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Glad
I was very excited to see a new submission by you. You are one of the best writers on the site; able to convey so much with so little.
BRILLANT
"There are no words in any language that could convey my feelings..."
so proud that you got a story up after a dry spell. you should always write, even when you've not the time.
'oways'
v~
Exposed
Emmm... delicious. So pleased you are writing again.
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Loved it, Lucky! So glad you're writing again. :)
Your story
has been mentioned in today's Author's Hangout New Story Review Thread.
Exquisite.
Beautifully told. The usually hidden side of ecstasy, that of watching your lover looking at you knowing you're watching her in her most vulnerable self in total surrender, is a joy I suspect few know. May they all be as inspired by your story as I was held in its telling. Magnificent, Lucky! The quintessential short lesbian story!
Beautiful
Oh, hmmm, moving, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, beautiful, and beautiful. I want my lover to describe me like that; to want me like that; to need me like that; to say it like that...everytime. Oh goodness, exquisite, beautiful, beautiful.
Amazing
Prose poetry and sexy as hell. Reading this made my day. :rose:
Wooba! Wooba!!!
You did it to me again, Lucky. Great story, great characters and and hot sex. Nice job.
thank you, lucky...
I'm glad to see you writing again, hon...and writing as beautifully as ever, if not better! It's been a long time since I saw such raw emotion described so visibly. GOD... sometimes you make me wish I were a woman! We men seem far too coarse and vulgar sometimes! lol Seriously, nice job. ~Woody
Oh Holy God...
Welcome back, Lucky! Wow! This story made my glasses steam up, it was so hot and raw! Incredibly beautiful and erotic. Congratulations on your triumphant return.
More...
This could be the start of a great series... More photographs please...
Sweet
A lovely story. It caught a beautiful moment so exquisitely.
I was fascinated by the change in the central character as well, the way her barriers were broken and the passion that exploded forth.
Very nice work.
sigh...
I have so very much missed your writing, welcome back!
This was so worth the wait! Beautifully crafted!
Abs.
DAYUM!
Beautifully written, Lucky. Absolutely stunning.
Well captured!
This one will stick with me.
Incredible
That was beautiful. You did a superb job of painting real people and not the caricatures I so often read here. Your words were poetic, lyrical and very moving. What passion!
Whoa!
God that was so hot! I love reading about two women who are in love. Fantasticly written.
A Triumphant Return
Welcome back after your long absence. Hope you'll be contributing more stories soon. Your writing is both evocative and sensual. A definite cut above many of the submissions on this site. Very well done!
Asia was right...
It was incredible! I felt completely enveloped in the rich, vivid imagery. I'm definitely going to have to read more of this person's work!
holy wow...
I cant breathe!
that was phenominal! i love how Natalie describes the photo, and then how she makes those suspected barriers around Asia fall. I love how Asia was scared abou letting go. Two characters in mad love, the story was made from the point i realised that. Fantastic.
Oh damn!
It's addictive, your writing. I've come back to it after a long time. I don't know why I keep away. Oh ok wait, I do know. It is so pure, so lovely, so loving and so emotional that it creeps into places in my heart that I want to keep closed. I could so totally understand the vulnerability in Asia. Sigh. Your writing is a reflection of the wonderful person you are. Keep writing.
Amazing
That was an absolutely amazing story. It was so beautifully written. That kinda messes up real life because I know that will never happen ; )
Wow!
Beautifully written. The characters were very real and the passion irresistable. Please keep writing!
Brilliant
beautiful
this is the most emotional story here. it's beautiful
This is beautiful.
Wow, just wow...
What a Story
Very Beautiful, as in magic. Thank you for sharing.
Style
Your writing style and use of language are superb.
Oh, wow...
So vivid and real, this was a beautiful story.
so short...
yet has more emotion than many of the stories on here. Definite 5 stars from me!
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