....has promise. Very hot, as long as you don't think too much about the lack of detailed sex at the end. The warming up and horseplay that lead to the sex were very sexy. Real smut without any need for a sequel, though there is some opening. I particularly like how oblivious the girlfriend was. Not too realistic, except for with very self-absorbed people. Evidently, everyone else had fun. A naughty tale, but nothing more than stroke.
A little lengthy for the ending of all of you fucking her and cuming in her. I would have thought that the jealous Lisa would have also joined in on the fun, too, perhaps trying to wrest some attention as well? The ending was far too short for the length of the horseplaying around, even tho all 3 of you fucked her.
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Anonymous06/02/06
Great story
I love the build up, the teasing. It seemed like it could be a true story.
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Anonymous06/03/06
Hot and steamy
Nice story, I liked the 'realisum' of it though as others have said could have given just a little more at the end, but the I guess you were knackered by then . :) Keep up the good work.
English
Out of balance
All that buildup and only 1/2 paragraph for the fucking! How about a followup & then after the other guys leave?
A simple, sexy stroke story.....
....has promise. Very hot, as long as you don't think too much about the lack of detailed sex at the end. The warming up and horseplay that lead to the sex were very sexy. Real smut without any need for a sequel, though there is some opening. I particularly like how oblivious the girlfriend was. Not too realistic, except for with very self-absorbed people. Evidently, everyone else had fun. A naughty tale, but nothing more than stroke.
I will mention it on the AH.
Good, but could be better
A little lengthy for the ending of all of you fucking her and cuming in her. I would have thought that the jealous Lisa would have also joined in on the fun, too, perhaps trying to wrest some attention as well? The ending was far too short for the length of the horseplaying around, even tho all 3 of you fucked her.
Great story
I love the build up, the teasing. It seemed like it could be a true story.
Hot and steamy
Nice story, I liked the 'realisum' of it though as others have said could have given just a little more at the end, but the I guess you were knackered by then . :) Keep up the good work.
Disappointed only story by author
Disappointed only story by author
Hot
Chapter two please ......
SWIMMING...STROKING....AND SHARING
a mixture for an unhappy marriage, TK U MLJ LV NV
Great! Chapter two, please.
Excellent development of the story. Would love to read more with all of these characters or new ones.
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