missed a good story except for the name of the author.

Good Story

Good Story. I look for your name in the new stories list, keep them coming.

Very good story

With a very good closure. It's hard to say a happy ending because of the deaths but we can say a very happy beginning!

A sweet and touching love story!!!

DG this should really have been in the "loving wives" category! Both wives clearly fitted into that category in the best and truest sense. As Nightowl22 said, “It's hard to say a happy ending because of the deaths but we can say a very happy beginning” I thought it an excellent ending! DG this might warrant a sequel, what do you think?

Beautiful Story

DG That was so moving i couldnt stop from crying i feel mickeys soul and Lydias soul will rest alot easier and God will welcome them both I lost my dad some time ago and i know what connie and Jerrie were going thru in there loss i hope you continue in your stories please keep up the great work
Pat Murray
Atlanta,Ga.

I can understand the compulsion for closure.

That sounds pretty much like what I would have done (personally, not as a writer).

I was in Ixtapa when this came out. I'd read it and thought that I had commented, but I clearly hadn't.

I'd forgotten what a well rounded, tightly written story this was.

I see it did get changed to LW. I think even if a wife (or husband) is even suspected of cheating it fits in Loving wives (personal opinion).

It nicely turned into a sweet romance - a great little extra.

Great job - one of my favorite of your stories!

Kind regards, Jack

I Loved that story

DH i love your story i wish other writers would write stories like yours you give your characters feeling and humour i cry and laugh when connie lost her husband and Jerry lost his family then finding out Lydia lost her baby i cried I`m 54 but never married and i hope you keep writing stories like this and maybe youlll win the nobel prize for great writer award.
Pat Murray
Atlanta,Ga.

Good story.....

Great story,really, but a nagging loose end is bothering me. What about a DNA on the baby in the womb? Her heightened passion at these opportune moments sound like a make up session for infidelity!

What I thought

strange was, why would his wife be writing this letter to him in a Doctors office, insted of just waiting for him to get home that evening to tell him the "Great" news. Just curious is all? Otherwise a good story. WoodButcher57

Damn ...

... why do you write such good stories. Thank you very much for good entertainment. Not much left and I've read all your stories.
Nucleus
*But ... the letter to her husband was strange.

Well done

Your writing is still as great as ever. Thank you for a good read. I missed you. PAPATOAD

I liked the story

mostly, but the letter I find as pure rubbish. Who would sit in a doctors office and write a letter to her husband about being pregnant, and just happen to have all the answers to all the questions that everybody had on their minds. This day in age we do have telephones, the letter is rubbish.

Very Fine Love Stories

Yes Stories... Have to admit that it was very well structured and interesting. You really are a fine writer!

Wow!!!!!!!!!!

wow!!!wow !!!!!wow!!!!!
what a story truely a loving wife story.Hat's off to you.

WTF??

This story sucked. Too many red herrings.

FEW STORIES...

...have brought tears to my eyes; this is one of them. I read this story last year, but rereading was almost as reading it for the first time. Your writing style, and the plot herein, made for a very intriguing story. Thanks for the priviledge of perusing it. Jim

Maybe a little different ending?

Instead of Derek making a pass at Lydia, the story goes. Derek was trying to buy a cabin to help reunite his and Connie's marriage. This may of showed a little bit of love in Connie's marriage also. Take it from there. Maybe to me the ending would of been just a little better. I did like the story very much. Thank you for writing it for all of us!

Very, Very Good

More of your wonderful work. Thank You

DG, you always write a good story.

Anytime I read anything of yours, I am never disappointed. I thought this was just an excellent story. This one really did have a good ending and I didn't see anything hurried about it. Thank you again for all that you do for this site and for all of us who truly appreciate your work.

finely crafted...

this is the first comment i've left in nearly 3 years of reading stories on literotica. your narrative left me weeping in tears, and very few authors here are skilled enough storytellers to have such a profound emotional impact on me.

thank you for such a touching, well written, and ultimately heart-warming tale. EB White once said that "writing in the first person is like painting with watercolors... only children and geniuses can do it well."

you, sir, are a genius.


myrrdin emrys

Now that was a true loving wife story

faithfull to the end, a wife that loved her husband above all. He had nothing to worry about. She never cheated and even though he lost his wife and son, he could truly move on. DG a great job

Fooled me...

I had EVERYTHING wrong -- Mikey's sperm donor, the fetus, Lydia's cheating. Everything! Made the story all that much more sadder for me but it was a 'good' kind of sad. Jerry was a good man.

Yea!

An excellent job of keeping us in the dark until the last. I must admit I was expecting the worst ... how nice it turned out to be the best!!

WOW! 5*****

That story was certainly original.

Tragic nut powerful story

This was a truly sad but powerful story about a man and a woman seeking closure regarding the deaths of their loved ones. Road accidents like that do happen too often... a single moment of letting slip your attention (perhaps distracted by her son?) and before you know it you're in a crash. Glad to see that the deceased were not cheating with each other – although Derek was a multiple cheater, just not with Lydia...

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good vehicle

a litle strange for all that to be in a letter with a "we are pregnant" notice, but it makes a clean ending with a faithful wife still being faithful.

True loving wives there -

And only one cheater in the bunch - the asshole -
Very nice job and a nice and very different perspective thank you so much for the change up -

Sad Story

It's nice to know that are some caring loving people who have no interest in anyone other than their spouse. It warms the cockles of my heart.

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guess....bill

TORN!

I enjoyed this story, which held my attention from start to nearly finish. From reading the letter onwards I did something I've not done for over 30 years since my parents died, I wept,. No! I sobbed. I was torn apart. You released emotions that I had forgotten about.

Great Story!!****

Very different and very entertaining. Thanks for sharing.

Good finish

It was great to see a story of suspicion that was baseless. That it was written in this category always leads the reader to believe the worst. It was nice to see the deft redirect and turn into a truly Loving Wives tale.

Double reverse

DG was right the first time...this is Non-Erotic...maybe Romance. Neither Sweetie was the LEAST bit adventuresome. Even Derek's conquests seem to be unmarried, and we never meet them. Not LW!

There is too much deliberate author-manipulation towards making this look suspicious. No one in Sweetie's office is told she is showing Derek cottage-type properties nor is Hubby told...but she usually did tell people who she was showing what!

The letter is totally bogus...the fact she wrote one, then the detail included...even client's hitting on her earlier. This would make a GOOD Romance novel. The embryo removal is HIGHLY unlikely. Most injuries which would damage an embryo would kill Mommy outright. Medical over-billing or opportunity for greater pathos?

Bombshell ending, who writes letters in a Doctor's office?

Very Moody and dramatic story frothed with intrigue and suspicion. The ending was warm and fuzzy for the poor lonely forlorn couple and kids. The writer knows how to play the heart strings and he did the job masterfully in this sad tale. Unfortunately the pussyhound created a situation in which he lost his son due to his wife's insecurities about being alone with the bastard. Derek was a very despicable character that created a great deal of angst in a very brief accounting in this story due to the author's powerful placement. Thank you DG Hear!

good narration but....

The whole idea of the letter seems highly absurd. Why would she be writting him a letter, its not as if she knew she was going to die so that she had to write a letter because she would not be able to talk ti him personally, later on. Its also very unbelievable that the later just contained explainations to all the doubts you raised inthe protagonist's mind. Atmost, people write down small memos or sticky notes, not all-explaining-tying-the-loose-ends sort of letters. It also doesn't explain the wife's dying words.

So, good narration but paper thin plot

my opinion

Hope, It seems to me that DG included the letter as a way to clear up the suspicions about a possible affair. And allow the strong, emotional ending for this poignant story. That is this is a fictional story and from my own writing experience I can tell you two things.

First, some stories, situations, characters will push a storyline in completely unexpected directions. Sometimes this current just carries me along, willy-nilly.

Second, the most difficult part of writing a story is to create a strong ending. Even major, paid authors, with all those degrees and awards and best-sellers fail. I am of the self-serving, egotistical belief that my best writing is when I start with a clever title and a strong ending. All the rest of my job is too fill the inbetween from start to finish.

Loved it

Very well done. Five stars.

non erotic

Worth your time reading it.

Too much over thinking the letter -

She did not write it at the office she had it there -

She wrote it to leave at the house to explain where she was and why she was doing something odd (taking her child with her). It gave him the good news she was so excited about as well, not that strange folks -

It was a good vehicle to use to end this story which needed an ending with finality - it could well have been in her purse but then the story would gone for about 4 paragraphs right? So the author had her forget it with her checkbook at the doctor;s office -

It works let it alone -

Enjoy the story for what is important.

Satisfying tale with an upbeat ending.

I do enjoy life affirming tales, that celebrate commitment to life and family support.
This one threw in some questions and mystery to add to the plot and generate interest. Enjoyed it. Thanks, DG Hear! Dan

Well Done

Very satisfying ending, just enough hints of a possible affair without it being an obvious red herring that would have made the ending seem phony.

Minor Detail

Maybe things are different in your culture or area, but in my experience wakes are held BEFORE the funeral.

People will usually gather after the burial, but those aren't technically wakes.

I thought this was a beautifully written story, but I don't understand why Connie had any claim to the 300k personal injury clause on Lydia's insurance.

wake

The tradition of wakes came about because people would lapse into deep unconsciousness and be mistaken for dead and be buried.
The wake was to give a chance for them to wake up before being buried instead of after.
That is why they are always before the funeral.