by Lesly Sloan
Even though I am a hetero-male, I found this story to be very sweet and tender. I liked the development of the story that was very smooth and progressively more intimate.
I will look for more of your stories.
Pleasant stroy about Lesbian begginings, since it was written so long ago I was expecting it to be a sequel, not a repeat
As a writer,i appreciate honest feedback. I hope you do as well. I found the story to be too.... technical and inexperienced. There wasn't much sensuality and it was a little porny. Try to expand your vocabulary, sensually and refrain from words and phrases like "crotch", "vagina," "cunt," "perinium," or pussy juices." There are so many other erotic words out there that would incite the feelings i think you're going for.