Heck, that's mostly what I write. Really short stories.
But I don't like fluff. I spent three quarters of the story hearing how to fill forms with concrete. I didn't learn about the man. I didn't learn about the woman. I didn't learn anything about the situation except that he is having a bad day.
There was one really brilliant idea in this story, though
I loved the fact he shot his shotgun into her closet of clothes. I can just imagine how many of her outfits were ruined and can she really complain? Not particularly.
Some women have closer relationships to their clothes then their husbands...and replacing them would cost quite a bit. Too bad the court system will likely take his cigarette money in prison to pay her back for the damages.
Yeah, they are not too kind to cheaters or those they cheat with.
Many years ago I was told of a cement truck driver who had a chance to stop by his house in the middle of the day, of course his wife was not alone.
Cliche I know, but cliches become cliches by being so often true.
So the truck driver filled the other mans sports car with concrete all the way to the top of the doors.
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Anonymous06/18/14
ooohh boy
Now that is a great flash tale, short, to the point & great revenge. Pity he didn't have any quick dry cement that he could have thrown over them, then put them outside.
5*****
I've not heard of a 'flash' tale before, but this certainly fits the definition. It is extremely short and to the point, as in "bye, bitch." I enjoyed it as it was written. I haven't rated it yet, but be assured I will apply a commensurate score.
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Anonymous07/24/14
You left off the important part of the ending
Where she calls the cops, has him arrested then takes him to the cleaners and get the house and every cent of money he has while he's in prison in the divorce case. Then she and the guy with the bigger cock can move in while he gets to find out how it feels to be filled with cock in the slammer, probably will find out he likes it as much as his wife does.
what can I say. straight, clean, no muss, no fuss. unfortunately, discharging a fire arm in city limits is a crime, and you know some of his neighbors will be making the call. not that I agree with that. he might have been better off just blasting them in the crotch, when he caught them, claim temp. insanity.
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Anonymous06/24/15
Maybe, maybe not
Getting arrested for discharging a firearm all depends on if his neighborhood is actually in the city limits. The story doesn't say but he could live in an unincorporated subdivision, so no crime. Anon says he would be in prison, Unless he actually fired at them there is still no crime.
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Anonymous03/08/16
Evidently Not All Communities Are The Same
I hear gunfire in my little town all the time. I hardly ever hear sirens. A teenager fired at squirrels in his back yard. I have shot stray dogs that were attacking my dog. Police never even came to check. Laws differ.
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Anonymous06/29/16
Yep
And that's all she wrote. Let the sorry cheaters fend for themselves.
English
Well.....I've had one of those days before......
Fortunately it was pouring concrete and not a cheating wife. Funny story and it had me laughing at the end.
THE HUMOR AND THE GIST
of this story and the ending makes it good. And to piss of a concrete worker. Bad Idea. TK U MLJ LV NV
a naked truth
I loved the ending.
I gave it 4 stars...
funny stuff, I really liked it.
SHORT AND SWEET
NOW THE LAWYERS GET INTO THE ACT, SO MUCH FOR JUSTICE AT LEAST THERE AFFAIR IS BUSTED. NO KILLINGS SWEET REVENGE
Good Read!!
Thanks for sharing. Short and to the point!!
Brilliant! Just friggin brilliant!!
More please and soon. There are too many WACC writers gravitating to this section
I don't mind short stories
Heck, that's mostly what I write. Really short stories.
But I don't like fluff. I spent three quarters of the story hearing how to fill forms with concrete. I didn't learn about the man. I didn't learn about the woman. I didn't learn anything about the situation except that he is having a bad day.
Thank you for writing.
Is it ursusRherer or horse's rear?
What a fucked up analysis for a good story.
There was one really brilliant idea in this story, though
I loved the fact he shot his shotgun into her closet of clothes. I can just imagine how many of her outfits were ruined and can she really complain? Not particularly.
Some women have closer relationships to their clothes then their husbands...and replacing them would cost quite a bit. Too bad the court system will likely take his cigarette money in prison to pay her back for the damages.
Nice.
Nice. The bitch got what she deserved. We need more such stories.
Enjoyed it
Nice flash story. A little tedious at the beginning. Thanks.
Excellent!
My kind of story !
But you should have made it longer.
Only a WIFE-FUCKER, a WIMP, or a CHEATING WIFE will call this an "I HATE WOMEN STORY"
A galaxy of stars!
Wow
How did I ever miss this classic. A lesson here: Don't mess with a cement guy who had a bad day.
OH YEAH
cement guys
Yeah, they are not too kind to cheaters or those they cheat with.
Many years ago I was told of a cement truck driver who had a chance to stop by his house in the middle of the day, of course his wife was not alone.
Cliche I know, but cliches become cliches by being so often true.
So the truck driver filled the other mans sports car with concrete all the way to the top of the doors.
ooohh boy
Now that is a great flash tale, short, to the point & great revenge. Pity he didn't have any quick dry cement that he could have thrown over them, then put them outside.
5*****
5 stars all the way!
Now that was a flash story! I love it.
See YA!...not.
I've not heard of a 'flash' tale before, but this certainly fits the definition. It is extremely short and to the point, as in "bye, bitch." I enjoyed it as it was written. I haven't rated it yet, but be assured I will apply a commensurate score.
You left off the important part of the ending
Where she calls the cops, has him arrested then takes him to the cleaners and get the house and every cent of money he has while he's in prison in the divorce case. Then she and the guy with the bigger cock can move in while he gets to find out how it feels to be filled with cock in the slammer, probably will find out he likes it as much as his wife does.
and that
is how it should be done
If he had an otherwise clean record -
He would likely get away with that considering the stress he suffered -
I hope so lol
good
what can I say. straight, clean, no muss, no fuss. unfortunately, discharging a fire arm in city limits is a crime, and you know some of his neighbors will be making the call. not that I agree with that. he might have been better off just blasting them in the crotch, when he caught them, claim temp. insanity.
Maybe, maybe not
Getting arrested for discharging a firearm all depends on if his neighborhood is actually in the city limits. The story doesn't say but he could live in an unincorporated subdivision, so no crime. Anon says he would be in prison, Unless he actually fired at them there is still no crime.
Evidently Not All Communities Are The Same
I hear gunfire in my little town all the time. I hardly ever hear sirens. A teenager fired at squirrels in his back yard. I have shot stray dogs that were attacking my dog. Police never even came to check. Laws differ.
Yep
And that's all she wrote. Let the sorry cheaters fend for themselves.
Taught A Lesson
Straight to the point & lesson to all on how to treat cheaters
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